STORY: The conflict was between drinking the milk and not drinking the milk. 1. When the character tells the other one he is going to the bathroom and not to drink the milk.2. When he eats the apple. 3. When he checks to see if anyone is looking. 4. The voice of the person handing him the apple. Suggestions- 1. You could have him be a little more serious when he tells him not to drink the milk. 2. You could also have him examine the milk and his surroundings a little bit longer before he decides to drink it. The climax occurs when he tells him he drank the milk. during the resolution jake says its ok that he drank the milk, he didint want it. You could add to this by making him wait longer to answer like he is thinking. CAMERA SHOTS. We especially like the extreme close-up of Dillon's eyes, Because it helped emphasize the idea that the apple is bad. We think that you might add a shot after he goes in the bathroom to show a little more suspense to dillon sitting there. The new shot would be a low-angle shot to show the facial expressions on dillon's face. This would help emphasize the idea that he was being suspicious. EDITS- We rate the editing a 9. One edit we would change would be the scene where dillon gets handed the apple. We thought the transition was rough. We noticed that between shot one walking and shot two on the bench you used a straight cut. We would of used a dissolve to transition the scenes. USE OF MUSIC AND SOUND EFFECTS. There was no music in the video! The most important use of sound effects was the BEEP after he ate the nasty apple and spit it out. TITLES AND CREDITS. There was no title in the beginning. The credits were not there either. OVERALL- Overall, We thought your film was good. What we liked best was your use of the sound effects and the voice overs. Our strongest suggestion is that you add music and the title and credits. REVIEWED BY CHRIS AND BRAD!
The conflict was that Dillion ate an apple that was disgusting when Jake had told Dillon not to drink his chocolate milk while he was in the bathroom. So Dillon had ate the apple and needed something to drink so he opened the milk and drank it without even thinking. The shots were 1. The dialoge with someone saying in a deep voice " aye yo kid" 2. An extreme close up on Dillions eyes. 3.An extreme close up on the milk.4. The dialog with Dillon saying he isnt sorry. Some suggestions i have is that you could add some music while eating the apple. You could also have more shots of Dillon eating the apple. The climax occurred when Dillon drank the milk. Jake said it was okay when Dillon had drank the chocolate milk. You could have made Jake mad because Dillon drank his milk. This would give the story more detail and a better resolution on like how they solved it. We especially like the comedy in this video, the shot of Jake with his pants wet created humor in the scene. We think that you should have added a shot of when Jake had wet his pants you should of showed how maybe the sink pipe broke or something like that. We would like to rate the editing an 8. One edit we would change would be Jake saying "Take a piss" i didnt think that was very good. It made him sound like a foul mouth. Your group did not use any music at all. you should add some. For titles i think it would be very good if you add some. 1. A COVER TITLE. 2. WHEN JAKE COMES OUT OF THE BATHROOM YOU COULD ADD A TITLE THAT SAYS OOPS. It makes it a little more humorous. The credits were not done. Overall your video was very good. We enjoyed it, and got lots of laughters out of it. Always, Sabrena, Ashley P. Eddie E
The conflict was between drinking the milk and not drinking the milk. Here are the shots, dialog, and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1.Him wanting the chocolate milk 2.The guy going to the bathroom 3.The apple being gross 4."Ey yo kid" Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1.You could have more dialouge between Jake and Dillon. 2.You could also add another character. The climax occurred when Dillon told Jake that he drank the chocolate milk. During the resolution Jake forgives Dillon but Dillon said he wasnt really sorry. You could add to the resoultion by adding tension to Dillon telling Jake the truth. This would help give us the idea that Jake was mad and Dillon was scared.
We especially like the extreme closeup shot of Dillon because it helped emphasize the idea that the apple was bad. We think that you might replace the shot where Jake and Dillon were walking. The new shot would be a medium shot with a low angle. This would help emphasize that they were talking.
On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 8.5. One edit we would change was after he gave him the apple. We thought the out point was too early.We noticed that between when he got the apple and when he looked around, you used a straight cut. We would have used a special transition effect because it is the same situation.
a. They didn't have music.
They didn't have a title or credits.
Overall, we thought your film was funny. What we liked best was that they made it funny while also portraying the value. Our strongest suggestion is that you add music.
The conflict in this video was between being honest about drinking the chocolate milk, or hiding the fact from his friend.
Shots that helped lead up to the rising action was the shot when he takes the strange apple, and the extreme close up of his eyes when he bites into the apple. Also the panning in and out of the chocolate milk was a good shot. It set the stage for the conflict. A suggestion we have is to shorten the length between the shot of him taking a bite of the apple and the extreme close-up of his eyes. The climax occured when Dillon admited to drinking his friend's chocolate milk. During the resolution Jake says that its ok that he drank his milk and the tension of the scene diminished. We especially like the extreme close-up of Dillon's eyes , because it helped emphasize the idea that the apple was not good. We rate the editing a 8.5 one edit we would change is the shot when jake says " what you talking about Willis" is a little to long maybe chop a few seconds off of that. There was no music in this video. We thought maybe during the shot of the chocolate milk and the camera is zooming in and out that would be a good spot for music that and at the end with the zooming in and out on jakes face. This video had no credits or titles. Over all we think you did a good job you made a value hilarious and random. What we liked best was the diffrent shot types you fit in such as the O.T.S and the extreme close-up shot. Good Job.
the conflict was between drinking the milk or not drinking it. when dillon took the apple, took a bite of the apple, and then his eyes got all big, were all adding to the rising action. the rising action was really good. the climax occured when Dillon told Jake he drank the milk, and Jake said it was ok. During the resolution they talk it over to say its ok and Jake saw what happened and why he was ok with it.
We especially like the shot were it was a close up of dillons reaction to the taste of the apple. it helped show that the apple was really bad tasting. On a scale we give you a 9.
there was no music or
there were no titles or credits.
overall your film was very good, i wouldnt change anything. -Isaiah S and Cesar J
Feedback by Kelsey Robledo The conflict was about honesty and how you should always tell people even if you did something you know is wrong.The shots that i really liked were the extreme close up on the boys face afterr he ate the nasty apple, the rapid zooming in and out on the chocolate milk, the close up on the kids knees when he came out of the bathroom, and the rapid zooming in and out of the kids face at the end of the film. If you could re-film your shots some things that you could do would be to speak louder when filming and make the opening shot less shakey. The climax was when the kid drank the other kids chocolate milk. The resolution is when the kid forgave him for drinking his milk. I really liked the resolution of the film. I especially liked the extreme close up of the kids eyes when he bit into the sour apple because it hepled emphasize the idea that the apple was very very sour and nasty. I really liked your choice of shots. On a scale of 1-10, i rate the editing a 9. Your edits were very smooth and clean. I noticed that btween the shot where the boy was alon and the shot when he got the apple you used a straight cut which amde it seem like the person giving the apple just disappeared. There was no music. You could add in some music to the credits. although there was no music, i loved the sound effects used throughout the film. There were no credits. Overall i thought your film was great, you had an excellent use of different and interesing shots. My strongest suggestion would be to add in some titles and credits with a little bit of music.
The comflict was between trust and telling the truth. here are the shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1) the music 2)the background voice 3)the swearing that dillon said 4)when he took a bit of the apple and he spit it out. Here are some suggestions to the rising action, you could make the sound louder and add music. The climax occured when dillon spit out the apple. During the climax dillon spit out the apple and he went looking for jake for his milk.You could add to the resoulution by adding more music. This would help with dillons reaction wene he finds out that jake had drunk his milk.We espically like the extreme close up of the milk. We think that you might add a shot of dillons face wene he finds out jake drinks his milk.
On a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 9. One edit you could change wene jake is comeing out of the bathroom an he said something i could not hear him. we felt that point was right there it was good. We notices that the shot betwen dillon and jake is a medium shot. you should of use a special effect transition instead because would create a better transition.
The first use of music was they did not use any misic.
There werent any titles in this video.
Overall we thought your film was very funny.what we like best was wene dillon spits out the apple. Jake and Alex
The conflict was about being honest that he drank the milk or not to lie. The shots leading to the climax are when there's a close up of Dillon's eyes and he spits out the apple. He then has to drink the milk. Some suggestions would be to close up of Jake saying not to drink the milk and a close up of Dillon realizing about what he has done. The climax was when Dillon says "i have to tell you something" to jake. In the resolution, there is a twist. Dillon says he isn't sorry which is pretty comical. There's nothing to change other than an alterante ending, which you could come up with yourselves. A suggestion would be to stick to the usual happy ending. But your ending is better that way in it to keep the comedy that there is througout your video. We especially like the long shot of Dillon realizing that he drank the milk. We think you could have added a close up of Dillon's face realizing that he drank the milk. The new shot would give an emphasis of his realization. We rate your editing a 9. One edit we would change would be the scene where dillon gets handed the apple. We thought the transition was to hard of a cut, we assume you didn't put the clips close enough. There wasn't any music but we suggest maybe a strolling type of music in the beginning until the guy gives the apple to Dillon. The most important sound effect was the beep after when Dillon spat the apple out. It was very funny. There weren't titles or credits. Just add them. Overall this video was very well done. John and Joselyn
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STORY:
The conflict was between drinking the milk and not drinking the milk. 1. When the character tells the other one he is going to the bathroom and not to drink the milk.2. When he eats the apple. 3. When he checks to see if anyone is looking. 4. The voice of the person handing him the apple. Suggestions- 1. You could have him be a little more serious when he tells him not to drink the milk. 2. You could also have him examine the milk and his surroundings a little bit longer before he decides to drink it. The climax occurs when he tells him he drank the milk. during the resolution jake says its ok that he drank the milk, he didint want it. You could add to this by making him wait longer to answer like he is thinking.
CAMERA SHOTS. We especially like the extreme close-up of Dillon's eyes, Because it helped emphasize the idea that the apple is bad. We think that you might add a shot after he goes in the bathroom to show a little more suspense to dillon sitting there. The new shot would be a low-angle shot to show the facial expressions on dillon's face. This would help emphasize the idea that he was being suspicious.
EDITS- We rate the editing a 9. One edit we would change would be the scene where dillon gets handed the apple. We thought the transition was rough. We noticed that between shot one walking and shot two on the bench you used a straight cut. We would of used a dissolve to transition the scenes.
USE OF MUSIC AND SOUND EFFECTS.
There was no music in the video! The most important use of sound effects was the BEEP after he ate the nasty apple and spit it out.
TITLES AND CREDITS.
There was no title in the beginning. The credits were not there either.
OVERALL- Overall, We thought your film was good. What we liked best was your use of the sound effects and the voice overs. Our strongest suggestion is that you add music and the title and credits. REVIEWED BY CHRIS AND BRAD!
The conflict was that Dillion ate an apple that was disgusting when Jake had told Dillon not to drink his chocolate milk while he was in the bathroom. So Dillon had ate the apple and needed something to drink so he opened the milk and drank it without even thinking.
The shots were 1. The dialoge with someone saying in a deep voice " aye yo kid" 2. An extreme close up on Dillions eyes. 3.An extreme close up on the milk.4. The dialog with Dillon saying he isnt sorry.
Some suggestions i have is that you could add some music while eating the apple. You could also have more shots of Dillon eating the apple.
The climax occurred when Dillon drank the milk.
Jake said it was okay when Dillon had drank the chocolate milk. You could have made Jake mad because Dillon drank his milk. This would give the story more detail and a better resolution on like how they solved it.
We especially like the comedy in this video, the shot of Jake with his pants wet created humor in the scene.
We think that you should have added a shot of when Jake had wet his pants you should of showed how maybe the sink pipe broke or something like that. We would like to rate the editing an 8. One edit we would change would be Jake saying "Take a piss" i didnt think that was very good. It made him sound like a foul mouth.
Your group did not use any music at all. you should add some.
For titles i think it would be very good if you add some. 1. A COVER TITLE. 2. WHEN JAKE COMES OUT OF THE BATHROOM YOU COULD ADD A TITLE THAT SAYS OOPS. It makes it a little more humorous.
The credits were not done.
Overall your video was very good. We enjoyed it, and got lots of laughters out of it.
Always, Sabrena, Ashley P. Eddie E
The conflict was between drinking the milk and not drinking the milk. Here are the shots, dialog, and actions that contributed to the rising action:
1.Him wanting the chocolate milk
2.The guy going to the bathroom
3.The apple being gross
4."Ey yo kid"
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1.You could have more dialouge between Jake and Dillon.
2.You could also add another character.
The climax occurred when Dillon told Jake that he drank the chocolate milk.
During the resolution Jake forgives Dillon but Dillon said he wasnt really sorry. You could add to the resoultion by adding tension to Dillon telling Jake the truth. This would help give us the idea that Jake was mad and Dillon was scared.
We especially like the extreme closeup shot of Dillon because it helped emphasize the idea that the apple was bad.
We think that you might replace the shot where Jake and Dillon were walking. The new shot would be a medium shot with a low angle. This would help emphasize that they were talking.
On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 8.5. One edit we would change was after he gave him the apple. We thought the out point was too early.We noticed that between when he got the apple and when he looked around, you used a straight cut. We would have used a special transition effect because it is the same situation.
a. They didn't have music.
They didn't have a title or credits.
Overall, we thought your film was funny. What we liked best was that they made it funny while also portraying the value. Our strongest suggestion is that you add music.
-Michaela and Cole
Feedback given by Michaela C and Ashley T
The conflict in this video was between being honest about drinking the chocolate milk, or hiding the fact from his friend.
Shots that helped lead up to the rising action was the shot when he takes the strange apple, and the extreme close up of his eyes when he bites into the apple. Also the panning in and out of the chocolate milk was a good shot. It set the stage for the conflict.
A suggestion we have is to shorten the length between the shot of him taking a bite of the apple and the extreme close-up of his eyes.
The climax occured when Dillon admited to drinking his friend's chocolate milk.
During the resolution Jake says that its ok that he drank his milk and the tension of the scene diminished.
We especially like the extreme close-up of Dillon's eyes , because it helped emphasize the idea that the apple was not good.
We rate the editing a 8.5
one edit we would change is the shot when jake says " what you talking about Willis" is a little to long maybe chop a few seconds off of that.
There was no music in this video. We thought maybe during the shot of the chocolate milk and the camera is zooming in and out that would be a good spot for music that and at the end with the zooming in and out on jakes face.
This video had no credits or titles.
Over all we think you did a good job you made a value hilarious and random. What we liked best was the diffrent shot types you fit in such as the O.T.S and the extreme close-up shot. Good Job.
the conflict was between drinking the milk or not drinking it. when dillon took the apple, took a bite of the apple, and then his eyes got all big, were all adding to the rising action. the rising action was really good. the climax occured when Dillon told Jake he drank the milk, and Jake said it was ok. During the resolution they talk it over to say its ok and Jake saw what happened and why he was ok with it.
We especially like the shot were it was a close up of dillons reaction to the taste of the apple. it helped show that the apple was really bad tasting.
On a scale we give you a 9.
there was no music or
there were no titles or credits.
overall your film was very good, i wouldnt change anything.
-Isaiah S and Cesar J
Feedback by Kelsey Robledo
The conflict was about honesty and how you should always tell people even if you did something you know is wrong.The shots that i really liked were the extreme close up on the boys face afterr he ate the nasty apple, the rapid zooming in and out on the chocolate milk, the close up on the kids knees when he came out of the bathroom, and the rapid zooming in and out of the kids face at the end of the film. If you could re-film your shots some things that you could do would be to speak louder when filming and make the opening shot less shakey. The climax was when the kid drank the other kids chocolate milk. The resolution is when the kid forgave him for drinking his milk. I really liked the resolution of the film. I especially liked the extreme close up of the kids eyes when he bit into the sour apple because it hepled emphasize the idea that the apple was very very sour and nasty. I really liked your choice of shots. On a scale of 1-10, i rate the editing a 9. Your edits were very smooth and clean. I noticed that btween the shot where the boy was alon and the shot when he got the apple you used a straight cut which amde it seem like the person giving the apple just disappeared. There was no music. You could add in some music to the credits. although there was no music, i loved the sound effects used throughout the film. There were no credits. Overall i thought your film was great, you had an excellent use of different and interesing shots. My strongest suggestion would be to add in some titles and credits with a little bit of music.
The comflict was between trust and telling the truth.
here are the shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1) the music 2)the background voice 3)the swearing that dillon said 4)when he took a bit of the apple and he spit it out.
Here are some suggestions to the rising action, you could make the sound louder and add music.
The climax occured when dillon spit out the apple.
During the climax dillon spit out the apple and he went looking for jake for his milk.You could add to the resoulution by adding more music. This would help with dillons reaction wene he finds out that jake had drunk his milk.We espically like the extreme close up of the milk. We think that you might add a shot of dillons face wene he finds out jake drinks his milk.
On a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 9. One edit you could change wene jake is comeing out of the bathroom an he said something i could not hear him. we felt that point was right there it was good.
We notices that the shot betwen dillon and jake is a medium shot. you should of use a special effect transition instead because would create a better transition.
The first use of music was they did not use any misic.
There werent any titles in this video.
Overall we thought your film was very funny.what we like best was wene dillon spits out the apple.
Jake and Alex
The conflict was about being honest that he drank the milk or not to lie. The shots leading to the climax are when there's a close up of Dillon's eyes and he spits out the apple. He then has to drink the milk. Some suggestions would be to close up of Jake saying not to drink the milk and a close up of Dillon realizing about what he has done. The climax was when Dillon says "i have to tell you something" to jake. In the resolution, there is a twist. Dillon says he isn't sorry which is pretty comical. There's nothing to change other than an alterante ending, which you could come up with yourselves. A suggestion would be to stick to the usual happy ending. But your ending is better that way in it to keep the comedy that there is througout your video. We especially like the long shot of Dillon realizing that he drank the milk. We think you could have added a close up of Dillon's face realizing that he drank the milk. The new shot would give an emphasis of his realization.
We rate your editing a 9. One edit we would change would be the scene where dillon gets handed the apple. We thought the transition was to hard of a cut, we assume you didn't put the clips close enough.
There wasn't any music but we suggest maybe a strolling type of music in the beginning until the guy gives the apple to Dillon. The most important sound effect was the beep after when Dillon spat the apple out. It was very funny.
There weren't titles or credits. Just add them. Overall this video was very well done.
John and Joselyn
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