The conflict in this video is between taking the dip and skipping class, or going back and doing the right thing. Some things that helped lead up to the rising action were the dialogue, such as when she tells the boys that she doesn't want to do this. Also the close up shots of the people and the "chew" were really well thought out. Also when she walks away, and they all look at each other and come to their decision. Some suggestions we have for your video (for the rising action) include possibly adding in some more close-up shots when the boys are thinking about what they're doing. The climax occured when Cole threw away the chew. For your resolution though, we think it would be a good idea to add more to the end so that the resolution can become more clear to the audience. We understand that they start walking back, but maybe it could've shown them walk back into the classroom. We especially like the close up shots of Michaela and Chris because it helped reflect the reactions and the feelings of the characters. On a scale of 1-10, we rated your editing as a 9. One edit we would've changed was the abrupt ending at the end. We felt that the out point was very quick. Music was played at the very beginning of the video, used to help emphasize that they were going to go do something mischevious. Very edgy music. It worked because that's exactly what they went to go do. We would just say to drop the volue of the music some, because it's difficult to hear any dialogue at the begining. We thought the most important music in the video would be the banjo when the chew is taken out. It let's the audience know what it acutally is and adds a humor to the scene. There was no title, but there were credits. Possibly make those go a little slower so that people can read it. Overall, we thought your film was very creative well put together. What we liked best was that you managed to make a serious film, but made it humorous at the same time. Our strongest suggestion would be to make the resolution a little longer. Well done.
The conflict was between the girl, and the group of guys who had to decide to do the right thing. The shots that contributed to the rising action were when they got kicked out of class, when the guys watched the girl walk away, and the close up of the chew. If you could re-shoot, something to think about next time is speaking louder because it was kinda quiet, and more close ups to add to the feeling of peer pressure and to show guilt at the end. The climax was when they brought the chew out and the resolution was when they threw the chew away. If you had a chance to re-film, something you could add to the resolution is a longer pause, and have the guys look at each other more obviously to show that they feel guilty. We really liked the close up of the chew, because it helped emphasise the idea that they were going to chew the stuff. We think that you should add more close ups of individuals speaking, or different angles to make it a little more exciting. Also, you should add another shot that emphasises the disposal of the chew. On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 7. We noticed throughout the outside scenes there weren't really any different shots or transitions, it was plain. However, we liked the music and the choice of the banjo track. It added a more "country" feeling to the scene. Overall, the music you chose worked very well with the film. You didn't have any titles at the beginning, but the ones at the end were good, and everything was cited properly. Overall your film was good and we liked the music (as previoulsy stated) and our strongest suggestion is to add more fun angles/shots (as previoulsy stated) -Kelsey and Kaycee
the conflict was between taking the chew, or not taking the chew.
here are the shots, dialogue, and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1. when they left the classroom 2. when Cole pulled out the chew 3. when they said its gun i thought michaela was going to take the chew 4. when every one was taking the chew i thought michaela was going to take the chew
its really good for the rising action the climax occured when michaela decided to walk away from the chew.
During the resolution michaela is walking away and the guys decide to throw away the chew.
You dont need to add to the resolution.
We especially like the shot of the chew because it helped us know their doing something they werent supposed to be doing.
we dont think you need to add any shots.
on a scale of 1-10 we give you a 8 on editing. one thing you need to adjust is the music.
the first music came in right in the beggining and it was intense.
there was no titles... add some
overall we thought you're video was sweet short and right to the point. our strongest suggestion for you is add to the part when they throw away the chew
The comflict was between peer pressure and individualism. here are the shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1) the music 2) the zoom in on the dip 3) Michaela's dialog and 4)when everybody else looked around each other. Here are some suggestions to the rising action, you could make the sound louder so that you could hear the dialouge better. You could also have some music to build the sespence. The climax occured when cole threw the dip in to the trash can. During the climax Cole threw away the dip and all the guys looked at each other and went back class. You could add to the resoulution by adding more music. This would help give us the idea that everbody was feeling that what they were doing was wrong. We espically like the extreme close up of the dip because it helped emphasize the idea taht what they were doing was wrong. We think that you might add a shot after everybody left the new shot would be a long shot of everybody walking back to class. This would strengthen the feeling that every body actually went back to class.
On a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 8.5. One edit you could change would was the shot when you guys were ditching. we welf that the in point was set too late. We notices that the shot betwen Michaela and the guys you used a straight cut. you should of use a special effect transition instead because would create a better transition.
The first use of music was when everybody was looking at each other. it was used to create high tension and it did work and i wouldnt suggest anything else. The most important use of music was when the camera zoomed in on the dip. It was used to create a sense of comic relief. It worked very well because everybody in the audience laughed.
There werent any titles in this video.
Overall we thought your film was very funny and powerful. what eliked best was the zoom in on the dip.
The comflict was between peer pressure and individualism. here are the shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1) the music 2) the zoom in on the dip 3) Michaela's dialog and 4)when everybody else looked around each other. Here are some suggestions to the rising action, you could make the sound louder so that you could hear the dialouge better. You could also have some music to build the sespence. The climax occured when cole threw the dip in to the trash can. During the climax Cole threw away the dip and all the guys looked at each other and went back class. You could add to the resoulution by adding more music. This would help give us the idea that everbody was feeling that what they were doing was wrong. We espically like the extreme close up of the dip because it helped emphasize the idea taht what they were doing was wrong. We think that you might add a shot after everybody left the new shot would be a long shot of everybody walking back to class. This would strengthen the feeling that every body actually went back to class.
On a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 8.5. One edit you could change would was the shot when you guys were ditching. we welf that the in point was set too late. We notices that the shot betwen Michaela and the guys you used a straight cut. you should of use a special effect transition instead because would create a better transition.
The first use of music was when everybody was looking at each other. it was used to create high tension and it did work and i wouldnt suggest anything else. The most important use of music was when the camera zoomed in on the dip. It was used to create a sense of comic relief. It worked very well because everybody in the audience laughed.
There werent any titles in this video.
Overall we thought your film was very funny and powerful. what eliked best was the zoom in on the dip. Jake and Alex
The conflict was peer pressure, the decision to take the chew or not. The shots that led to the rising action were the dialogue, when Michaela tells the boys that she doesn't want to do this. Also the close up shots of the them speaking and of the chew accompanied with the music. Some suggestions would be more close ups of each character's reactions and of them speaking. The climax was when Michaela walked away. For the resolution, it seemed empty, other than cole throwing the chew away and the others walking away, it lacked something. You could have had them meet up with Michaela and them smiling or some form of acknowledgement that they're good friends not trying to do anything wrong. We especially like the close ups of Michaela and Chris talking. It helped emphasize the characters as they spoke. We give your editing of the clips a 9. The transition of the leaving the classroom and ending of at baler alley seemed off. You could have put another clip to transition them from the classroom to the alley. The music levels were loud in the beginning, but not too hard to fix. The music though in the intro hepled portray the characters as "no gooders" which is good. The banjo song was probably the most important piece. It added a humorous effect when they zoomed on the chew. It lacked a title, which isn't always bad however. But it could help to introduce what the theme is. The credits were done well. Overall, the video was put together well. Good job. John and Joselyn
Dear Cole, Brad, Chris, and Michaela, STORY The main characters sneak out for a dip. Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action: 1. The main characters look suspicious in class 2. The characters leave the classroom 3. The characters go outside 4. They pull out a can of chew.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1. Make what they are going to do known in the classroom. 2. You could also give more dialoge between the characters in the beginning.
The climax occured when one of the main characters told the others that she didnt want to chew tobacco. You can add to the resolution by showing what happens when the students go back to class. This would help give us the idea that they were done chewing. CAMERA SHOTS We especially like medium shot that showed all of the students with the can of chew. They could have added a scene where they walk back into class. The next shot would be what happens after the return to the classroom EDITS: on a scale of 1-10 (10 being the highest), we rate the editing an 8.One edit we would change was the the number of cuts made. We thought the out point was set to late. We noticed when the video starts it is a straight cut. We would have used a cross disovle because it would give a better effect. The first use of music is when they are in class. It was used to emphasize the idea that they were all nervous. It worked because it set the mood. The music was changed for some parts to give different feelings. It worked because it made me feel like i was nervous for the main character. TITLES AND CREDITS The title fit great with the video. The credits were done properly OVERALL overall we thought your film was good. What we liked best was the close ups for expression. Our strongest suggestion to make the add a scene where the teacher asks them to stay in.
Dont do the crime if you cant do the time, Jacob D and Morgan D
Feedback given by: Michaela C and Ashley T.
ReplyDeleteThe conflict in this video is between taking the dip and skipping class, or going back and doing the right thing. Some things that helped lead up to the rising action were the dialogue, such as when she tells the boys that she doesn't want to do this. Also the close up shots of the people and the "chew" were really well thought out. Also when she walks away, and they all look at each other and come to their decision.
Some suggestions we have for your video (for the rising action) include possibly adding in some more close-up shots when the boys are thinking about what they're doing.
The climax occured when Cole threw away the chew. For your resolution though, we think it would be a good idea to add more to the end so that the resolution can become more clear to the audience. We understand that they start walking back, but maybe it could've shown them walk back into the classroom.
We especially like the close up shots of Michaela and Chris because it helped reflect the reactions and the feelings of the characters.
On a scale of 1-10, we rated your editing as a 9. One edit we would've changed was the abrupt ending at the end. We felt that the out point was very quick.
Music was played at the very beginning of the video, used to help emphasize that they were going to go do something mischevious. Very edgy music. It worked because that's exactly what they went to go do. We would just say to drop the volue of the music some, because it's difficult to hear any dialogue at the begining.
We thought the most important music in the video would be the banjo when the chew is taken out. It let's the audience know what it acutally is and adds a humor to the scene.
There was no title, but there were credits. Possibly make those go a little slower so that people can read it.
Overall, we thought your film was very creative well put together. What we liked best was that you managed to make a serious film, but made it humorous at the same time. Our strongest suggestion would be to make the resolution a little longer. Well done.
The conflict was between the girl, and the group of guys who had to decide to do the right thing. The shots that contributed to the rising action were when they got kicked out of class, when the guys watched the girl walk away, and the close up of the chew. If you could re-shoot, something to think about next time is speaking louder because it was kinda quiet, and more close ups to add to the feeling of peer pressure and to show guilt at the end.
ReplyDeleteThe climax was when they brought the chew out and the resolution was when they threw the chew away. If you had a chance to re-film, something you could add to the resolution is a longer pause, and have the guys look at each other more obviously to show that they feel guilty.
We really liked the close up of the chew, because it helped emphasise the idea that they were going to chew the stuff.
We think that you should add more close ups of individuals speaking, or different angles to make it a little more exciting. Also, you should add another shot that emphasises the disposal of the chew. On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 7.
We noticed throughout the outside scenes there weren't really any different shots or transitions, it was plain. However, we liked the music and the choice of the banjo track. It added a more "country" feeling to the scene. Overall, the music you chose worked very well with the film.
You didn't have any titles at the beginning, but the ones at the end were good, and everything was cited properly.
Overall your film was good and we liked the music (as previoulsy stated) and our strongest suggestion is to add more fun angles/shots (as previoulsy stated)
-Kelsey and Kaycee
the conflict was between taking the chew, or not taking the chew.
ReplyDeletehere are the shots, dialogue, and actions that contributed to the rising action:
1. when they left the classroom
2. when Cole pulled out the chew
3. when they said its gun i thought michaela was going to take the chew
4. when every one was taking the chew i thought michaela was going to take the chew
its really good for the rising action
the climax occured when michaela decided to walk away from the chew.
During the resolution michaela is walking away and the guys decide to throw away the chew.
You dont need to add to the resolution.
We especially like the shot of the chew because it helped us know their doing something they werent supposed to be doing.
we dont think you need to add any shots.
on a scale of 1-10 we give you a 8 on editing. one thing you need to adjust is the music.
the first music came in right in the beggining and it was intense.
there was no titles... add some
overall we thought you're video was sweet short and right to the point. our strongest suggestion for you is add to the part when they throw away the chew
-Isaiah S, and Cesar J.
The comflict was between peer pressure and individualism.
ReplyDeletehere are the shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1) the music 2) the zoom in on the dip 3) Michaela's dialog and 4)when everybody else looked around each other.
Here are some suggestions to the rising action, you could make the sound louder so that you could hear the dialouge better. You could also have some music to build the sespence.
The climax occured when cole threw the dip in to the trash can.
During the climax Cole threw away the dip and all the guys looked at each other and went back class. You could add to the resoulution by adding more music. This would help give us the idea that everbody was feeling that what they were doing was wrong. We espically like the extreme close up of the dip because it helped emphasize the idea taht what they were doing was wrong. We think that you might add a shot after everybody left the new shot would be a long shot of everybody walking back to class. This would strengthen the feeling that every body actually went back to class.
On a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 8.5. One edit you could change would was the shot when you guys were ditching. we welf that the in point was set too late.
We notices that the shot betwen Michaela and the guys you used a straight cut. you should of use a special effect transition instead because would create a better transition.
The first use of music was when everybody was looking at each other. it was used to create high tension and it did work and i wouldnt suggest anything else. The most important use of music was when the camera zoomed in on the dip. It was used to create a sense of comic relief. It worked very well because everybody in the audience laughed.
There werent any titles in this video.
Overall we thought your film was very funny and powerful. what eliked best was the zoom in on the dip.
The comflict was between peer pressure and individualism.
ReplyDeletehere are the shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1) the music 2) the zoom in on the dip 3) Michaela's dialog and 4)when everybody else looked around each other.
Here are some suggestions to the rising action, you could make the sound louder so that you could hear the dialouge better. You could also have some music to build the sespence.
The climax occured when cole threw the dip in to the trash can.
During the climax Cole threw away the dip and all the guys looked at each other and went back class. You could add to the resoulution by adding more music. This would help give us the idea that everbody was feeling that what they were doing was wrong. We espically like the extreme close up of the dip because it helped emphasize the idea taht what they were doing was wrong. We think that you might add a shot after everybody left the new shot would be a long shot of everybody walking back to class. This would strengthen the feeling that every body actually went back to class.
On a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 8.5. One edit you could change would was the shot when you guys were ditching. we welf that the in point was set too late.
We notices that the shot betwen Michaela and the guys you used a straight cut. you should of use a special effect transition instead because would create a better transition.
The first use of music was when everybody was looking at each other. it was used to create high tension and it did work and i wouldnt suggest anything else. The most important use of music was when the camera zoomed in on the dip. It was used to create a sense of comic relief. It worked very well because everybody in the audience laughed.
There werent any titles in this video.
Overall we thought your film was very funny and powerful. what eliked best was the zoom in on the dip.
Jake and Alex
The conflict was peer pressure, the decision to take the chew or not. The shots that led to the rising action were the dialogue, when Michaela tells the boys that she doesn't want to do this. Also the close up shots of the them speaking and of the chew accompanied with the music. Some suggestions would be more close ups of each character's reactions and of them speaking. The climax was when Michaela walked away. For the resolution, it seemed empty, other than cole throwing the chew away and the others walking away, it lacked something. You could have had them meet up with Michaela and them smiling or some form of acknowledgement that they're good friends not trying to do anything wrong.
ReplyDeleteWe especially like the close ups of Michaela and Chris talking. It helped emphasize the characters as they spoke. We give your editing of the clips a 9. The transition of the leaving the classroom and ending of at baler alley seemed off. You could have put another clip to transition them from the classroom to the alley.
The music levels were loud in the beginning, but not too hard to fix. The music though in the intro hepled portray the characters as "no gooders" which is good. The banjo song was probably the most important piece. It added a humorous effect when they zoomed on the chew. It lacked a title, which isn't always bad however. But it could help to introduce what the theme is. The credits were done well. Overall, the video was put together well. Good job.
John and Joselyn
Dear Cole, Brad, Chris, and Michaela,
ReplyDeleteSTORY
The main characters sneak out for a dip.
Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action:
1. The main characters look suspicious in class
2. The characters leave the classroom
3. The characters go outside
4. They pull out a can of chew.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1. Make what they are going to do known in the classroom.
2. You could also give more dialoge between the characters in the beginning.
The climax occured when one of the main characters told the others that she didnt want to chew tobacco. You can add to the resolution by showing what happens when the students go back to class. This would help give us the idea that they were done chewing.
CAMERA SHOTS
We especially like medium shot that showed all of the students with the can of chew. They could have added a scene where they walk back into class. The next shot would be what happens after the return to the classroom
EDITS:
on a scale of 1-10 (10 being the highest), we rate the editing an 8.One edit we would change was the the number of cuts made. We thought the out point was set to late. We noticed when the video starts it is a straight cut. We would have used a cross disovle because it would give a better effect. The first use of music is when they are in class. It was used to emphasize the idea that they were all nervous. It worked because it set the mood. The music was changed for some parts to give different feelings. It worked because it made me feel like i was nervous for the main character.
TITLES AND CREDITS
The title fit great with the video. The credits were done properly
OVERALL
overall we thought your film was good. What we liked best was the close ups for expression. Our strongest suggestion to make the add a scene where the teacher asks them to stay in.
Dont do the crime if you cant do the time,
Jacob D and Morgan D