Feedback given by Michelle Hernandez and Blanca Ceja
Story: Making choices to study before hand and consequences.
The conflict between makes the right choices to study before hand and cosequences of not studying.
Some shots that contributed to this rising action would be the beginning of class and them sitting down, to make the scene natural, and the close ups of Kenny and his eyes wondering makes you think what will happen next.
You could probably make it more distinct that Kenny is trying to cheat and what the real message is. You could also have kenny say something just like " Well its what i get for not studying ". The climax occured when they all got there tests back an Kenny got a bad grade. During the resolution it was a little confusing because i didnt get the point right away i had to think about it. You could ass to the resolution by putting a title of the exact point.
We especially like the close up shot of Kenny because it helped emphasize the idea that he is looking around and trying to look for someone to copy off of. We think that you might add a shot right after kenny is looking around of him just guesing on the problems so he obviously got them wrong and then him getting the results back of him completely failing and make a next scene of him studying like crazy and getting an A on the test test.
Edits: One edit we would chanes was after the shot of Kenny trying to look for someone to copy, maybe of the girl sitting next to him getting annoyed and saying" hey, your going to get me in trouble, you should of studyied" and then trying to face away. We rate from a scale one to ten would be 7 because your edits were well preformed jsut the message wasn't totally predictable. We noticed that between the shot of kenny and looking around you used you used a special effect to make the video flow.We would have used a cross-dissolve to maybe make a pause and emphasize the point.
Use of music and sound effects: The first music came in when the bell rang to show the beginning of class. It was used to help emphasize the mood that all students were in school or the idea that something like a test was about to take place. It worked perfectly because we got the idea that it was class time. The most important use of music was when the bell rang in the beginning and with kenny it gave the feeling of whats happening. It was used to emphasize the mood of suspicion and curiosity. It worked very well because i now new that the beginning started off with class. I dont think there is anything else to try becaus eit worked perfectly.
Titles and Credits: The titles were clear and precise. You titles were effective for me because it gave the idea of what was either goin to happen or what will happen. Somne suggestions we might have for you is to make the message clear, over all the one shooting the film did a great job and doing closeups and not making the camera shaking so its more of a film that ur interested in and get sucke dinto..
Overall: Overall we thought your film was pretty good. What we liked best was the bginning and close ups of Kenny and Eduardo. Our strongest suggestion is that you either change the message or make it more clear.
Dear Ivy, Kenzie, and Emily STORY The main character wants to cheat but decides not to. Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action: 1. The main character looks over his shoulder for answers 2. The other character says no. 3. He sits there. Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1. Make the value known. 2. You could also give more dialoge to the video. The climax occured when the main character turned in his test. In the resolution, the main character gets his test back. You can add to the resolution by showing the grade that the main character got. This would help give us the idea that he did bad on the test for not studying. CAMERA SHOTS We especially like the setting in an actual classroom. We think that you might add a shot of what happened the night before the test. The next shot would be a close up of the main characters face when he gets the test back. EDITS: on a scale of 1-10 (10 being the highest), we rate the editing an 9.One edit we would change was the the number of cuts made. We thought the out point was set to late. We noticed when the video starts it is a straight cut. We would have used a cross disovle because it would give a better effect. The first use of music is when they show the main characters face. It was used to emphasize the idea that he was nervous. It worked because it set the mood. The music was changed for some parts to give different feelings. It worked because it made me feel like i was nervous for the main character. TITLES AND CREDITS The title fit great with the video. The credits were done properly OVERALL overall we thought your film was good. What we liked best was the close ups for expression. Our strongest suggestion to make the actual value known.
The conflict is between Boy 1 and Boy 2 from cheating at a test.The shots we liked where when it shows Boy 2 at an extreme close up of just his face looking around with his facial expressions as being affraid about the test hes gonna take. And also the shot of the camera looking at the clock like if he is wasting time with this test. We thing that they needed an extra clip to show more whats this clip about. Like when Boy 2 is sitting in his desk they should of added a clip of him doing an over the shoulder to see the test and then am extreme close up of him looking at the test. We especially liked the shot of Boy 2 and Boy 1 looking at each other and then Boy 1 hides his test so Boy 2 wont be able to see it. We think that they should repalce the clip of the close up on the A Boy 1 got on his test to a close up to the F Boy 2 got and then the close up on Boy 1 A. On a scale of one to ten we rate this a seven. They got good clips and a good value but needed music to make this video sound so interested. We think that the music didnt really go with it it should been like sound or a type of music that sounds like if something bad was gonna happen or maybe something scary. This didnt give us the mood to know that Boy 2 is doing something wrong like cheating at a test in class. We think the titles were good in this video because it shows in the beginning the title that says Its Never too Late. And A week Later. These titles went perfect with this video but we think the title with the message should of been at the end not at the beginning. They didnt cite the location of the music, but overall We though the video was good and our favorite part of the clip is when they have the extreme close up of Boy 2 of the test. Our strong suggestion is to have good in and out points and have good lighting in the back ground.
Feedback given by Taylor and Jose. The conflict between the student and his lack of preparation for the test. Here are the shots,dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1.Closeup on eyes 2. 3. 4. Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1. You could add a clip to show that he did not preapre for the test. 2. you could also add a clip that shows a calender in his home that says TEST on (what ever day) and him rushing out of the house. he doent look at the clender to see what he has. The climax occured when the kid gt his test back and it had an F on it. During the resolution... You could add to the resolution by...this would help give us the idea theat... We especially like the close up shot of the students eyes, because it helped emphasize the idea that he was nervous and it also created suspense. We think you might add a shot right after he receives his test to show that he got an F. There was shot that showed this but if you werent looking for it, it is easy to miss or we think you might replace the shot where it shows both tests and focus on the F. The new shot would really add emphasis on the fact that he failed. On a scale of 1-10,we are rating the editing a 8. One deit we would change was the shot of the papers showing there grades. We noticed that between the shot of him sayin OMG and him looking at the other students paper to cheat you usec a panning shot. we would have have used the same but made it a little bit longer than it was.The first time the music came in was when the video first started in the opening scene. It was used to help emphasize.. not quite sure what the music in the opening scene was used to emphasize. It was most likely used to show the fact that he had a test comig up but not sure. I feel that it didnt work becasue it doesnt really communicate that he had a test or the suspense of having a test. ou could also try more suspensfulk music. The most important use of music was when the students were exiting the calss it gave a feel of pitty or sorrow for the studnet who received an F. It worked because the other student saud you will do better next time and the deep slow music coralted well with the fact that he failed but can do better. The title did in some way tir into the film. it was not apparent until the very end when one student said to the other you can do better next time. It did not really grab my attention, but have no ther suggsetion for a title. Credits were good and i believe they were done properly.The music was not cited. Overalll we thiought the film was pretty good and got the message across. what we liked best was the close up on the eyes of the studnet that added intensity. Our strongest suggestion is that you shuld add a message at the end identifying what the value was and raisng the volume on the student saying you will do better next time.
STORY The conflict was that Kenny did not study for his test Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action: 1. when you see that Kenny was looking very stressed 2. when Kenny tried to copy from Eduardo. The climax occured when the teacher passed back the tests. In the resolution, Eduardo pats Kenny's back. CAMERA SHOTS We especially like the shot of Kenny with his head down on his desk because it shows the feeling of being unprepared for something. EDITS: on a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 6. The first use of music is at the beginning to show the rising tension of the video. TITLES AND CREDITS the title was good but it never defined what is "never too late". the credits were also good, but they did not cite their music sources. OVERALL overall we thought your film was good. -Isaiah S and Cesar J
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Feedback given by Michelle Hernandez and Blanca Ceja
Story: Making choices to study before hand and consequences.
The conflict between makes the right choices to study before hand and cosequences of not studying.
Some shots that contributed to this rising action would be the beginning of class and them sitting down, to make the scene natural, and the close ups of Kenny and his eyes wondering makes you think what will happen next.
You could probably make it more distinct that Kenny is trying to cheat and what the real message is.
You could also have kenny say something just like " Well its what i get for not studying ".
The climax occured when they all got there tests back an Kenny got a bad grade. During the resolution it was a little confusing because i didnt get the point right away i had to think about it.
You could ass to the resolution by putting a title of the exact point.
We especially like the close up shot of Kenny because it helped emphasize the idea that he is looking around and trying to look for someone to copy off of.
We think that you might add a shot right after kenny is looking around of him just guesing on the problems so he obviously got them wrong and then him getting the results back of him completely failing and make a next scene of him studying like crazy and getting an A on the test test.
Edits:
One edit we would chanes was after the shot of Kenny trying to look for someone to copy, maybe of the girl sitting next to him getting annoyed and saying" hey, your going to get me in trouble, you should of studyied" and then trying to face away. We rate from a scale one to ten would be 7 because your edits were well preformed jsut the message wasn't totally predictable.
We noticed that between the shot of kenny and looking around you used you used a special effect to make the video flow.We would have used a cross-dissolve to maybe make a pause and emphasize the point.
Use of music and sound effects:
The first music came in when the bell rang to show the beginning of class. It was used to help emphasize the mood that all students were in school or the idea that something like a test was about to take place. It worked perfectly because we got the idea that it was class time.
The most important use of music was when the bell rang in the beginning and with kenny it gave the feeling of whats happening. It was used to emphasize the mood of suspicion and curiosity. It worked very well because i now new that the beginning started off with class. I dont think there is anything else to try becaus eit worked perfectly.
Titles and Credits:
The titles were clear and precise. You titles were effective for me because it gave the idea of what was either goin to happen or what will happen.
Somne suggestions we might have for you is to make the message clear, over all the one shooting the film did a great job and doing closeups and not making the camera shaking so its more of a film that ur interested in and get sucke dinto..
Overall:
Overall we thought your film was pretty good. What we liked best was the bginning and close ups of Kenny and Eduardo. Our strongest suggestion is that you either change the message or make it more clear.
Dear Ivy, Kenzie, and Emily
STORY
The main character wants to cheat but decides not to.
Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action:
1. The main character looks over his shoulder for answers
2. The other character says no.
3. He sits there.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1. Make the value known.
2. You could also give more dialoge to the video.
The climax occured when the main character turned in his test.
In the resolution, the main character gets his test back. You can add to the resolution by showing the grade that the main character got. This would help give us the idea that he did bad on the test for not studying.
CAMERA SHOTS
We especially like the setting in an actual classroom. We think that you might add a shot of what happened the night before the test. The next shot would be a close up of the main characters face when he gets the test back.
EDITS:
on a scale of 1-10 (10 being the highest), we rate the editing an 9.One edit we would change was the the number of cuts made. We thought the out point was set to late. We noticed when the video starts it is a straight cut. We would have used a cross disovle because it would give a better effect. The first use of music is when they show the main characters face. It was used to emphasize the idea that he was nervous. It worked because it set the mood. The music was changed for some parts to give different feelings. It worked because it made me feel like i was nervous for the main character.
TITLES AND CREDITS
The title fit great with the video. The credits were done properly
OVERALL
overall we thought your film was good. What we liked best was the close ups for expression. Our strongest suggestion to make the actual value known.
Stay in school,
Jacob D and Morgan D
Feedback give by: Eduardo E. Ashley, and Sabrina.
The conflict is between Boy 1 and Boy 2 from cheating at a test.The shots we liked where when it shows Boy 2 at an extreme close up of just his face looking around with his facial expressions as being affraid about the test hes gonna take. And also the shot of the camera looking at the clock like if he is wasting time with this test. We thing that they needed an extra clip to show more whats this clip about. Like when Boy 2 is sitting in his desk they should of added a clip of him doing an over the shoulder to see the test and then am extreme close up of him looking at the test. We especially liked the shot of Boy 2 and Boy 1 looking at each other and then Boy 1 hides his test so Boy 2 wont be able to see it. We think that they should repalce the clip of the close up on the A Boy 1 got on his test to a close up to the F Boy 2 got and then the close up on Boy 1 A. On a scale of one to ten we rate this a seven. They got good clips and a good value but needed music to make this video sound so interested. We think that the music didnt really go with it it should been like sound or a type of music that sounds like if something bad was gonna happen or maybe something scary. This didnt give us the mood to know that Boy 2 is doing something wrong like cheating at a test in class. We think the titles were good in this video because it shows in the beginning the title that says Its Never too Late. And A week Later. These titles went perfect with this video but we think the title with the message should of been at the end not at the beginning. They didnt cite the location of the music, but overall We though the video was good and our favorite part of the clip is when they have the extreme close up of Boy 2 of the test. Our strong suggestion is to have good in and out points and have good lighting in the back ground.
Feedback given by Taylor and Jose.
The conflict between the student and his lack of preparation for the test.
Here are the shots,dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action:
1.Closeup on eyes
2.
3.
4.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1. You could add a clip to show that he did not preapre for the test.
2. you could also add a clip that shows a calender in his home that says TEST on (what ever day) and him rushing out of the house. he doent look at the clender to see what he has.
The climax occured when the kid gt his test back and it had an F on it.
During the resolution...
You could add to the resolution by...this would help give us the idea theat...
We especially like the close up shot of the students eyes, because it helped emphasize the idea that he was nervous and it also created suspense. We think you might add a shot right after he receives his test to show that he got an F. There was shot that showed this but if you werent looking for it, it is easy to miss or we think you might replace the shot where it shows both tests and focus on the F. The new shot would really add emphasis on the fact that he failed.
On a scale of 1-10,we are rating the editing a 8. One deit we would change was the shot of the papers showing there grades. We noticed that between the shot of him sayin OMG and him looking at the other students paper to cheat you usec a panning shot. we would have have used the same but made it a little bit longer than it was.The first time the music came in was when the video first started in the opening scene. It was used to help emphasize.. not quite sure what the music in the opening scene was used to emphasize. It was most likely used to show the fact that he had a test comig up but not sure. I feel that it didnt work becasue it doesnt really communicate that he had a test or the suspense of having a test. ou could also try more suspensfulk music. The most important use of music was when the students were exiting the calss it gave a feel of pitty or sorrow for the studnet who received an F. It worked because the other student saud you will do better next time and the deep slow music coralted well with the fact that he failed but can do better. The title did in some way tir into the film. it was not apparent until the very end when one student said to the other you can do better next time. It did not really grab my attention, but have no ther suggsetion for a title. Credits were good and i believe they were done properly.The music was not cited. Overalll we thiought the film was pretty good and got the message across. what we liked best was the close up on the eyes of the studnet that added intensity. Our strongest suggestion is that you shuld add a message at the end identifying what the value was and raisng the volume on the student saying you will do better next time.
STORY
The conflict was that Kenny did not study for his test
Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action:
1. when you see that Kenny was looking very stressed
2. when Kenny tried to copy from Eduardo.
The climax occured when the teacher passed back the tests.
In the resolution, Eduardo pats Kenny's back.
CAMERA SHOTS
We especially like the shot of Kenny with his head down on his desk because it shows the feeling of being unprepared for something.
EDITS:
on a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 6. The first use of music is at the beginning to show the rising tension of the video.
TITLES AND CREDITS
the title was good but it never defined what is "never too late". the credits were also good, but they did not cite their music sources.
OVERALL
overall we thought your film was good.
-Isaiah S and Cesar J
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