The conflict was between the girl and cheating on the test. 1. The view of the whole classroom 2. The close up on the teacher's face 3. The teacher's dialog saying that only one girl did really well 4. Flash back to teacher's desk
Suggestions: You could add some fade in and outs in between the flashbacks to prove a point that time has passed. You could also have some dramatic music during the flashback to show that something bad is happening.
The climax occured when the girl is stealing the test from the teachers desk. During the resolution, the girl releaves her stress by coming clean and telling the teacher she cheated and did not really do that well. You could also add the resolution by adding some music to show that she is nervous to tell the truth.
Camera shots: We especially like the flash back shot of the teacher's desk, because it helped emphasize the idea that the situation occured in the classroom. We think that you might add a shot right after she gets out of the day dream to show how scared she looks. This would help strengthen the idea that she can't get away with cheating instead of feeling sick.
Edits: On a scale of 1-10, I rate the editing an 8. One edit we would change was the cut after the teacher leaving the room. We thought it was cut too fast. We would have used a fade because it shows time passing.
Music and sound: There should be more music throughout the video.
Titles&Credits: There was no title at the beginning and there should be. It was effective towards the end but not during the video because we don't know what to expect out of the video. I would suggest to add a title at the beginning to reflect the videos content. Also, try to make some of the cuts run more smoothly. Overall, we thought your film was very successful. What we liked best was the flashback. Our strongest suggestion is that you fix some of the edits and add music.
The conflict is between "Brenda" and herself on whether or not to tell the teacher the truth about her cheating.
CONTRIBUTING TO THE RISING ACTION 1. Flashback 2. "Brenda" stays behind class. 3. Over the shoulder looking down on "Brenda". 4. Close up on "Brenda" looking guilty.
SUGGESTIONS FOR RISING ACTION
I don't think there is any other way that I would have done the rising action. I like it exactly how it is and I could tell yall put a lot of thought and effort into it. The climax occurs when "Brenda" takes a picture of the test answers. During the resolution, Brenda stays behind after class and confesses that she cheated. The teacher then punishes her by giving her detention, but is also proud of her for telling the truth, so she allows her to retake the test. You could add to the resolution by showing "Brenda" getting a good grade after taking the test again. This would help create the impression that being honest is the best thing to do.
CAMERA SHOTS
I especially liked the over the shoulder shot looking down on "Brenda" because it helped emphasize the idea that she feels guilty for what she's done. I think you should add a shot of "Brenda" studying for her retake after she tells the teacher the truth. This again emphasizes the idea that honesty is the best route.
EDITS
On a scale from 1-10 i give the editing a 9. One edit I would have changed was after the shot of the teacher leaving the classroom. I would have dissolved instead straight cut to show that time has passed.
MUSIC/SOUND
The first use of music is at the end when "Brenda" is leaving the room, It was used to emphasize a mood of hopefullness. It worked because the song was upbeat. This was also the point where music was most important because it shows that there is always a better option than cheating.
TITLES/CREDITS
the title reflected on the video nicely, it grabbed my attention, and was done properly. All of the sources were cited properly. If I was yall I would have put the video title in the beginning of the viedo.
Overall I thought the film was great. I liked the concept of the story line the best. My strongest suggestion is to add more music and rethink your transitions. A dissolve or fade would be better in some scenes.
Feedback by Liz The conflict was between the girl lying and keeping her high grade on the test that she didn't deserve and whether to tell her teacher the truth that she cheated. Shots/dialog/actions that contribute to rising action: 1. When it transitions to early when she took the picture of the test 2. When the teacher left the room 3. When the student was looking around for the test 4. Close up that makes her look guilty Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1. You could add a fade when the teacher leaves the room to show time has passed. 2. You could also add some over the shoulder shots of her looking at the test. The climax occurred when she took the picture of the answers. During the resolution the student confessed she cheated and the teacher gave her detention and a new test to take. You could add to the resolution by having the student confess to the class she cheated. This would emphasize that it’s not good to cheat. Camera shots: I especially like the low angle shot of Alexis because it helped emphasize the idea that she felt guilty. You might want to add a shot in the beginning of the teacher when she starts talking. The new shot could be a medium of Cassie. This would strengthen the feeling of her being the teacher. Edits: On a scale of 1-10, I rate the editing a 6. I know that it was a rough edit and I know you guys are aware of the editing and that there are things you want to change. One edit I would change would be when Alexis gets up because she gets up twice. You could do an insert if you want to show her getting up from different angles. I noticed that between the shot of when the students leave and the shot of Cassie at the desk is a straight cut and is very long. You could use a dissolve to show time passing when the students leave and then you could put the shot of Cassie at the desk. Use of music and sound effects: The first time music came in was when Alexis was finally leaving the classroom and it ran through the credits. It was used to emphasize the mood of Alexis feeling better because she did the right thing. It worked because it made me feel that she did the right thing too. The part where you should put music would be when Alexis came into the classroom and took a picture of the test. This would emphasize how sneaky she was being. Titles and credits: I thought it was cool that the put the title at the end because it was something different but at first I didn’t realize that was the title. The titles and credits were really good. I thought they looked really cool. And yes everything was cited. Overall: Overall, we thought your film was good and effective. What I liked best was the idea and the script because I thought it was very planned out and made sense. My strongest suggestion would be just to fix the editing.
3 comments:
JULISSA
The conflict was between the girl and cheating on the test.
1. The view of the whole classroom
2. The close up on the teacher's face
3. The teacher's dialog saying that only one girl did really well
4. Flash back to teacher's desk
Suggestions:
You could add some fade in and outs in between the flashbacks to prove a point that time has passed.
You could also have some dramatic music during the flashback to show that something bad is happening.
The climax occured when the girl is stealing the test from the teachers desk.
During the resolution, the girl releaves her stress by coming clean and telling the teacher she cheated and did not really do that well.
You could also add the resolution by adding some music to show that she is nervous to tell the truth.
Camera shots:
We especially like the flash back shot of the teacher's desk, because it helped emphasize the idea that the situation occured in the classroom.
We think that you might add a shot right after she gets out of the day dream to show how scared she looks. This would help strengthen the idea that she can't get away with cheating instead of feeling sick.
Edits:
On a scale of 1-10, I rate the editing an 8. One edit we would change was the cut after the teacher leaving the room. We thought it was cut too fast. We would have used a fade because it shows time passing.
Music and sound:
There should be more music throughout the video.
Titles&Credits:
There was no title at the beginning and there should be. It was effective towards the end but not during the video because we don't know what to expect out of the video. I would suggest to add a title at the beginning to reflect the videos content. Also, try to make some of the cuts run more smoothly.
Overall, we thought your film was very successful. What we liked best was the flashback. Our strongest suggestion is that you fix some of the edits and add music.
RYAN
The conflict is between "Brenda" and herself on whether or not to tell the teacher the truth about her cheating.
CONTRIBUTING TO THE RISING ACTION
1. Flashback
2. "Brenda" stays behind class.
3. Over the shoulder looking down on "Brenda".
4. Close up on "Brenda" looking guilty.
SUGGESTIONS FOR RISING ACTION
I don't think there is any other way that I would have done the rising action. I like it exactly how it is and I could tell yall put a lot of thought and effort into it.
The climax occurs when "Brenda" takes a picture of the test answers.
During the resolution, Brenda stays behind after class and confesses that she cheated. The teacher then punishes her by giving her detention, but is also proud of her for telling the truth, so she allows her to retake the test. You could add to the resolution by showing "Brenda" getting a good grade after taking the test again. This would help create the impression that being honest is the best thing to do.
CAMERA SHOTS
I especially liked the over the shoulder shot looking down on "Brenda" because it helped emphasize the idea that she feels guilty for what she's done.
I think you should add a shot of "Brenda" studying for her retake after she tells the teacher the truth. This again emphasizes the idea that honesty is the best route.
EDITS
On a scale from 1-10 i give the editing a 9. One edit I would have changed was after the shot of the teacher leaving the classroom. I would have dissolved instead straight cut to show that time has passed.
MUSIC/SOUND
The first use of music is at the end when "Brenda" is leaving the room, It was used to emphasize a mood of hopefullness. It worked because the song was upbeat.
This was also the point where music was most important because it shows that there is always a better option than cheating.
TITLES/CREDITS
the title reflected on the video nicely, it grabbed my attention, and was done properly. All of the sources were cited properly. If I was yall I would have put the video title in the beginning of the viedo.
Overall I thought the film was great. I liked the concept of the story line the best. My strongest suggestion is to add more music and rethink your transitions. A dissolve or fade would be better in some scenes.
Feedback by Liz
The conflict was between the girl lying and keeping her high grade on the test that she didn't deserve and whether to tell her teacher the truth that she cheated.
Shots/dialog/actions that contribute to rising action:
1. When it transitions to early when she took the picture of the test
2. When the teacher left the room
3. When the student was looking around for the test
4. Close up that makes her look guilty
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1. You could add a fade when the teacher leaves the room to show time has passed.
2. You could also add some over the shoulder shots of her looking at the test.
The climax occurred when she took the picture of the answers.
During the resolution the student confessed she cheated and the teacher gave her detention and a new test to take.
You could add to the resolution by having the student confess to the class she cheated. This would emphasize that it’s not good to cheat.
Camera shots:
I especially like the low angle shot of Alexis because it helped emphasize the idea that she felt guilty.
You might want to add a shot in the beginning of the teacher when she starts talking. The new shot could be a medium of Cassie. This would strengthen the feeling of her being the teacher.
Edits:
On a scale of 1-10, I rate the editing a 6. I know that it was a rough edit and I know you guys are aware of the editing and that there are things you want to change. One edit I would change would be when Alexis gets up because she gets up twice. You could do an insert if you want to show her getting up from different angles.
I noticed that between the shot of when the students leave and the shot of Cassie at the desk is a straight cut and is very long. You could use a dissolve to show time passing when the students leave and then you could put the shot of Cassie at the desk.
Use of music and sound effects:
The first time music came in was when Alexis was finally leaving the classroom and it ran through the credits. It was used to emphasize the mood of Alexis feeling better because she did the right thing. It worked because it made me feel that she did the right thing too.
The part where you should put music would be when Alexis came into the classroom and took a picture of the test. This would emphasize how sneaky she was being.
Titles and credits:
I thought it was cool that the put the title at the end because it was something different but at first I didn’t realize that was the title. The titles and credits were really good. I thought they looked really cool. And yes everything was cited.
Overall:
Overall, we thought your film was good and effective. What I liked best was the idea and the script because I thought it was very planned out and made sense. My strongest suggestion would be just to fix the editing.
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