The conflict was between Shasha and the baseball player.
Shots, dialouge, action: 1 The scene of the playser walking to the baseball field. 2 The panning of the field. 3 THe shot where the baseball player hits the ball 4 Demi walking across the field.
You could add music, sound effects, and and fix the editing job to add to the rising actiong. Thje climax occured when the baseball player ran away. During the resolution Shasha is walking away with the props and then she talks to the car owner. You could add to the resolution by adding some music and also making the end result MORE oragnic. It didn't seem like something that would truly happen in real life.
I especially liked the shot where the two ators are walking to the baseball field with the props. It helps add to the organicness of the sotyr and plot. I don't think any shots need to be added. Just fix the editing when the baseball player hits then ball and when he runs away.
6 for the editing. There were wierd camera shots that didn't make everything flow and some parts were choppy.
We noticed between the shot of the two walking to the field and the panning of the field there was a straight cut.
There was no music. Adding a sound effect after the hit of the ball to show it hit a car would help. Adding music to demi walking away would add to the tension.
To me the title in the begninng did not add anything to the film. It just showed us quickly what the title was. There were no credits.
Overall the film was okay. If they were to work on the editing and music it would make the film better.
The conflict was between Shasha and the baseball player.
Shots, dialouge, action: 1 The scene of the playser walking to the baseball field. 2 The panning of the field. 3 THe shot where the baseball player hits the ball 4 Demi walking across the field.
You could add music, sound effects, and and fix the editing job to add to the rising actiong. Thje climax occured when the baseball player ran away. During the resolution Shasha is walking away with the props and then she talks to the car owner. You could add to the resolution by adding some music and also making the end result MORE oragnic. It didn't seem like something that would truly happen in real life.
I especially liked the shot where the two ators are walking to the baseball field with the props. It helps add to the organicness of the sotyr and plot. I don't think any shots need to be added. Just fix the editing when the baseball player hits then ball and when he runs away.
6 for the editing. There were wierd camera shots that didn't make everything flow and some parts were choppy.
We noticed between the shot of the two walking to the field and the panning of the field there was a straight cut.
There was no music. Adding a sound effect after the hit of the ball to show it hit a car would help. Adding music to demi walking away would add to the tension.
To me the title in the begninng did not add anything to the film. It just showed us quickly what the title was. There were no credits.
Overall the film was okay. If they were to work on the editing and music it would make the film better.
The conflict was between whether they should let the car owner know they broke their car window or not. The shots that contributed to the rising action was when Demi and Jorge started running. The climax occured when Demi decided to tell the car owner that they broke his window.We especially liked the shot where Jorge is telling Demi that he cannot let the car owner know about the window and then just runs of. We rate your editing a 6; use cleaner shots and make the video flow smoother. We suggest you guys use music when Demi and Jorge run off to add tension to the overall effect of the film. Your titels and credits wher good. Overall good job! -Luis and Lizzy
The conflict was between telling the truth and not telling the truth. Here are the shots, dialog, and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1. Dialog: When George says “Let’s get out of here” 2. Dialog: When Demi says “Wait, shouldn’t we tell the person” 3. Dialog: When George says “No way no one saw us do it…” 4. Action: When they are first running away. Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising actions: 1. You could have someone be a witness to the accident. 2. You could also have the car alarm go off which brings attention to them and the truck. The climax occurred when Demi stays at the Baseball field when Jorge decides to run away because he is scared. The resolution is when Demi admits to Alicia that she hit her car, and Alicia accepts her apology without making her pay for the damages. You could add to the resolution by making Jorge come back and feel bad because Demi confessed instead of him. Basically, what happens is Jorge confesses and stops Demi from taking the blame this would help the audience understand that confessing, and owning up to the truth is better than your own self-pride. We especially like the back-and forth shots of Demi and Jorge pitching/hitting the baseball, back-and forth shots of Demi and Jorge pitching/hitting the baseball, because it helped emphasize the idea that the hitting and pitching was in actual time (realistic). We think you should replace the shot when Jorge and Demi are having the conversation in the beginning (the two-shot with the rule of thirds). The new shot would still be a two-shot, but maybe instead fix the angle because the angles alternate from one side of the characters to the other. On a scale of 1-10, we give the editing a 5. One edit we would change was when Jorge is trying to leave because there are about three clips that are cut off. Jorge’s dialogue and facial expressions are very choppy, and usually cut too late in the beginning of the clips and too early in the end of the clips. We noticed that between the two-shot conversation and the transition onto the track near the baseball field, you used a straight cut. We would have used a dissolve, or a fade to black instead because it was very confusing that the locations changed so suddenly without a proper transition. There was no music in this video. The places I think music could be added is in the beginning of the video when Jorge and Demi first have there conversation. I think it would be a good idea to add some fast-paced, low music to imply that there are young yet civil with each other. Another place sound-effects could be added is when the ball hits the windshield, possibly a car alarm sound as Jorge and Demi run away. Another place where you could use music is when Demi confesses to Alicia that she hit the car. The title of the film was “The Fly Ball”, which gave us an introduction to what the film would be about. It grabbed our attention because the fluorescence of the blue around the title was fantastic. The only other suggestion we have for the opening title is to center it. There was only one title to work with (the opening title). There were No Credits, so you may want to include those next time.
Overall, we thought you film sent a good message about honesty. What we liked best was the acting of Demi and Jorge because they are rarely seen in front of the camera. Our Strongest suggestion is that you include music, and definitely fix the editing/ cuts because they are a little choppy and exclude some of the essence of the film. -Bree and Liz
cristabel-jessica the conflict was between the girl and herself. values- honesty shots,dialog, action 1, the scene when the player walks with the girl to the field. 2. the scene where the boy hits the ball. 3. the shot where the boy runs away. 4. when the girl walks across the field. suggestions. 1. you could do more closeups. 2. you could also add the sound of shaterring glass. the climax occured when the girl goes to talk to the owner of the car. during the resolution the girl apologizes to the owner of the car and the owner forgives her and tells her its ok she doesnt have to pay. we especialy like the shot where the boy runs away but the girl stays because it helps emphasize the idea of good vs. bad choices. on a scale of 1-10 we rate your edditng a 6 we noticed your clips didnt flowe too well. ther was no music. To me the title in the begninng did not add anything to the film. It just showed us quickly what the title was. There were no credits. overall we liked the conflict of the video what we liked best was the acting..
The conflict was between telling the truth and lying. The actions that lead to the rising action was Jorge running away. The climax occurred when Demi starting walking in the direction towards the parking lot. The resolution is when Demi talks to Alicia about her windshield. You could add to the resolution by having Jorge come back and explain what happened. We especially liked the shot when Jorge hit the fly ball and realizes what he did because it helped emphasize the conflict. We would give the editing a 8. On edit would be when Jorge is talking to Demi after he hit the ball before he runs away, the out-point is too early. You should add the sound of the windshield cracking. No music was used. The title reflected the content. It did grab our attention because it was bright. You need to center the title. There were no credits in this film. Overall, we thought you film was well done. What we liked best was the storyline. Our strongest suggestion is that you add the sound of the windshield and add credits at the end. Zachary Andrade and Sam Tapia
Feedback given by Michael and Cody The Conflict is between honesty and lying. 1. Used over the shoulder shot 2. Dialogue introduces characters 3. “Hey Sasha can you help me with my hitting?” 4. “Yes No Problem!” Demi
You could add more dialogue to help your rising action. You could add more scenes to add up to the climax. The Climax occurred when Jorge hits the car. During the resolution Jorge ran away and Demi had to go tell the person that his their car was hit. You could add to the resolution by creating more drama in the last scenes. This would help us get the impression that the driver was mad or not. We liked the shot of Jorge running away. This helped us get the idea that Jorge was fleeing the scene. We think you could have added one more shot of Jorge running away. This new shot would be a extreme long shot of Jorge and it would tell us where he is going. We rate the editing a 7. One edit you could fix is him hitting the baseball. We noticed that between the baseball being hit and going to the car you used a fade.
There was no music or Credits. We should put those in. Overall it is a good video but needs a little fixing.
Conflict is betwwen the baseball player and sasha. 1. The effect of when saha and baseball player having all their equipment 2. 2hen baseball player hits the ball 3. Baseball player says "let's get out of here" 4. An action would be when they start running away.
I know you guys had coyright issues on the music,but adding the music to the film would really work out. The climax occured when baseball player ran away from the scence. the resolution would be sahsha going to the owner of the car to apologize. really work on adding an effect on the scence where the window gets cracked.
What I liked best was the beging on how he approached sasha it was very natural. you're guys personality was in it loved it! No shots need to be added but I do recommend you guys make the baseball scence more smooth like.
Editing I would give a 6.5 as I said above you guys had a bit of choppy scences to the film.
There was a straightcut when both actors where walking to the field.
No music during the production , adding music and the special effectto the window would make things pop.
I don't think the title fits with the storylinee. Also you guys need credits in your film.
Working on the editing such as making it flow together, titles, and music. You guys would be good to go.
RYAN AND JULISSA The conflict was between the girl and the boy.
1. The baseball player walking up to Sasha and asking for help with baseball. 2. The boy says to throw the ball higher. 3. The girl pitching low and suddenly throwing the ball hard. 4. A swing at the ball going far.
Suggestions: 1. You could give more spacing in between cuts and less space between other cuts. 2. You could also add a resoultion to show that the boy learned a lesson somehow.
The climax occured when the boy decides to run away after hitting a car and scuddadling out of there. During the resoultion the girl decides to go and come clean about hitting the car and proving that you will get in less trouble by telling the truth and owning up to your responsibilites. You could add to the resolution by having the boy show up and say something about how it was wrong to run away and he's sorry. This would help give us the impression that the boy learned a lesson or something like that. Camera Shots: We especially like the medium shot of the establishing shot, because it helped emphasize the idea that they were practicing at a real baseball field. We think that you might add a shot right after the ball hits the car to see the damage. This would help the idea that a car really got damaged. Edits: On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 7. One edit we would change was after the boy talks about "getting out of there" after he hit the ball. We thought the out point was set to early or late because we couldn't clearly understand what he was saying. We noticed that between your establishing shot and first shot of the boy holding the bat you used a fade to black. We would have used exactly what you used. Good job! Music/Sound: There was no music but good job! Titles&Credits: Yes, I think this title was very appealing and stood out to the viewers. The titles were not centered and need to be fixed. They were pretty effective except for the fact that they were not centered. Credits: There were no credits. Great job! Overall: Overall, we thought your film was great and a good message and point to prove. What we liked best was the dedication you put to your characters. Our strongest suggestion is that you clean up the cuts to make it flow smoother. AMAZING JOB GUYS!
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The conflict was between Shasha and the baseball player.
ReplyDeleteShots, dialouge, action:
1 The scene of the playser walking to the baseball field.
2 The panning of the field.
3 THe shot where the baseball player hits the ball
4 Demi walking across the field.
You could add music, sound effects, and and fix the editing job to add to the rising actiong. Thje climax occured when the baseball player ran away.
During the resolution Shasha is walking away with the props and then she talks to the car owner.
You could add to the resolution by adding some music and also making the end result MORE oragnic. It didn't seem like something that would truly happen in real life.
I especially liked the shot where the two ators are walking to the baseball field with the props. It helps add to the organicness of the sotyr and plot.
I don't think any shots need to be added. Just fix the editing when the baseball player hits then ball and when he runs away.
6 for the editing. There were wierd camera shots that didn't make everything flow and some parts were choppy.
We noticed between the shot of the two walking to the field and the panning of the field there was a straight cut.
There was no music.
Adding a sound effect after the hit of the ball to show it hit a car would help. Adding music to demi walking away would add to the tension.
To me the title in the begninng did not add anything to the film. It just showed us quickly what the title was.
There were no credits.
Overall the film was okay. If they were to work on the editing and music it would make the film better.
The conflict was between Shasha and the baseball player.
ReplyDeleteShots, dialouge, action:
1 The scene of the playser walking to the baseball field.
2 The panning of the field.
3 THe shot where the baseball player hits the ball
4 Demi walking across the field.
You could add music, sound effects, and and fix the editing job to add to the rising actiong. Thje climax occured when the baseball player ran away.
During the resolution Shasha is walking away with the props and then she talks to the car owner.
You could add to the resolution by adding some music and also making the end result MORE oragnic. It didn't seem like something that would truly happen in real life.
I especially liked the shot where the two ators are walking to the baseball field with the props. It helps add to the organicness of the sotyr and plot.
I don't think any shots need to be added. Just fix the editing when the baseball player hits then ball and when he runs away.
6 for the editing. There were wierd camera shots that didn't make everything flow and some parts were choppy.
We noticed between the shot of the two walking to the field and the panning of the field there was a straight cut.
There was no music.
Adding a sound effect after the hit of the ball to show it hit a car would help. Adding music to demi walking away would add to the tension.
To me the title in the begninng did not add anything to the film. It just showed us quickly what the title was.
There were no credits.
Overall the film was okay. If they were to work on the editing and music it would make the film better.
The conflict was between whether they should let the car owner know they broke their car window or not. The shots that contributed to the rising action was when Demi and Jorge started running. The climax occured when Demi decided to tell the car owner that they broke his window.We especially liked the shot where Jorge is telling Demi that he cannot let the car owner know about the window and then just runs of. We rate your editing a 6; use cleaner shots and make the video flow smoother. We suggest you guys use music when Demi and Jorge run off to add tension to the overall effect of the film. Your titels and credits wher good. Overall good job!
ReplyDelete-Luis and Lizzy
The conflict was between telling the truth and not telling the truth.
ReplyDeleteHere are the shots, dialog, and actions that contributed to the rising action:
1. Dialog: When George says “Let’s get out of here”
2. Dialog: When Demi says “Wait, shouldn’t we tell the person”
3. Dialog: When George says “No way no one saw us do it…”
4. Action: When they are first running away.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising actions:
1. You could have someone be a witness to the accident.
2. You could also have the car alarm go off which brings attention to them and the truck.
The climax occurred when Demi stays at the Baseball field when Jorge decides to run away because he is scared.
The resolution is when Demi admits to Alicia that she hit her car, and Alicia accepts her apology without making her pay for the damages.
You could add to the resolution by making Jorge come back and feel bad because Demi confessed instead of him. Basically, what happens is Jorge confesses and stops Demi from taking the blame this would help the audience understand that confessing, and owning up to the truth is better than your own self-pride.
We especially like the back-and forth shots of Demi and Jorge pitching/hitting the baseball, back-and forth shots of Demi and Jorge pitching/hitting the baseball, because it helped emphasize the idea that the hitting and pitching was in actual time (realistic).
We think you should replace the shot when Jorge and Demi are having the conversation in the beginning (the two-shot with the rule of thirds). The new shot would still be a two-shot, but maybe instead fix the angle because the angles alternate from one side of the characters to the other.
On a scale of 1-10, we give the editing a 5. One edit we would change was when Jorge is trying to leave because there are about three clips that are cut off. Jorge’s dialogue and facial expressions are very choppy, and usually cut too late in the beginning of the clips and too early in the end of the clips.
We noticed that between the two-shot conversation and the transition onto the track near the baseball field, you used a straight cut. We would have used a dissolve, or a fade to black instead because it was very confusing that the locations changed so suddenly without a proper transition.
There was no music in this video. The places I think music could be added is in the beginning of the video when Jorge and Demi first have there conversation. I think it would be a good idea to add some fast-paced, low music to imply that there are young yet civil with each other. Another place sound-effects could be added is when the ball hits the windshield, possibly a car alarm sound as Jorge and Demi run away. Another place where you could use music is when Demi confesses to Alicia that she hit the car.
The title of the film was “The Fly Ball”, which gave us an introduction to what the film would be about. It grabbed our attention because the fluorescence of the blue around the title was fantastic. The only other suggestion we have for the opening title is to center it. There was only one title to work with (the opening title). There were No Credits, so you may want to include those next time.
Overall, we thought you film sent a good message about honesty. What we liked best was the acting of Demi and Jorge because they are rarely seen in front of the camera. Our Strongest suggestion is that you include music, and definitely fix the editing/ cuts because they are a little choppy and exclude some of the essence of the film.
-Bree and Liz
cristabel-jessica
ReplyDeletethe conflict was between the girl and herself. values- honesty
shots,dialog, action
1, the scene when the player walks with the girl to the field.
2. the scene where the boy hits the ball.
3. the shot where the boy runs away.
4. when the girl walks across the field.
suggestions.
1. you could do more closeups.
2. you could also add the sound of shaterring glass.
the climax occured when the girl goes to talk to the owner of the car.
during the resolution the girl apologizes to the owner of the car and the owner forgives her and tells her its ok she doesnt have to pay.
we especialy like the shot where the boy runs away but the girl stays because it helps emphasize the idea of good vs. bad choices.
on a scale of 1-10 we rate your edditng a 6 we noticed your clips didnt flowe too well.
ther was no music.
To me the title in the begninng did not add anything to the film. It just showed us quickly what the title was.
There were no credits.
overall we liked the conflict of the video what we liked best was the acting..
The conflict was between telling the truth and lying. The actions that lead to the rising action was Jorge running away. The climax occurred when Demi starting walking in the direction towards the parking lot. The resolution is when Demi talks to Alicia about her windshield. You could add to the resolution by having Jorge come back and explain what happened. We especially liked the shot when Jorge hit the fly ball and realizes what he did because it helped emphasize the conflict. We would give the editing a 8. On edit would be when Jorge is talking to Demi after he hit the ball before he runs away, the out-point is too early. You should add the sound of the windshield cracking. No music was used. The title reflected the content. It did grab our attention because it was bright. You need to center the title. There were no credits in this film. Overall, we thought you film was well done. What we liked best was the storyline. Our strongest suggestion is that you add the sound of the windshield and add credits at the end.
ReplyDeleteZachary Andrade and Sam Tapia
Feedback given by Michael and Cody
ReplyDeleteThe Conflict is between honesty and lying.
1. Used over the shoulder shot
2. Dialogue introduces characters
3. “Hey Sasha can you help me with my hitting?”
4. “Yes No Problem!” Demi
You could add more dialogue to help your rising action. You could add more scenes to add up to the climax.
The Climax occurred when Jorge hits the car. During the resolution Jorge ran away and Demi had to go tell the person that his their car was hit. You could add to the resolution by creating more drama in the last scenes. This would help us get the impression that the driver was mad or not. We liked the shot of Jorge running away. This helped us get the idea that Jorge was fleeing the scene. We think you could have added one more shot of Jorge running away. This new shot would be a extreme long shot of Jorge and it would tell us where he is going.
We rate the editing a 7. One edit you could fix is him hitting the baseball. We noticed that between the baseball being hit and going to the car you used a fade.
There was no music or Credits. We should put those in. Overall it is a good video but needs a little fixing.
Conflict is betwwen the baseball player and sasha.
ReplyDelete1. The effect of when saha and baseball player having all their equipment
2. 2hen baseball player hits the ball
3. Baseball player says "let's get out of here"
4. An action would be when they start running away.
I know you guys had coyright issues on the music,but adding the music to the film would really work out. The climax occured when baseball player ran away from the scence.
the resolution would be sahsha going to the owner of the car to apologize.
really work on adding an effect on the scence where the window gets cracked.
What I liked best was the beging on how he approached sasha it was very natural. you're guys personality was in it loved it! No shots need to be added but I do recommend you guys make the baseball scence more smooth like.
Editing I would give a 6.5 as I said above you
guys had a bit of choppy scences to the film.
There was a straightcut when both actors where walking to the field.
No music during the production , adding music and the special effectto the window would make things pop.
I don't think the title fits with the storylinee. Also you guys need credits in your film.
Working on the editing such as making it flow together, titles, and music. You guys would be good to go.
RYAN AND JULISSA
ReplyDeleteThe conflict was between the girl and the boy.
1. The baseball player walking up to Sasha and asking for help with baseball.
2. The boy says to throw the ball higher.
3. The girl pitching low and suddenly throwing the ball hard.
4. A swing at the ball going far.
Suggestions:
1. You could give more spacing in between cuts and less space between other cuts.
2. You could also add a resoultion to show that the boy learned a lesson somehow.
The climax occured when the boy decides to run away after hitting a car and scuddadling out of there.
During the resoultion the girl decides to go and come clean about hitting the car and proving that you will get in less trouble by telling the truth and owning up to your responsibilites.
You could add to the resolution by having the boy show up and say something about how it was wrong to run away and he's sorry. This would help give us the impression that the boy learned a lesson or something like that.
Camera Shots:
We especially like the medium shot of the establishing shot, because it helped emphasize the idea that they were practicing at a real baseball field.
We think that you might add a shot right after the ball hits the car to see the damage. This would help the idea that a car really got damaged.
Edits:
On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 7. One edit we would change was after the boy talks about "getting out of there" after he hit the ball. We thought the out point was set to early or late because we couldn't clearly understand what he was saying.
We noticed that between your establishing shot and first shot of the boy holding the bat you used a fade to black. We would have used exactly what you used. Good job!
Music/Sound:
There was no music but good job!
Titles&Credits:
Yes, I think this title was very appealing and stood out to the viewers.
The titles were not centered and need to be fixed. They were pretty effective except for the fact that they were not centered.
Credits:
There were no credits. Great job!
Overall:
Overall, we thought your film was great and a good message and point to prove. What we liked best was the dedication you put to your characters. Our strongest suggestion is that you clean up the cuts to make it flow smoother.
AMAZING JOB GUYS!
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