The conflict was between choosing to tell the truth or avoiding and lying. At 2:20 where jose breaks the board contributes to the rising action. At 2:38 Taylor mentions that they would be lying, his tone of voice says that it's bad that lying is an option. Suggestions: You could shorten the length of time it gets to reach the rising action leading into the climax. The climax occured when Taylor chased after Benji to tell him the truth. In the resolution, they Benji forgives Taylor and they both go get ice cream. We especially like the shot when the camera turned towards the sky because it was a good transition from leaving the beach. You could replace the shot where it was first person riding the skateboard towards Benji with another shot that pans showing Taylor riding the board from one side of the scene to the next. We rate the editing a 7. One edit we would change was the intro with parking of the car. It showed a discontinue of time. We noticed that you used titles to represent an amount of time that elapsed. Maybe you can use different shots of buildings or just some environment shots and some crossfades to start the new scene to portray a passing of time. The music was the same throughout with no editing. The music gave the feeling of the "surfer dude" tone of the film which worked. But it stayed constant which kept the same tone even when Jose broke the board and Taylor yelled "No" dramatically. Use of dramatic music and happy music would help the rising action, the climax, and the resolution. The title fit the tone of the entire film and showed what it was about. It was an attention grabber because of the informal use of excess letters in the word "Dude" to emphasize the type of language the two characters played. The credits didn't cite where the music was from. Overall, we thought your film was very comedic but was too long. What we liked best was the acting. Our strongest suggestion is that you pay attention with location of the characters because they seem to jump around, breaking the perception of continuous time.
Feedback given by Blanca Ceja and Michelle Hernandez.
The conflict was a internal conflict. We believe that it was between the two friends because taylor had let Jose borrow the board and Jose broke it , so Taylor had to tell Bengi the truth of what had happen to his board. So taylor had to be honest.
SHOTS THAT CONTRIBUTED TO RISING ACTION: 1 Jose surfing and then him coming back to tell Taylor what had happen.2 taylor looking dispointed. 3 when taylor and jose go to the caffe. 4 taylor taling to Bengi. 5 Taylor showing bengi the broken board.
Some Suggestions: 1. You could have more shots of the broken board. 2. You could also have Taylor look mad at Jose for braking the board.
The climax occurred when taylor showed the broken board to Bengi. During the resolution Bengi says its okay that the board broke. It was a fast resolution. you could add to the resolution by adding more complicated dialoge. This would give us a idea that your resolution was not short.
CAMERA SHOTS: We especially like the transitions. When the camera would look up to the sky and the scene would change, it made a smooth transition. It emphasized the idea that it was in the day .We think that you might add a shot right after They are talking about the broken board when on the beach. We think there should be a close up of there faces when they are talking befare the transition.
Edits: On a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 7 because the car moves when he parks it. We thought that the in points were set to early when they are about to leave on the skateboards to the beach. We noticed that the transitions of the wordings took to long from shot to shot. We would have made them shoter and put crossfade in between so it would be a good flow to your video and not make it look choppy. The first use of music was presented at the beginging of the video when the car is shown and being parked. It worked because it gave it a mood to the story, like a relaxing mood. The point where we thought the music was most important was when they were "surfing."
Titiles and credits: The title did connect to the story, it was about honesty. The title's spelling caught my attention and made it seem intersting. They did have credits at the end, and i believe all the music and images were cited.
Overall:
Overall we thought your film was interting and it sent a good message about being honest. What we liked the best was that you had diffrent sences in your film and the transition of the sky. Our strongest suggerstion is that you change the edits a little so it would look more smooth, like in the part when the guys go into the store and come back out, it looks choppy.
Dear Jose, Taylor, and Kelsey STORY The main characters and his cousin who loaned him a surf board thing.
Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action: 1. The main character pulls out his cousin's board. 2. They go to the beach and ride it. 3. The board gets broken. 4. The friend lies about the board being broken. Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1. Shorten the intro. 2. You could aslo make the surfing more realistic.
The climax occured when they told the truth about the board breakign. In the resolution, the main character tells his cousin that he breaks the board and its ok. You can add to the resolution by showing all three characters having fun. This would help give us the idea that the values in the video were stronger. CAMERA SHOTS We especially like the panning when they showed the scenery. We think that you might add a shot of just the ocean to show how pretty it is. The next shot would be a close up of the main characters face after the board breaks. EDITS: on a scale of 1-10 (10 being the highest), we rate the editing an 9.One edit we would change was the beginning. We thought the out point was set to late . We noticed when the scenery is shown its a straight cut. We would have used a cross disovle because its cooler.The first use of music is when they pull up in the car into the parking lot.It was used to emphasize the idea that they were at a beach. It worked because it set the mood. The music was the same throughout the video . It worked because it made me feel like i was at a beach. TITLES AND CREDITS The title fit well with the video. the credits were fine but the music wasn't cited. OVERALL overall we thought your film was good. What we liked best was the scenery shots. Our strongest suggestion is that shorten the intro.
The conflict was between Honesty and lying. Here are the shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1. Establishing Shot 2. Over The Shoulder 3. Long Shot 4. Point Of View Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: you could shorten the car scene. The climax occured when Taylor lets Jose borrow the board and Jose says he will be super careful. During the resolution Taylor goes back to the guy that they borrowed the board from and tells him the truth. We espicially like the two-shot of when Taylor and Jose are at the beach talking, because it helped emphasize the idea that Taylor trust Jose with the board. We rate the editing a 8. One edit we would change was at the beginning at the car scene we would shorten it. The first use of music was when the titled appeared at the beginning of the video. It was used to emphasize the idea that Taylor and Jose were surfers. It worked because it helped show that they are going to the beach. Music was the same throughout the whole video.One suggestion for a title would be "Honesty" The credits were done properly and not the music was cited. Overall, we thought the film was good and had a good message. What we liked best was the POV shot when Taylor was riding on his long board. The strongest suggestion is that you shorten the car scene. -Emily Keezer -Eduardo B
The conflict was telling the truth or lying. Jose had broken the surf board its the rising action. Shots wer long shots of the beach, and the panning of Taylor on the board. You could have made the video a little shorter maybe where the rising action is. The climax was when Taylor told the other guy that his board broke. The resolution is where the guy forgives Taylor and they eat ice cream. We loved how you showed the shops and the sky of you leaving the beach. We rate your video a 9. We would edit out where you ride the board for a while. We got a little bored. Also edit out the bad parking you done. You should use a fade when you start to show you riding the boared and showing pedestrians. We think your video is good with the music it gives a at the beach mood. And title is good the way it is. It fits the story. Overall your video was hilarious! Your group has talent. Always,Sabrena, Ashley P, Eddie E.
STORY The conflict is between Taylor's trust with other people. Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action: 1. when you see that Jose broke Taylor's board 2. when the two characters walk out of the ice cream parlor. we really like the rising action. The climax occured when Taylor leaves with Benji's board. In the resolution, Benji appreciates Taylor for his honesty. CAMERA SHOTS We especially like the shot of Jose surfing because it showed the beginning of various funny scenes. EDITS: on a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 7. The first use of music is at the beggining to show that it's a casual day at the beach. TITLES AND CREDITS the title was good but it needed to be centered and it shows that there is a lesson to be learned. the credits were also good, but they did not cite their music sources. OVERALL overall we thought your film was good. -Isaiah S and Cesar J P.S. We found the source of your 9 minute video length, there was a leftover clip near the end of the video.
The conflict was between choosing to tell the truth or avoiding and lying. At 2:20 where jose breaks the board contributes to the rising action. At 2:38 Taylor mentions that they would be lying, his tone of voice says that it's bad that lying is an option.
ReplyDeleteSuggestions: You could shorten the length of time it gets to reach the rising action leading into the climax. The climax occured when Taylor chased after Benji to tell him the truth. In the resolution, they Benji forgives Taylor and they both go get ice cream.
We especially like the shot when the camera turned towards the sky because it was a good transition from leaving the beach. You could replace the shot where it was first person riding the skateboard towards Benji with another shot that pans showing Taylor riding the board from one side of the scene to the next. We rate the editing a 7. One edit we would change was the intro with parking of the car. It showed a discontinue of time. We noticed that you used titles to represent an amount of time that elapsed. Maybe you can use different shots of buildings or just some environment shots and some crossfades to start the new scene to portray a passing of time. The music was the same throughout with no editing. The music gave the feeling of the "surfer dude" tone of the film which worked. But it stayed constant which kept the same tone even when Jose broke the board and Taylor yelled "No" dramatically. Use of dramatic music and happy music would help the rising action, the climax, and the resolution. The title fit the tone of the entire film and showed what it was about. It was an attention grabber because of the informal use of excess letters in the word "Dude" to emphasize the type of language the two characters played. The credits didn't cite where the music was from. Overall, we thought your film was very comedic but was too long. What we liked best was the acting. Our strongest suggestion is that you pay attention with location of the characters because they seem to jump around, breaking the perception of continuous time.
John and Joselyn
Feedback given by Blanca Ceja and Michelle Hernandez.
ReplyDeleteThe conflict was a internal conflict. We believe that it was between the two friends because taylor had let Jose borrow the board and Jose broke it , so Taylor had to tell Bengi the truth of what had happen to his board. So taylor had to be honest.
SHOTS THAT CONTRIBUTED TO RISING ACTION: 1 Jose surfing and then him coming back to tell Taylor what had happen.2 taylor looking dispointed. 3 when taylor and jose go to the caffe. 4 taylor taling to Bengi. 5 Taylor showing bengi the broken board.
Some Suggestions:
1. You could have more shots of the broken board.
2. You could also have Taylor look mad at Jose for braking the board.
The climax occurred when taylor showed the broken board to Bengi.
During the resolution Bengi says its okay that the board broke. It was a fast resolution.
you could add to the resolution by adding more complicated dialoge. This would give us a idea that your resolution was not short.
CAMERA SHOTS: We especially like the transitions. When the camera would look up to the sky and the scene would change, it made a smooth transition. It emphasized the idea that it was in the day .We think that you might add a shot right after They are talking about the broken board when on the beach. We think there should be a close up of there faces when they are talking befare the transition.
Edits: On a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 7 because the car moves when he parks it. We thought that the in points were set to early when they are about to leave on the skateboards to the beach.
We noticed that the transitions of the wordings took to long from shot to shot. We would have made them shoter and put crossfade in between so it would be a good flow to your video and not make it look choppy. The first use of music was presented at the beginging of the video when the car is shown and being parked. It worked because it gave it a mood to the story, like a relaxing mood.
The point where we thought the music was most important was when they were "surfing."
Titiles and credits:
The title did connect to the story, it was about honesty. The title's spelling caught my attention and made it seem intersting. They did have credits at the end, and i believe all the music and images were cited.
Overall:
Overall we thought your film was interting and it sent a good message about being honest. What we liked the best was that you had diffrent sences in your film and the transition of the sky. Our strongest suggerstion is that you change the edits a little so it would look more smooth, like in the part when the guys go into the store and come back out, it looks choppy.
Dear Jose, Taylor, and Kelsey
ReplyDeleteSTORY
The main characters and his cousin who loaned him a surf board thing.
Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action:
1. The main character pulls out his cousin's board.
2. They go to the beach and ride it.
3. The board gets broken.
4. The friend lies about the board being broken.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1. Shorten the intro.
2. You could aslo make the surfing more realistic.
The climax occured when they told the truth about the board breakign.
In the resolution, the main character tells his cousin that he breaks the board and its ok. You can add to the resolution by showing all three characters having fun. This would help give us the idea that the values in the video were stronger.
CAMERA SHOTS
We especially like the panning when they showed the scenery. We think that you might add a shot of just the ocean to show how pretty it is. The next shot would be a close up of the main characters face after the board breaks.
EDITS:
on a scale of 1-10 (10 being the highest), we rate the editing an 9.One edit we would change was the beginning. We thought the out point was set to late . We noticed when the scenery is shown its a straight cut. We would have used a cross disovle because its cooler.The first use of music is when they pull up in the car into the parking lot.It was used to emphasize the idea that they were at a beach. It worked because it set the mood. The music was the same throughout the video . It worked because it made me feel like i was at a beach.
TITLES AND CREDITS
The title fit well with the video. the credits were fine but the music wasn't cited.
OVERALL
overall we thought your film was good. What we liked best was the scenery shots. Our strongest suggestion is that shorten the intro.
Hang ten brooooo
Jacob D and Morgan D
The conflict was between Honesty and lying. Here are the shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action:
ReplyDelete1. Establishing Shot
2. Over The Shoulder
3. Long Shot
4. Point Of View
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
you could shorten the car scene. The climax occured when Taylor lets Jose borrow the board and Jose says he will be super careful. During the resolution Taylor goes back to the guy that they borrowed the board from and tells him the truth. We espicially like the two-shot of when Taylor and Jose are at the beach talking, because it helped emphasize the idea that Taylor trust Jose with the board. We rate the editing a 8. One edit we would change was at the beginning at the car scene we would shorten it. The first use of music was when the titled appeared at the beginning of the video. It was used to emphasize the idea that Taylor and Jose were surfers. It worked because it helped show that they are going to the beach. Music was the same throughout the whole video.One suggestion for a title would be "Honesty" The credits were done properly and not the music was cited. Overall, we thought the film was good and had a good message. What we liked best was the POV shot when Taylor was riding on his long board. The strongest suggestion is that you shorten the car scene.
-Emily Keezer
-Eduardo B
The conflict was telling the truth or lying. Jose had broken the surf board its the rising action. Shots wer long shots of the beach, and the panning of Taylor on the board.
ReplyDeleteYou could have made the video a little shorter maybe where the rising action is. The climax was when Taylor told the other guy that his board broke. The resolution is where the guy forgives Taylor and they eat ice cream. We loved how you showed the shops and the sky of you leaving the beach. We rate your video a 9. We would edit out where you ride the board for a while. We got a little bored. Also edit out the bad parking you done. You should use a fade when you start to show you riding the boared and showing pedestrians. We think your video is good with the music it gives a at the beach mood. And title is good the way it is. It fits the story. Overall your video was hilarious! Your group has talent.
Always,Sabrena, Ashley P, Eddie E.
STORY
ReplyDeleteThe conflict is between Taylor's trust with other people.
Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action:
1. when you see that Jose broke Taylor's board
2. when the two characters walk out of the ice cream parlor.
we really like the rising action. The climax occured when Taylor leaves with Benji's board.
In the resolution, Benji appreciates Taylor for his honesty.
CAMERA SHOTS
We especially like the shot of Jose surfing because it showed the beginning of various funny scenes.
EDITS:
on a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 7. The first use of music is at the beggining to show that it's a casual day at the beach.
TITLES AND CREDITS
the title was good but it needed to be centered and it shows that there is a lesson to be learned. the credits were also good, but they did not cite their music sources.
OVERALL
overall we thought your film was good.
-Isaiah S and Cesar J
P.S. We found the source of your 9 minute video length, there was a leftover clip near the end of the video.