The conflict was between having courage and not having courage. The shot that contributed to the rising action was when Damon looked away as soon as Elisa waved at him. Here is a suggestion to the rising action; you could add missing clips to the video. You could also not repeat the same scenes over and over again. We know that your film is not completed yet so we don't know what to suggest since we have not seen a final rough draft. I suggest that you use music to make a greater impact on the viewers and use clean transitions and cuts. Keep up the good work. -Luis and Lizzy
The conflict was between having courage and not having courage. Something that helped contribute to the rising action was when Damaris turned around and waved at Damon. The climax occurred when Damon told her to wait. Damon confesses his love for Damaris. You could add to the resolution by having more interaction between them. This will help give us the idea that the two have formed a friendship. We especially liked the shot where Damaris turns around and waves at Damon because it helped build the idea of the rising action. We think you should add a shot before Damon says to wait. The new shot would be of Damaris standing up to walk away. This would help strengthen the idea that she feels like giving up on him. We rate the editing as a 7. We would suggest cutting out the unnecessary shots at the beginning. There was no music. There were no titles or credits. Overall, your film was a work in progress. What we like best was the storyline. Our strongest suggestion is that you finished editing. Zachary Andrade and Sam Tapia
The conflict was between having the courage to talk to a girl you like, or not having courage. Some shots that contributed to the rising action are: Damon looking at Damaris, Damaris waving at Damon and him turning away, and Damaris asking if Damon wants to be her partner or not. To add to the rising action you could show a close up on Damaris being disappointed when Damon says no to her offer. And maybe instead of her telling her riht away why he does not want to be her partner, you can show them after class. Then damon could explain himself. The climax occurred when Damon explains why he does not want to be partners with Damaris. The resolution is when Damaris is flattered. To add to the resolution, you could show later that they ended up dating or something, so there is more of a happy ending. We especially like the shot of Damon daydreaming while looking in Damaris's direstion, it is really cute and adds to the feeling that he likes her. We think you should end the classroom short after Damon says "I don't think I can" to show he was not her parnter for the activity, then when class is out show him thinking about telling Damaris the real reason why he did not want to be her partner. This would help emphasize Damon thought about Damaris and wants her to know he likes her. On a scale of your editing we would give you a 4, you need to cut the bloopers of Jessica in the beginning. Also the movement of the camera between Damon and Damaris is really slow, you should either cut that or refilm. If you do choose to refilm, try to re-do the over the shoulder shot so you do not cut off any heads. Also when Damaris is walking to Damon you the camera is down so you do not see her face, if you decide to refilm we suggest moving the camera so you can see her facial expressions. We think if you add music to the part when Damon is daydreaming, it would really add to the mood of Damon liking Damaris. You need to add titles in your videos. Overall we thought your video is cute, but some shots are awkward and refilming is the best way to fix it. -Alicia Fernandez & Jorge Chavez
Michael and Cody Story: The conflict was between the boy that didn’t want to work with girl and the girl that wanted to work with the boy. Here are the shots, dialog, and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1. shot: medium shot on the teacher talking 2. shot: scanning the whole room 3. shot: over the shoulder shot of the boy and girl talking 4. shot: two shot on boy and girl Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1. you could add more dialog 2. you could also add more shots to make the video longer The climax occurred when there was no climax Describe what happens during the resolution: there was no resolution You could add to the resolution by making more clips for the video. This would help give us the idea that/create the impression that the video will be more complete. Camera shots: variety, effectiveness, specific shots that achieved a certain effect. We especially like the part where Jessica keeps messing up on her line because it helped emphasize the idea that she didn’t know her lines. We think you might add a shot right after the end, the new shot would be a over the shoulder shot this would help create the feeling that the boy and girl like each other. Edits: On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 2. One edit we could change was the shot when jessica messes up on her line. We noticed between the only two shots you have you don’t have any after it. Use of music and sound effects: a. Describe first use of music. Why was it used? Did it work? Would you suggest something else? The first time music came in was never. I didn’t quite work because there was absolutely no music. You could also try adding music so it will enhance your video. b. Describe the point in the video when use of the music was MOST IMPOTANT. Why was it used? Did it work? Would you suggest something else? There was n music. I would try adding music to help develop the mood of the video. Titles and Credits: I dint see any titles in your video. There was no titles. Add some titles There was no credits Overall: Overall, we thought your film was okay. What we liked the best was damon’s acting. Our stongest suggestion is that you should complete it.
Honestly We could no tell what the conflict was...there was TOO much missing for us to understand.
We don't know what the whole story is hence we don't know what the rising action is.
For the story we can't really critique anything because it is unfinished and unclear.
All of the caerma shots seemed off. The one that showed some potential was the opening one of the teacher. All the shots there were missing would be nice to add in.
3 for the editing.It was on it's way but there wasn't a lot of good editing to go off of.
There was no music. Since the film was unfinished we can't really suggest any music.
Feedback on values video for group Jessica, Cristabel , Damon, Damaris Feedback given by Mario and Laura Story: The conflict was between having to admit that he likes her or choosing too just keep avoiding her. Here are the shots, dialogue, and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1.40 sec to about 1min 02 sec is where the rising action took place. The medium camera shot of boy starring at the girl. 2.The medium close up of the girl as she turned to the boy to wave. 3.Boy’s rejection turn (medium shot) 4.She gets up and goes to talk to him. Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1.You could transition to black to show that she likes the boy but then do a sharp cut to guide the viewers to believe that he doesn’t like her back. 2.You could also add some music to add to the mood. The climax occurred when he said wait you don’t understand. Describe what happens during the resolution: The boy admits his true feelings to her. You could add to the resolution by putting more emotion into the acting. This would help give us the idea that /create the impression that the boy is more interested in her than we believe. Camera shots: variety, effectiveness, specific shots that achieved a certain effect. Complete these sentences: We especially like the over the shoulder shot of the guy and girl, because it helped emphasize the idea that they were in a conversion while showing their reactions to each other’s comments. We think that you might add a shot right after she gets up and goes to talk to him OR We think you might replace the shot where they are in the beginning because you can hear people in the back ground. The new shot would be medium shot. This would help create the feeling that she will and be viewed from one of the students sitting down. Edits On a scale of 1- 10 we rate the editing a 6. One edit we would change was when you start off the beginning you should because it again. We thought the in point and out point was too early and late because it was showing you guys messing around. We noticed that between (describe 2 shots) you used a ( straight cut, a cross dissolve, a fade to black, a special effect transition). We would have used a dissolve instead, because it will show you as a more sympathetic person .Use of music and sound N/A Titles and credits N/aDid the title of the film reflect its content in some way? Did it grab your attention? Do you have another suggestion for a title? What did you notice about the titles? Did you think they were effective? Include any suggestions for improvement. Credits: What did you notice about credits? Were all images, sound effects and music cited? Overall: Over all, we thought your film had a great message. What we like best was that the message was clear . Our strong suggestion is that you just edit a little and add some music.
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Feedback given by Mario and Laura Story: The conflict was between having to admit that he likes her or choosing too just keep avoiding her. Here are the shots, dialogue, and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1. 40 sec to about 1min 02 sec is where the rising action took place. The medium camera shot of boy starring at the girl. 2. The medium close up of the girl as she turned to the boy to wave. 3. Boy’s rejection turn (medium shot) 4. She gets up and goes to talk to him. Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1. You could transition to black to show that she likes the boy but then do a sharp cut to guide the viewers to believe that he doesn’t like her back. 2. You could also add some music to add to the mood. The climax occurred when he said wait you don’t understand. Describe what happens during the resolution: The boy admits his true feelings to her. You could add to the resolution by putting more emotion into the acting. This would help give us the idea that /cre te the impression that the boy is more interested in her than we believe. Camera shots: variety, effectiveness, specific shots that achieved a certain effect. Complete these sentences: We especially like the over the shoulder shot of the guy and girl, because it helped emphasize the idea that they were in a conversion while showing their reactions to each other’s comments. We think that you might add a shot right after she gets up and goes to talk to him OR We think you might replace the shot where they are in the beginning because you can hear people in the back ground. The new shot would be medium shot. This would help create the feeling that she will and be viewed from one of the students sitting down. Edits On a scale of 1- 10 we rate the editing a 6. One edit we would change was when you start off the beginning you should because it again. We thought the in point and out point was too early and late because it was showing you guys messing around. We noticed that between (describe 2 shots) you used a ( straight cut, a cross dissolve, a fade to black, a special effect transition). We would have used a dissolve instead, because it will show you as a more sympathetic person .Use of music and sound N/A Titles and credits N/A Overall: Over all, we thought your film had a great message. What we like best was that the message was clear . Our strong suggestion is that you just edit a little and add some music.
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The conflict was between having courage and not having courage. The shot that contributed to the rising action was when Damon looked away as soon as Elisa waved at him. Here is a suggestion to the rising action; you could add missing clips to the video. You could also not repeat the same scenes over and over again. We know that your film is not completed yet so we don't know what to suggest since we have not seen a final rough draft. I suggest that you use music to make a greater impact on the viewers and use clean transitions and cuts. Keep up the good work.
-Luis and Lizzy
The conflict was between having courage and not having courage. Something that helped contribute to the rising action was when Damaris turned around and waved at Damon. The climax occurred when Damon told her to wait. Damon confesses his love for Damaris. You could add to the resolution by having more interaction between them. This will help give us the idea that the two have formed a friendship. We especially liked the shot where Damaris turns around and waves at Damon because it helped build the idea of the rising action. We think you should add a shot before Damon says to wait. The new shot would be of Damaris standing up to walk away. This would help strengthen the idea that she feels like giving up on him. We rate the editing as a 7. We would suggest cutting out the unnecessary shots at the beginning. There was no music. There were no titles or credits. Overall, your film was a work in progress. What we like best was the storyline. Our strongest suggestion is that you finished editing.
Zachary Andrade and Sam Tapia
The conflict was between having the courage to talk to a girl you like, or not having courage. Some shots that contributed to the rising action are: Damon looking at Damaris, Damaris waving at Damon and him turning away, and Damaris asking if Damon wants to be her partner or not. To add to the rising action you could show a close up on Damaris being disappointed when Damon says no to her offer. And maybe instead of her telling her riht away why he does not want to be her partner, you can show them after class. Then damon could explain himself. The climax occurred when Damon explains why he does not want to be partners with Damaris. The resolution is when Damaris is flattered. To add to the resolution, you could show later that they ended up dating or something, so there is more of a happy ending.
We especially like the shot of Damon daydreaming while looking in Damaris's direstion, it is really cute and adds to the feeling that he likes her. We think you should end the classroom short after Damon says "I don't think I can" to show he was not her parnter for the activity, then when class is out show him thinking about telling Damaris the real reason why he did not want to be her partner. This would help emphasize Damon thought about Damaris and wants her to know he likes her.
On a scale of your editing we would give you a 4, you need to cut the bloopers of Jessica in the beginning. Also the movement of the camera between Damon and Damaris is really slow, you should either cut that or refilm. If you do choose to refilm, try to re-do the over the shoulder shot so you do not cut off any heads. Also when Damaris is walking to Damon you the camera is down so you do not see her face, if you decide to refilm we suggest moving the camera so you can see her facial expressions.
We think if you add music to the part when Damon is daydreaming, it would really add to the mood of Damon liking Damaris.
You need to add titles in your videos. Overall we thought your video is cute, but some shots are awkward and refilming is the best way to fix it.
-Alicia Fernandez & Jorge Chavez
Michael and Cody
Story:
The conflict was between the boy that didn’t want to work with girl and the girl that wanted to work with the boy.
Here are the shots, dialog, and actions that contributed to the rising action:
1. shot: medium shot on the teacher talking
2. shot: scanning the whole room
3. shot: over the shoulder shot of the boy and girl talking
4. shot: two shot on boy and girl
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1. you could add more dialog
2. you could also add more shots to make the video longer
The climax occurred when there was no climax
Describe what happens during the resolution: there was no resolution
You could add to the resolution by making more clips for the video. This would help give us the idea that/create the impression that the video will be more complete.
Camera shots: variety, effectiveness, specific shots that achieved a certain effect.
We especially like the part where Jessica keeps messing up on her line because it helped emphasize the idea that she didn’t know her lines.
We think you might add a shot right after the end, the new shot would be a over the shoulder shot this would help create the feeling that the boy and girl like each other.
Edits:
On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 2. One edit we could change was the shot when jessica messes up on her line.
We noticed between the only two shots you have you don’t have any after it.
Use of music and sound effects:
a. Describe first use of music. Why was it used? Did it work? Would you suggest something else?
The first time music came in was never. I didn’t quite work because there was absolutely no music. You could also try adding music so it will enhance your video.
b. Describe the point in the video when use of the music was MOST IMPOTANT. Why was it used? Did it work? Would you suggest something else?
There was n music. I would try adding music to help develop the mood of the video.
Titles and Credits:
I dint see any titles in your video.
There was no titles.
Add some titles
There was no credits
Overall:
Overall, we thought your film was okay. What we liked the best was damon’s acting. Our stongest suggestion is that you should complete it.
Honestly We could no tell what the conflict was...there was TOO much missing for us to understand.
We don't know what the whole story is hence we don't know what the rising action is.
For the story we can't really critique anything because it is unfinished and unclear.
All of the caerma shots seemed off. The one that showed some potential was the opening one of the teacher.
All the shots there were missing would be nice to add in.
3 for the editing.It was on it's way but there wasn't a lot of good editing to go off of.
There was no music. Since the film was unfinished we can't really suggest any music.
There weren't any titles.
Cassie and Alexis
Feedback on values video for group Jessica, Cristabel , Damon, Damaris
Feedback given by Mario and Laura
Story:
The conflict was between having to admit that he likes her or choosing too just keep avoiding her.
Here are the shots, dialogue, and actions that contributed to the rising action:
1.40 sec to about 1min 02 sec is where the rising action took place.
The medium camera shot of boy starring at the girl.
2.The medium close up of the girl as she turned to the boy to wave.
3.Boy’s rejection turn (medium shot)
4.She gets up and goes to talk to him.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1.You could transition to black to show that she likes the boy but then do a sharp cut to guide the viewers to believe that he doesn’t like her back.
2.You could also add some music to add to the mood.
The climax occurred when he said wait you don’t understand.
Describe what happens during the resolution: The boy admits his true feelings to her.
You could add to the resolution by putting more emotion into the acting. This would help give us the idea that /create the impression that the boy is more interested in her than we believe.
Camera shots: variety, effectiveness, specific shots that achieved a certain effect.
Complete these sentences:
We especially like the over the shoulder shot of the guy and girl, because it helped emphasize the idea that they were in a conversion while showing their reactions to each other’s comments.
We think that you might add a shot right after she gets up and goes to talk to him OR We think you might replace the shot where they are in the beginning because you can hear people in the back ground. The new shot would be medium shot. This would help create the feeling that she will and be viewed from one of the students sitting down.
Edits
On a scale of 1- 10 we rate the editing a 6. One edit we would change was when you start off the beginning you should because it again. We thought the in point and out point was too early and late because it was showing you guys messing around.
We noticed that between (describe 2 shots) you used a ( straight cut, a cross dissolve, a fade to black, a special effect transition). We would have used a dissolve instead, because it will show you as a more sympathetic person .Use of music and sound N/A Titles and credits N/aDid the title of the film reflect its content in some way? Did it grab your attention? Do you have another suggestion for a title?
What did you notice about the titles? Did you think they were effective?
Include any suggestions for improvement.
Credits: What did you notice about credits? Were all images, sound effects and music cited?
Overall:
Over all, we thought your film had a great message. What we like best was that the message was clear .
Our strong suggestion is that you just edit a little and add some music.
Feedback on values video for group Jessica, Cristabel , Damon, Damaris
Feedback given by Mario and Laura
Story:
The conflict was between having to admit that he likes her or choosing too just keep avoiding her.
Here are the shots, dialogue, and actions that contributed to the rising action:
1. 40 sec to about 1min 02 sec is where the rising action took place.
The medium camera shot of boy starring at the girl.
2. The medium close up of the girl as she turned to the boy to wave.
3. Boy’s rejection turn (medium shot)
4. She gets up and goes to talk to him.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1. You could transition to black to show that she likes the boy but then do a sharp cut to guide the viewers to believe that he doesn’t like her back.
2. You could also add some music to add to the mood.
The climax occurred when he said wait you don’t understand.
Describe what happens during the resolution: The boy admits his true feelings to her.
You could add to the resolution by putting more emotion into the acting. This would help give us the idea that /cre te the impression that the boy is more interested in her than we believe.
Camera shots: variety, effectiveness, specific shots that achieved a certain effect.
Complete these sentences:
We especially like the over the shoulder shot of the guy and girl, because it helped emphasize the idea that they were in a conversion while showing their reactions to each other’s comments.
We think that you might add a shot right after she gets up and goes to talk to him OR We think you might replace the shot where they are in the beginning because you can hear people in the back ground. The new shot would be medium shot. This would help create the feeling that she will and be viewed from one of the students sitting down.
Edits
On a scale of 1- 10 we rate the editing a 6. One edit we would change was when you start off the beginning you should because it again. We thought the in point and out point was too early and late because it was showing you guys messing around.
We noticed that between (describe 2 shots) you used a ( straight cut, a cross dissolve, a fade to black, a special effect transition). We would have used a dissolve instead, because it will show you as a more sympathetic person .Use of music and sound N/A Titles and credits N/A
Overall:
Over all, we thought your film had a great message. What we like best was that the message was clear .
Our strong suggestion is that you just edit a little and add some music.
Feedback on values video for group Jessica, Cristabel , Damon, Damaris
Feedback given by Mario and Laura
Story:
The conflict was between having to admit that he likes her or choosing too just keep avoiding her.
Here are the shots, dialogue, and actions that contributed to the rising action:
1.40 sec to about 1min 02 sec is where the rising action took place.
The medium camera shot of boy starring at the girl.
2.The medium close up of the girl as she turned to the boy to wave.
3.Boy’s rejection turn (medium shot)
4.She gets up and goes to talk to him.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1.You could transition to black to show that she likes the boy but then do a sharp cut to guide the viewers to believe that he doesn’t like her back.
2.You could also add some music to add to the mood.
The climax occurred when he said wait you don’t understand.
Describe what happens during the resolution: The boy admits his true feelings to her.
You could add to the resolution by putting more emotion into the acting. This would help give us the idea that /create the impression that the boy is more interested in her than we believe.
Camera shots: variety, effectiveness, specific shots that achieved a certain effect.
Complete these sentences:
We especially like the over the shoulder shot of the guy and girl, because it helped emphasize the idea that they were in a conversion while showing their reactions to each other’s comments.
We think that you might add a shot right after she gets up and goes to talk to him OR We think you might replace the shot where they are in the beginning because you can hear people in the back ground. The new shot would be medium shot. This would help create the feeling that she will and be viewed from one of the students sitting down.
Edits
On a scale of 1- 10 we rate the editing a 6. One edit we would change was when you start off the beginning you should because it again. We thought the in point and out point was too early and late because it was showing you guys messing around.
We noticed that between (describe 2 shots) you used a ( straight cut, a cross dissolve, a fade to black, a special effect transition). We would have used a dissolve instead, because it will show you as a more sympathetic person .Use of music and sound N/A Titles and credits N/aDid the title of the film reflect its content in some way? Did it grab your attention? Do you have another suggestion for a title?
What did you notice about the titles? Did you think they were effective?
Include any suggestions for improvement.
Credits: What did you notice about credits? Were all images, sound effects and music cited?
Overall:
Over all, we thought your film had a great message. What we like best was that the message was clear .
Our strong suggestion is that you just edit a little and add some music.
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