The conflict was either to let the cheater be a cheater or to tell the teacher that he is cheating. The shots were low angle on jake while he is walking around talking to the students. Also a close up shot on Krystian while he grabs alexs shirt.The rising action you could have showed the note that Alex had wrote. You could also have showed Krystian mad at the fact that Alex gave him a note. The climax had to be when Alex gave the teacher a note. Jake had told the class that they can be dismissed but Krystian had to stay in because he was caught cheating. You coulsd have shown the letter so we understand it better because honestly we dont understand you story. We liked how Alex dressed up like the nerdy type guy. It showed character. We think you should have a shot of Krystian cheating. It will emphasize that krystian did cheat. We diffinatly think you should add an extreme close up the note. We say this again because its very important. On a scale we give you a 5 because it doesnt make so much sence at this point. The music was perfect beacause it made it more like a misterious effect. The titles were a nice add at the end. you should make an opening title. We think it would make a nice touch. The credits were good. But why did you add the octimus prime? Overall the film was okay, you just have some touching up to do. Always, Sabrena, Ashley P, Eddie E.
Dear Krystian, Jake B., Zoie, and Alex. STORY The main characters are in detention. Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action: 1. The main teacher says who is in trouble. 2. The characters are sitting in detention. 3. One character tells there other not to tell the teacher he cheated.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1. Start out in a classroom and have the teacher ask some to stay back. 2. You could also give more dialoge between the characters.
The climax occured when the main character told the teacher who it was secretly. You can add to the resolution by showing what happens to the student that cheats. This would help give us the idea that the cheater got what he deserved.
CAMERA SHOTS We especially like medium shot that showed all of the students in trouble. They could have added a scene where they walk in to detention. The next shot would be what happens after the other kids leave detention EDITS: on a scale of 1-10 (10 being the highest), we rate the editing an 8.One edit we would change was the the number of cuts made. We thought the out point was set to late. We noticed when the video starts it is a straight cut. We would have used a cross disovle because it would give a better effect. The first use of music is when they show the main characters in trouble. It was used to emphasize the idea that they were all nervous. It worked because it set the mood. The music was changed for some parts to give different feelings. It worked because it made me feel like i was nervous for the main character. TITLES AND CREDITS The title fit great with the video. The credits were done properly OVERALL overall we thought your film was good. What we liked best was the close ups for expression. Our strongest suggestion to make the add a scene where the teacher asks them to stay in.
Dont do the crime if you cant do the time, Jacob D and Morgan D
STORY The conflict was between o tell the truth or keep the mouth shut. Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action: 1. when you see Krystian look at Alex and shake his head 2. When Alex passes the note 3.when everyone can leave except Krystian. you could add to the rising action by making it obvious that the bully is cheating off of the nerd, and that the teacher found out the bully was cheating .The climax occured when the nerd passed the note.In the resolution, the nerd walks out of the library with a strut CAMERA SHOTS We especially like the close up shot of John on the floor because it showed that Jake won the pizza EDITS: on a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing an 7. The first use of music is when they have to stay in for an extra hour, it shows that it is suspensuful for the nerd. TITLES AND CREDITS there was no titles and their credits were way to fast. OVERALL overall the film was ok. we suggest to slow down the credits alot. -Isaiah S and Cesar J
Feedback given by Michelle Hernandez and Blanca Ceja
STORY The conflict is a external conflict. Its between the two students talking the test in the detention room.
Here are the shots, dialog and actions that contribute to the rising action: 1.The characters are sitting in the detention room
2. when the teacher says that krystian has to stay
3. The passing of the note
Some suggestions that add to the rising action: 1.More dialoge between Krystian and Alex 2.Zoie having some more part in then just passing the note.
The climax occured when the note gets to the teacher and Krystian has to stay after class.
CAMERA SHOTS We liked the begining when the camera slowly showed all the students sitting on the table in the detention room. We also liked the part when the teacher was talking and he had the low angle shot looking up as if we were in the students eyes.
EDITS On a scale from 1-10 we would rate your editing a 8. We would have put more shots of the people close up in the detention room, and we would have shown the note that Alex wrote to the teacher as a close up, or as he was writing it. The mood was set when Krystian pulled on Alex's shirt. It looked like Krystian intimidated Alex. The mood was suspensful most of the time. When the music would change the mood slightly changed as well, we thought that worked really well.
TITLES AND CREDITS There was no title and the credits were to fast.
OVERALL We thought that your film was well put together but the meaning of the note was not very clear. We didnt know what the note was about and why Krystian had to stay after class. The edits and the camera shots were well put together and cut well. We thought the message was good, dont cheat or you'll get caught up eventually.
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The conflict was either to let the cheater be a cheater or to tell the teacher that he is cheating. The shots were low angle on jake while he is walking around talking to the students. Also a close up shot on Krystian while he grabs alexs shirt.The rising action you could have showed the note that Alex had wrote. You could also have showed Krystian mad at the fact that Alex gave him a note.
The climax had to be when Alex gave the teacher a note. Jake had told the class that they can be dismissed but Krystian had to stay in because he was caught cheating. You coulsd have shown the letter so we understand it better because honestly we dont understand you story. We liked how Alex dressed up like the nerdy type guy. It showed character.
We think you should have a shot of Krystian cheating. It will emphasize that krystian did cheat.
We diffinatly think you should add an extreme close up the note. We say this again because its very important.
On a scale we give you a 5 because it doesnt make so much sence at this point. The music was perfect beacause it made it more like a misterious effect.
The titles were a nice add at the end. you should make an opening title. We think it would make a nice touch. The credits were good. But why did you add the octimus prime?
Overall the film was okay, you just have some touching up to do.
Always, Sabrena, Ashley P, Eddie E.
Dear Krystian, Jake B., Zoie, and Alex.
STORY
The main characters are in detention.
Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action:
1. The main teacher says who is in trouble.
2. The characters are sitting in detention.
3. One character tells there other not to tell the teacher he cheated.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1. Start out in a classroom and have the teacher ask some to stay back.
2. You could also give more dialoge between the characters.
The climax occured when the main character told the teacher who it was secretly. You can add to the resolution by showing what happens to the student that cheats. This would help give us the idea that the cheater got what he deserved.
CAMERA SHOTS
We especially like medium shot that showed all of the students in trouble. They could have added a scene where they walk in to detention. The next shot would be what happens after the other kids leave detention
EDITS:
on a scale of 1-10 (10 being the highest), we rate the editing an 8.One edit we would change was the the number of cuts made. We thought the out point was set to late. We noticed when the video starts it is a straight cut. We would have used a cross disovle because it would give a better effect. The first use of music is when they show the main characters in trouble. It was used to emphasize the idea that they were all nervous. It worked because it set the mood. The music was changed for some parts to give different feelings. It worked because it made me feel like i was nervous for the main character.
TITLES AND CREDITS
The title fit great with the video. The credits were done properly
OVERALL
overall we thought your film was good. What we liked best was the close ups for expression. Our strongest suggestion to make the add a scene where the teacher asks them to stay in.
Dont do the crime if you cant do the time,
Jacob D and Morgan D
STORY
The conflict was between o tell the truth or keep the mouth shut.
Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action:
1. when you see Krystian look at Alex and shake his head
2. When Alex passes the note
3.when everyone can leave except Krystian.
you could add to the rising action by making it obvious that the bully is cheating off of the nerd, and that the teacher found out the bully was cheating .The climax occured when the nerd passed the note.In the resolution, the nerd walks out of the library with a strut
CAMERA SHOTS
We especially like the close up shot of John on the floor because it showed that Jake won the pizza
EDITS:
on a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing an 7. The first use of music is when they have to stay in for an extra hour, it shows that it is suspensuful for the nerd. TITLES AND CREDITS
there was no titles and their credits were way to fast.
OVERALL
overall the film was ok. we suggest to slow down the credits alot.
-Isaiah S and Cesar J
Feedback given by Michelle Hernandez and Blanca Ceja
STORY
The conflict is a external conflict. Its between the two students talking the test in the detention room.
Here are the shots, dialog and actions that contribute to the rising action:
1.The characters are sitting in the detention room
2. when the teacher says that krystian has to stay
3. The passing of the note
Some suggestions that add to the rising action:
1.More dialoge between Krystian and Alex
2.Zoie having some more part in then just passing the note.
The climax occured when the note gets to the teacher and Krystian has to stay after class.
CAMERA SHOTS
We liked the begining when the camera slowly showed all the students sitting on the table in the detention room. We also liked the part when the teacher was talking and he had the low angle shot looking up as if we were in the students eyes.
EDITS
On a scale from 1-10 we would rate your editing a 8. We would have put more shots of the people close up in the detention room, and we would have shown the note that Alex wrote to the teacher as a close up, or as he was writing it.
The mood was set when Krystian pulled on Alex's shirt. It looked like Krystian intimidated Alex. The mood was suspensful most of the time. When the music would change the mood slightly changed as well, we thought that worked really well.
TITLES AND CREDITS
There was no title and the credits were to fast.
OVERALL
We thought that your film was well put together but the meaning of the note was not very clear.
We didnt know what the note was about and why Krystian had to stay after class. The edits and the camera shots were well put together and cut well. We thought the message was good, dont cheat or you'll get caught up eventually.
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