The conflict was that there was a new kid at school, and he was being made fun of by another character because he was new and had no friends. The shots that contributesd to the rising action were when the new kid was shown at a long shot and when the camera showed the other character sticking up for him. You could probably add more dialogue so the audience can feel more tension between the two girls and their different personalities. The climax occured when Eduardo entered the classroom because soon after one of the main characters stood up for him. During the resolution, Michaela stood uo for Eduardo and showed Ashley how she really felt. You could add to the resolution by showing another clip where Ashley appologizes and becomes friends with Eduardo. This would help add to the resolution. We especially like the shot in the cafeteria because it helped the audience establish a school setting. We think you might replace the shot where you show Ashley and Michaela sitting in the class because you can see Dr.A in the background when he was just at the door in the previous shot. On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 9.5 because of the shot that we feel you should change, other than that the editing was fantastic. There was no music in your video which if there was, might help establish the mood or setting. The title reflected the video well. We really liked the title. The credits, in our opinion, looked really good. There was no music to site. Overall, we thought your film was really good. What we liked best was the moral because situations like these really do happen in real life.
STORY- The conflict was between making fun of the kid or standing up for him. 1. making fun of the kid 2. him entering class 3. nobody talking to the kid 4. girl making a comment about his clothes. SUGGESTIONS- you could zoom in on the kid in the cafeteria. you could also not leave the cut of him in the cafeteria so long. the climax occured when she stood up for the kid. in the resolution she walks over and sits with him. this helps give the idea that she is trying to be his friend. CAMERA SHOTS- we espically liked the long shot of the cafeteria because it helped set up the scene. we think you mightt add a shot of michealas face when ashley makes the comment to show that she doesnt like it. EDITS- on a scale of one to 10 we rate the editing a 7. one editing change was the shot of eduardo because it took to long. we noticed that between the cafeteria and the classroom shot they used a disolve. we would have used a cross dissolve. MUSIC AND SOUND- there was no music in this video TITLES AND CREDITS- the video had no title but the credits were done well and properly. OVERALL- we thought your film was good what we liked best was all the close ups. our strongest suggustion is that you add music. REVIEWED BY BRAD AND CHRIS
The conflict was between speaking up or staying quite and going with the crowd. A shot that contributed to the rising action was the close up on Michaela and her reaction about what Ashley said about the new kid. You could add music to make michaela seem like the "nice girl" in the video. The climax occurred when Michaela stood up to Ashley in the classroom. During the resolution, Michaela got up and went over to Eduardo. You could add to the resolution by adding dialogue between Michaela and Eduardo. This would help emphazise that Eduardo is happy someone is talking to him. We especially liked the close up shot of Eduardo when he smiled because it showed that he was happy that someone talked to him. We rate the editing a 7. One shot that we might change is the close up of Ahley when she notices the new guy in the cafeteria. You should add music to the video. You should also add titles.The credits were also good. Overall we liked your video because it showed a strong message.
The conflict is between whether Michaela should agree with Ashley or go sit with the new kid. Here are shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1.The view of the cafeteria 2.Michaela not knowing what to say after Ashley is ride. 3.The kid looking over at the girls. 4.Ivy and Michaela look at eachother and laugh Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1.You could add more dialog between the girls to create their character. 2.You could also show a more of the new kid. The climax occurred when Ashley said it looks like he buys his close at the dump. In the resoulution Michaela stands up to Ashley and goes and sits with the new kid. You could add to the resoultion by Michaela saying a little bit more to Ashley. This would help us give the idea that Michaela really learned something.
We especially like the establishing shot of the cafeteria, because it looked so realistic. We think that you might add a shot right after the girls look at the new kid. The new shot would be a close up on him. This would help emphasize the feeling that he had no friends.
On a scale of 1-10, we rate this editing a 7. One edit we would change was when Michaela got up to go sit with the new kid. We noticed that between the close up on the new kid and the credits, you used a fade to white.We would have used a cross dissolve because it would have looked cleaner.
They didn't have music.
There was no title. We notice that the credits were a little slow. They were done properly. Everyhting was credited.
Overall, we thought your film was good. What we liked best was the cafateria scene. Our strongest suggestion is that you add music
STORY The conflict was between being mean to the new student or being nice to him. Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action: 1. when a character makes fun of the way the new kid dresses 2. the main character isnt really into making fun of the student 3. the new student moves into the class the other characters are in 4. the main character decides to stand up and be nice. Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1. you could have made the new kid hear what they were saying about him 2. you could also make the new kid seem even sadder. The climax occured when the main character decided not to make fun of the new kid. In the resolution, the main character goes and sits with the new kid CAMERA SHOTS We especially like the close up shot of the new kid because it showed that he was happy.
EDITS: on a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing an 10. The first use of music is at the end of the video to show the mood has lightened up alot. when the bully came in the scene. TITLES AND CREDITS There was no title and only credits. Titles would have helped because i would have gotten an idea of what it would be about.the credits were fine OVERALL overall we thought your film was good. What we liked was the close ups
The conflict was peer pressure and being nice to others. The shots that contributed to the rising action was when the girls turned and stared at Eddie. The rising action is pretty good, but one thing you could add is music to help contribute to the mood/tone. The climax was when the girl was in the classroom and putting down the guy and his clothes. The resolution was when the other girl stood up for the guy and went to sit next to him. We especially like the cafeteria scence, specifically when the girls look back at Eddie, because it helped emphasise the idea that they were making fun of him, and he was all alone. We also liked the fade from the cafeteria to the classroom. One thing that you might consider (if you had the time to refilm) is to not have ashley look directly into the camera, and then to make sure the same over the shoulder angle for both. One seemed higher that the other. We liked all the shots. On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing as a 8.5. One thing you could double check is to make sure all the in points and out points are clean. The use of music in the credits was good. There was no title to the film, but the credits worked were done properly and well. Overall, we thought the film was great and had a clear and meaningful message. Overall our strongest suggestion would be to add a title at the beginning.
Dear Michaela, Ashley, and Eduardo STORY The main characters friend is making fun of a boy based on his clothing. Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action: 1. kids are eating in a cafeteria 2.the main characters frind is making fun of a boy 3. the main characters friend doesnt do anything at first Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: i think there was nothing to add to the rising action The climax occured when the main characters friend told the main character that it wasnt okay to make fun of him. In the resolution, the main characters friend becomes frind with the boy. You can add to the resolution by showing all three characters becomng friends. This would help give us the idea that the values in the video were stronger. CAMERA SHOTS We especially like closeup of the main characters face. I dont think you need to add another shot. The EDITS: on a scale of 1-10 (10 being the highest), we rate the editing an 8.One edit we would change was the beginning. We thought the out point was set to late . We noticed when the scenery is shown its a straight cut. We would have used a cross disovle because its cooler.there was no music during the video . TITLES AND CREDITS there was no title. OVERALL overall we thought your film was good. What we liked best was the close-up shot. Our strongest suggestion is that you add music.
Feedback given by Michelle Hernandez and Blanca Ceja
The conflict is between the new kid in school and the girls that are making fun of him.
The shots that contribute to the rising action is the dialoge and the close up shots when the girls are talking to eachother. The things that contributed to the rising action are when the teacher tells him to sit down in class and then the girls start talking to him.
Suggestions when they are in the cafteria we think t=it would be a good idea to show the new kid eating and looking sad , not just staring across the room, he looked kind of akward. Camera shots we especially likes the close up's on Ashley when she was taling in the cafeteria scene. We think you should have cut krystian out when he lokked at the camera in the cles room scene. Edits on a scale form 1-10 we would rate your video a 9 , we thought the message was clear and the shots, cuts and overall edits were precice. Your guys acting skills were remarkable as well. Music and sound We thought the cafeteria scene when all the class was talking was good, it gave it a feeling that it was actually lunch time. But there was no music in the video. Titles and Credits The video had no title but the credits were okay. There was cites and names of actors. Overall we thought that your video was well put together and insightful. It gave a good message and meaning. We really liked it and enjoyed watching it. Our strongest suggestion is that you add music and at the ending have eddie not look at the camera.
Feedback given by Michelle Hernandez and Blanca Ceja
The conflict is between the new kid in school and the girls that are making fun of him.
The shots that contribute to the rising action is the dialoge and the close up shots when the girls are talking to eachother. The things that contributed to the rising action are when the teacher tells him to sit down in class and then the girls start talking to him.
Suggestions when they are in the cafteria we think t=it would be a good idea to show the new kid eating and looking sad , not just staring across the room, he looked kind of akward. Camera shots we especially likes the close up's on Ashley when she was taling in the cafeteria scene. We think you should have cut krystian out when he lokked at the camera in the cles room scene. Edits on a scale form 1-10 we would rate your video a 9 , we thought the message was clear and the shots, cuts and overall edits were precice. Your guys acting skills were remarkable as well. Music and sound We thought the cafeteria scene when all the class was talking was good, it gave it a feeling that it was actually lunch time. But there was no music in the video. Titles and Credits The video had no title but the credits were okay. There was cites and names of actors. Overall we thought that your video was well put together and insightful. It gave a good message and meaning. We really liked it and enjoyed watching it. Our strongest suggestion is that you add music and at the ending have eddie not look at the camera.
The conflict was that there was a new kid at school, and he was being made fun of by another character because he was new and had no friends.
ReplyDeleteThe shots that contributesd to the rising action were when the new kid was shown at a long shot and when the camera showed the other character sticking up for him.
You could probably add more dialogue so the audience can feel more tension between the two girls and their different personalities.
The climax occured when Eduardo entered the classroom because soon after one of the main characters stood up for him.
During the resolution, Michaela stood uo for Eduardo and showed Ashley how she really felt.
You could add to the resolution by showing another clip where Ashley appologizes and becomes friends with Eduardo. This would help add to the resolution.
We especially like the shot in the cafeteria because it helped the audience establish a school setting.
We think you might replace the shot where you show Ashley and Michaela sitting in the class because you can see Dr.A in the background when he was just at the door in the previous shot.
On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 9.5 because of the shot that we feel you should change, other than that the editing was fantastic.
There was no music in your video which if there was, might help establish the mood or setting.
The title reflected the video well. We really liked the title.
The credits, in our opinion, looked really good. There was no music to site.
Overall, we thought your film was really good. What we liked best was the moral because situations like these really do happen in real life.
Eduardo E., Sabrena S., and Ashley P.
STORY- The conflict was between making fun of the kid or standing up for him. 1. making fun of the kid 2. him entering class 3. nobody talking to the kid 4. girl making a comment about his clothes.
ReplyDeleteSUGGESTIONS- you could zoom in on the kid in the cafeteria. you could also not leave the cut of him in the cafeteria so long. the climax occured when she stood up for the kid. in the resolution she walks over and sits with him. this helps give the idea that she is trying to be his friend.
CAMERA SHOTS- we espically liked the long shot of the cafeteria because it helped set up the scene. we think you mightt add a shot of michealas face when ashley makes the comment to show that she doesnt like it.
EDITS- on a scale of one to 10 we rate the editing a 7. one editing change was the shot of eduardo because it took to long. we noticed that between the cafeteria and the classroom shot they used a disolve. we would have used a cross dissolve.
MUSIC AND SOUND- there was no music in this video
TITLES AND CREDITS- the video had no title but the credits were done well and properly.
OVERALL- we thought your film was good what we liked best was all the close ups. our strongest suggustion is that you add music. REVIEWED BY BRAD AND CHRIS
The conflict was between speaking up or staying quite and going with the crowd. A shot that contributed to the rising action was the close up on Michaela and her reaction about what Ashley said about the new kid. You could add music to make michaela seem like the "nice girl" in the video. The climax occurred when Michaela stood up to Ashley in the classroom. During the resolution, Michaela got up and went over to Eduardo. You could add to the resolution by adding dialogue between Michaela and Eduardo. This would help emphazise that Eduardo is happy someone is talking to him. We especially liked the close up shot of Eduardo when he smiled because it showed that he was happy that someone talked to him. We rate the editing a 7. One shot that we might change is the close up of Ahley when she notices the new guy in the cafeteria. You should add music to the video. You should also add titles.The credits were also good. Overall we liked your video because it showed a strong message.
ReplyDeleteJohn & Joselyn
The conflict is between whether Michaela should agree with Ashley or go sit with the new kid.
ReplyDeleteHere are shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action:
1.The view of the cafeteria
2.Michaela not knowing what to say after Ashley is ride.
3.The kid looking over at the girls.
4.Ivy and Michaela look at eachother and laugh
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1.You could add more dialog between the girls to create their character.
2.You could also show a more of the new kid.
The climax occurred when Ashley said it looks like he buys his close at the dump.
In the resoulution Michaela stands up to Ashley and goes and sits with the new kid.
You could add to the resoultion by Michaela saying a little bit more to Ashley. This would help us give the idea that Michaela really learned something.
We especially like the establishing shot of the cafeteria, because it looked so realistic.
We think that you might add a shot right after the girls look at the new kid. The new shot would be a close up on him. This would help emphasize the feeling that he had no friends.
On a scale of 1-10, we rate this editing a 7. One edit we would change was when Michaela got up to go sit with the new kid. We noticed that between the close up on the new kid and the credits, you used a fade to white.We would have used a cross dissolve because it would have looked cleaner.
They didn't have music.
There was no title.
We notice that the credits were a little slow. They were done properly. Everyhting was credited.
Overall, we thought your film was good. What we liked best was the cafateria scene.
Our strongest suggestion is that you add music
-Michaela and Cole
STORY
ReplyDeleteThe conflict was between being mean to the new student or being nice to him.
Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action:
1. when a character makes fun of the way the new kid dresses
2. the main character isnt really into making fun of the student
3. the new student moves into the class the other characters are in
4. the main character decides to stand up and be nice.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1. you could have made the new kid hear what they were saying about him
2. you could also make the new kid seem even sadder.
The climax occured when the main character decided not to make fun of the new kid.
In the resolution, the main character goes and sits with the new kid
CAMERA SHOTS
We especially like the close up shot of the new kid because it showed that he was happy.
EDITS:
on a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing an 10. The first use of music is at the end of the video to show the mood has lightened up alot. when the bully came in the scene.
TITLES AND CREDITS
There was no title and only credits. Titles would have helped because i would have gotten an idea of what it would be about.the credits were fine
OVERALL
overall we thought your film was good. What we liked was the close ups
-Isaiah S and Cesar J
Feedback given by Kelsey and Kaycee
ReplyDeleteThe conflict was peer pressure and being nice to others.
The shots that contributed to the rising action was when the girls turned and stared at Eddie. The rising action is pretty good, but one thing you could add is music to help contribute to the mood/tone. The climax was when the girl was in the classroom and putting down the guy and his clothes. The resolution was when the other girl stood up for the guy and went to sit next to him. We especially like the cafeteria scence, specifically when the girls look back at Eddie, because it helped emphasise the idea that they were making fun of him, and he was all alone. We also liked the fade from the cafeteria to the classroom. One thing that you might consider (if you had the time to refilm) is to not have ashley look directly into the camera, and then to make sure the same over the shoulder angle for both. One seemed higher that the other.
We liked all the shots. On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing as a 8.5. One thing you could double check is to make sure all the in points and out points are clean. The use of music in the credits was good. There was no title to the film, but the credits worked were done properly and well. Overall, we thought the film was great and had a clear and meaningful message. Overall our strongest suggestion would be to add a title at the beginning.
Dear Michaela, Ashley, and Eduardo
ReplyDeleteSTORY
The main characters friend is making fun of a boy based on his clothing.
Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action:
1. kids are eating in a cafeteria
2.the main characters frind is making fun of a boy
3. the main characters friend doesnt do anything at first
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
i think there was nothing to add to the rising action
The climax occured when the main characters friend told the main character that it wasnt okay to make fun of him.
In the resolution, the main characters friend becomes frind with the boy. You can add to the resolution by showing all three characters becomng friends. This would help give us the idea that the values in the video were stronger.
CAMERA SHOTS
We especially like closeup of the main characters face. I dont think you need to add another shot. The EDITS:
on a scale of 1-10 (10 being the highest), we rate the editing an 8.One edit we would change was the beginning. We thought the out point was set to late . We noticed when the scenery is shown its a straight cut. We would have used a cross disovle because its cooler.there was no music during the video .
TITLES AND CREDITS
there was no title.
OVERALL
overall we thought your film was good. What we liked best was the close-up shot. Our strongest suggestion is that you add music.
Jacob D and Morgan D
Feedback given by Michelle Hernandez and Blanca Ceja
ReplyDeleteThe conflict is between the new kid in school and the girls that are making fun of him.
The shots that contribute to the rising action is the dialoge and the close up shots when the girls are talking to eachother.
The things that contributed to the rising action are when the teacher tells him to sit down in class and then the girls start talking to him.
Suggestions
when they are in the cafteria we think t=it would be a good idea to show the new kid eating and looking sad , not just staring across the room, he looked kind of akward.
Camera shots
we especially likes the close up's on Ashley when she was taling in the cafeteria scene. We think you should have cut krystian out when he lokked at the camera in the cles room scene.
Edits
on a scale form 1-10 we would rate your video a 9 , we thought the message was clear and the shots, cuts and overall edits were precice. Your guys acting skills were remarkable as well.
Music and sound
We thought the cafeteria scene when all the class was talking was good, it gave it a feeling that it was actually lunch time. But there was no music in the video.
Titles and Credits
The video had no title but the credits were okay. There was cites and names of actors.
Overall
we thought that your video was well put together and insightful. It gave a good message and meaning. We really liked it and enjoyed watching it. Our strongest suggestion is that you add music and at the ending have eddie not look at the camera.
Feedback given by Michelle Hernandez and Blanca Ceja
ReplyDeleteThe conflict is between the new kid in school and the girls that are making fun of him.
The shots that contribute to the rising action is the dialoge and the close up shots when the girls are talking to eachother.
The things that contributed to the rising action are when the teacher tells him to sit down in class and then the girls start talking to him.
Suggestions
when they are in the cafteria we think t=it would be a good idea to show the new kid eating and looking sad , not just staring across the room, he looked kind of akward.
Camera shots
we especially likes the close up's on Ashley when she was taling in the cafeteria scene. We think you should have cut krystian out when he lokked at the camera in the cles room scene.
Edits
on a scale form 1-10 we would rate your video a 9 , we thought the message was clear and the shots, cuts and overall edits were precice. Your guys acting skills were remarkable as well.
Music and sound
We thought the cafeteria scene when all the class was talking was good, it gave it a feeling that it was actually lunch time. But there was no music in the video.
Titles and Credits
The video had no title but the credits were okay. There was cites and names of actors.
Overall
we thought that your video was well put together and insightful. It gave a good message and meaning. We really liked it and enjoyed watching it. Our strongest suggestion is that you add music and at the ending have eddie not look at the camera.