Feedback given by Michelle Hernandez and Blanca Ceja. Story: Standing up for yourself and Bullies. The conflict between bullies and standing up for yourself.
What we really liked about the video was how it was up beat and went with the flow , it wasn't choppy and i understood it. Shot such as over the shoulder and full effect shot made me understand the scene and what is happening. The rising action when Cesar was getting picked on until they fought.
Some suggestion we would have are, when playing the music in the video it would make the video more professionla if you lowereed the music while the fighting scene to feel whats going on. This would help give us the idea that you guys are fighting for the purpose of Cesar standing up for himself. We especially like the close up shot of Cesar because it helped emphasize the idea that he was a little scared and confused with what to do. We think that you might add a shot right after Cesar getting beat up and solving their problems.
On a scale of one to ten we rate the editing and 8, we thought it was edited very well with slight complications. We noticed that between ashleys shot you used an edit with her name, although the shot was very quick that we didn't spot ashley, so we were confused.
The use of music was good, alothough it was loud as it went on and especially when they were fighting it got to loud to the point were we couldn't hear them.You could also try lowering the music at that point. The most important use of music was when isiah was trying to hype up cesar. It was used to help emphasize the mood of adrenalin or the idea that he wanted him to stand up for himself. It worked because i started feeling the emotions that cesar was feeling. There were no titles in the beginning but there were titles at the end to conclude there story. I thought the titles were effective for the people who were a little lost and din't understand.
Overall, we thought your film was were organized and got the point to what they were trying to get out to people. What we liked best was the edning part where they added in the music from the arcade and also the game characters. Our storngest suggestion is that you add in some titles for the beginning to get a taste of what will happen next and lowering the music when they start to fight.
Dear Cesar, Isaiah, and Ashley, STORY The conflict was between the main character and the bully.
Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action: 1. The main character is approached by the bully. 2. The bully begins to harass him. 3. The bully wants to fight. 4. The main characters friend tells him to fight.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1. You could of had a reason for the fight. 2. You could also add another characters opion on the fight.
The climax occured when they showed up to fight. In the resolution, the main character wins the fight. You can add to the resolution by showing what happens after the fight. This would help give us the idea that the values in the video were stronger. CAMERA SHOTS We especially like the close up shot of the main character because it helped emphasize the idea that he was nervous. We think that you might add a shot after the fight to see what happened. The next shot would be a medium shot of the main character and his friend and this would help emphasize the value that we can all get along.
EDITS: on a scale of 1-10 (10 being the highest), we rate the editing an 8.One edit we would change was when the bestfriend comes in. We thougt the in point was set to early. We noticed when the main character and the bully begin to fight you used staright cuts. We would have used a special transition effect because its cooler.The first use of music is when the bully came in the scene. It was used to emphasize the idea that the bully is scurry. It worked because it changed the mood. The music was most important before the fight because it emphasized the mood of anger and violence. It worked because it made me feel angry. TITLES AND CREDITS There was no title and only credits. Titles would have helped because i would have gotten an idea of what it would be about.the credits were fine but the music wasn't cited. OVERALL overall we thought your film was good. What we liked best was the close-ups. Our strongest suggestion is that you add a scene after the fight.
The conflict was between good and evil. Here are the shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1. eye level close up 2. two-shot 3. medium shot 4. Long shot Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: you could raise the volume when isiah and cesar are at the lunch table talking.You could also make the shot when they are talking at the table shorter. The climax occured when isiah told cesar that he needs to fight joe around 2:23 in the video. During the resolution cesar beats joe. We espicially like the point of view shot of when cesar and joe are talking in the beginning, because it helped emphasize the idea that something bad was going to happen. We think you might replace a shot where isiah and cesar are talking at the end of the video. The new shot would be medium shot.This would help emphasize the feeling that cesar is happy about beating joe. We rate the editing a 7. One edit we would change was when isiah and cesar at the lunch table it was to long. The first use of music was when joe appeared in the beginning of the video. It was used to emphasize the idea that joe was the bad guy. It worked because it helped show the mood that joe was the bad guy. Music was most important when they were at the lunch tables and joe appears wanting to fight cesar and when joe and cesar fight. It was used to emphasize the idea that something bad was going to happen. One suggestion for a title would be "The Bully". The credits were done properly and not all the music was cited. Overall, we thought the film was good and had a good message. What we liked best was the opening scene when cesar walks out and joe comes out of nowhere and the music starts playing. The strongest suggestion is that you shorten the lunch table scene. -Emily Keezer -Eduardo B
The conflict is between a bully and a nerd. The nerd didnt help him with his test, so he failed it and the bully wanted to take his anger out on the nerd. The shots were good in the beginning when they both were talking to each other. They both had good in and out points. We though i was a good clip when instead of the pase to go normal. It was really in fast motion so he can go fast to see what has happen between the nerd and the bully.The music was good when it showed the bully to show how bad he is and how hardcore he is. The climax is when the bully comes back and attacks him and puts his head on the trash can. This was like a real life clip when bully, attack anywhere and anytime. We especially liked the part when the made a shoot of the close up between the bully and the nerd like when they are gonna fight it shows that they are confident and ready to do this. We think that they should of picked a different location of the fight because we heard more of the wind instead of the them talking. We think that we can replace one the clips when the are sitting in the cafeteria benches and are attacked by the bully. With an over the shoulder to see them more closer to show more of their facial expressions about the situation. We think that the rating from one to ten on editing was a Seven they had good clips but some clips didnt have good set in and out points. We noticed when they used fade transitions to show like The next Day or Later That Day.... . We think the most important clip for the music is in the beggining whe the bully comes out of the bush. Only the titles in between the clips of that moment going to another time were good titles. And the credits didnt help at the end they didnt cite the music of where it came from. Overall we though it was a good video it shows real life events of what a bully could of done at school. But our strongets suggestion is next time dont make it look childish because this video looked like a little cartoon not a good value video.
The conflict is between a bully and a nerd. The nerd didnt help him with his test, so he failed it and the bully wanted to take his anger out on the nerd. The shots were good in the beginning when they both were talking to each other. They both had good in and out points. We though i was a good clip when instead of the pase to go normal. It was really in fast motion so he can go fast to see what has happen between the nerd and the bully.The music was good when it showed the bully to show how bad he is and how hardcore he is. The climax is when the bully comes back and attacks him and puts his head on the trash can. This was like a real life clip when bully, attack anywhere and anytime. We especially liked the part when the made a shoot of the close up between the bully and the nerd like when they are gonna fight it shows that they are confident and ready to do this. We think that they should of picked a different location of the fight because we heard more of the wind instead of the them talking. We think that we can replace one the clips when the are sitting in the cafeteria benches and are attacked by the bully. With an over the shoulder to see them more closer to show more of their facial expressions about the situation. We think that the rating from one to ten on editing was a Seven they had good clips but some clips didnt have good set in and out points. We noticed when they used fade transitions to show like The next Day or Later That Day.... . We think the most important clip for the music is in the beggining whe the bully comes out of the bush. Only the titles in between the clips of that moment going to another time were good titles. And the credits didnt help at the end they didnt cite the music of where it came from. Overall we though it was a good video it shows real life events of what a bully could of done at school. But our strongets suggestion is next time dont make it look childish because this video looked like a little cartoon not a good value video.
Feedback Given by: Eduardo E. Ashley Perez and Sabrina.
Feedback By: Kenzie Campbell and Ivy Phelps The conflict was between Cesar and the bully Joe. The shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1. Opening shot of confrontation 2. Isaiah conversing with Cesar post confrontation 3. Up close shot of Joe’s face 4. Cesar shrugging his shoulders in response to Joe’s up close shot Suggestions about adding to the rising action: You could alter the scene to be shorter at the picnic table as Cesar is explaining to Isaiah why he cannot fight or adjust the volume so it can be comprehended more clearly by the viewers. You could also just include the initial fighting scene in the picnic table scene to establish Cesar’s strength level comparatively to Joe’s. The climax occurred when Cesar agreed that he would fight Joe while having a conversation with Isaiah. Describe what happens during the resolution: Isaiah runs over to Cesar to congratulate him of his win in the fight against Cesar. You could add to the resolution by establishing a lesson Cesar and the supporting characters took away from the present situation or the fight/altercation. This would help give us the idea that/create the impression that Cesar will become a stronger person mentally and emotionally while dealing with bullies and hazardous influences such as Isaiah’s character in the future. Camera shots We especially like the extreme close ups of Joe and Cesar during the final fight scene because it helped emphasize the idea that Cesar took Isaiah’s advice to heart and he is ready to fight. We think that you might add a shot right after this extreme close up of another extreme close up of the first swing/slap/punch thrown. This would help create the feeling that the fight has been initiated, and tension as to who will win. Edits: On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 6. One edit we would change was the picnic shot while Cesar and Isaiah discussed why Cesar should fight Joe . We thought the in point was set too early and the out point was set too late. We noticed that between the opening shot when Cesar and Joe initially meet, you used a straight cut to transition to the next scene but you may want to consider a cross dissolve to enhance the effect of Isaiah’s entrance. Use of music and sound effects: a. The first time the music came in was when Cesar was walking toward the bully. It was used to help emphasize the mood of the brutality executed by the bully opposite Cesar. Or the idea that Cesar is weak/incompetent and may not be able to stand up for himself comparatively to such a significant opponent/enemy. It worked because it accomplished an ominous foreshadowing of the events to come later in the film or the fight, however, the volume was too loud throughout the dialog. b. The most important point use of music was during the final fight at the end of the film. It was used to help emphasize the mood of anticipation and tension as to whether or not Cesar would be demolished in the fight by his competitor. It worked because it established a mood parallel to the scene which was highly intense compared to earlier scenes and/or fights. Titles and credits: The opening shot lacked a title, therefore this left us unsure as to what the theme or overall message would be. We suggest a title such as, “Stand Up For Yourself.” The credits were immensely bold and they stood out, however, they acted as the most important aspect of the film which is somewhat of an issue. The music is not cited, neither were the sound effects or images. Overall: Overall, we thought your film interesting and unique because it was conveyed as a video game due to the titles inserted in the middle of the film and the music used throughout the film. What we liked best were the extreme close up shots of Joe and Cesar before the final fight (3:45-3:46) because they established personal reactions to the fight to come. Our strongest suggestion is that you mend the scene at the picnic tables and establish a more straightforward message of the film.
Group 21 Feedback from Taylor and Jose The conflict is about this guy and this guy i didnt really understand the conflict or the value of this video. here are some chots that i saw during the rising action 1.over shoulder shot 2.close-up 3.established shot 4.eye level angled shot as well here are some suggestions i recommend you guys and 1.you could of shortened the rising action alot more, it took yuou guys a while to get to the rising, other then that it was pretty good. another thing you can do is actually try to show the message to your viewers i really didnt get what the value of this video was. the climax ocurred when the character beat the bully up after the bully kept picking on that poor kid. there really wasnt a resolution to this video and you guys can make a change on that as well. You could add the resolution and that would help your video cause it would show your viewers what the video is about. camera shots: we especially like the close-up shot of both characters because it showed that both were about to battle eachother like an actual fight. we think that you might add a shot when you and ceaser were talking at the tables, i feel like that could be alot closeer cause it was difficult to hear you guys conversating.ON the scale of 1-10 your editing was a big 6-7 i thought it was pretty good, the only shot that you guys should change was the one i said above. other then that one it was really good. Music: The first time you guys used this sdong was to show that the bully was really mean, the mood of the song went perfect with the bullying scene, one thing can be fixed with the video is lower the sound of it cause it was too hard to listen to you guys talk. titles and credits were really good you dont need to change that. Overall: ovrall we thought your film was good, but a tad long what we liked best was the shots you guys didthat was real good our strongest sug3stion that we give to you is that you should shorten the video up and make the resolution clear.
The conflict was between standing up for yourself and being a coward. Here are the shots: there were mostly point of view shots during they're video that's what was mostly consisted of. I liked this one shot of Isaiah that got speeded up when he was running across the tables it caught my attention during the video. To of made your rising action better you could of lowered the volume of the music to hear cesar being afarid of the bully. And to tell what was happening more clearly. The climax occured when the bully show up and told cesar to fight him after school. During the resolution cesar decides to overcome his fears and stand up for himself by fighting back, Isaiah convinced him to do this. I don't think anything needed to be added to the resolution you could of told us that Cesar was going to fight him but then that would just give it away for the end. i thought it was exciting to wait and see what he was really going to do. we especially like the point of view shot when cesar and the bully were talking because it gave the feeling like you were there with them. We think that you might add a shot right after cesar wins the fight, like a close up to show that he has courage. On a scare from 1 to 10 we rate the editing a 5. We thought if you used some kind of fade or cross disolve some kindof special effect when you went into different scenes it would make the video more clean. The type of music they used did work because it was some kindof rock that made the video look like it was "tough" because they had to get into a fight after school. I'd suggest to just lower the volume because it was way to loud. The first time the music came in is when the bully approached cesar, it helped emphasize the mood that something was going to happend. you could of also added a different song to change up the mood and to catch different attention. The music was most important when the bully came and talked to cesar because that was the most important part of the video. There was no title in the beginning i suggest adding one. The credits were done properly there shouldn't be anything to change them. Overall we thought your film was ammusing. What we liked best was Cesar's reaction when the bully came. Our strongest suggestion is that you lower the volume on the music. -Krystian & Zoie.
The conflict was between an innocent kid and a bully. The shots that contributed to the rising action were when Isaiah and Cesar were talking to eachother about the fight in the beginning and the close ups of Isaiah N.'s face and Cesar's face when they are about to fight. This added some tension and pretty much showed what was going to happen in the next clip. The climax occured when Cesar and Isaiah N. fought at the football fields. During the resolution, Cesar beats up Isaiah N. You can add to the resolution by showing what happens after the fight. We liked the close up of Cesar because his face showed that he was nervous and there was tension. We think that it would be better to add a scene after the fight so we can see what would happen next. on a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing an 8. Some of the clips' in points were too early and sometimes it was hard to hear the dialogue. The first use of music is when the bully came in the scene. It was used to emphasize the idea that the bully was tough. The music was most important before the fight because it emphasized the mood, which was a little violent. The title was really irrelevant and had nothing to do with the mood of the video. The titles were okay but the music was not incluted in the citing. Overall we liked the video. We suggest that you fix the in points of some clips. Another thing, we don't really agree with the moral so perhaps you should add an ending where the climax was solved nicely instead of in a violent manner.
The conflict was between fighting with the kid or just leaving it. The shot that contributed to the conflict was when the kid came and pushed Cesar. You could ahve making the video shorter and made it straight foward. The climax occurred when the kid didin't get up any more and Isaias came running to Cesar. We especially liked the close up of both Cesar and the kids' eyes when they were going to fight. The shot helped emphazise that they were mad at each other. We think that you should add a close up of Cesar right after he wins the fight to show that he's happy of beating the other kid. We rate the editing a 7. One edit we would change was when Cesar and Isaias were talking at the lunch tables. We noticed that the camera was moving up and down on that scene. We think you should cut that part out. The first use of music was when the kid came in and told Cesar he failed his test. It worked because it helped show that he as mad at Cesar. You didin't cite the music and you should add a title at the beginning of the video. Overall, we thought your film was good. What we liked best was when Cesar and the kid were fighting because it added humor to the video.
10 comments:
Feedback given by Michelle Hernandez and Blanca Ceja.
Story: Standing up for yourself and Bullies.
The conflict between bullies and standing up for yourself.
What we really liked about the video was how it was up beat and went with the flow , it wasn't choppy and i understood it. Shot such as over the shoulder and full effect shot made me understand the scene and what is happening. The rising action when Cesar was getting picked on until they fought.
Some suggestion we would have are, when playing the music in the video it would make the video more professionla if you lowereed the music while the fighting scene to feel whats going on. This would help give us the idea that you guys are fighting for the purpose of Cesar standing up for himself.
We especially like the close up shot of Cesar because it helped emphasize the idea that he was a little scared and confused with what to do. We think that you might add a shot right after Cesar getting beat up and solving their problems.
On a scale of one to ten we rate the editing and 8, we thought it was edited very well with slight complications. We noticed that between ashleys shot you used an edit with her name, although the shot was very quick that we didn't spot ashley, so we were confused.
The use of music was good, alothough it was loud as it went on and especially when they were fighting it got to loud to the point were we couldn't hear them.You could also try lowering the music at that point. The most important use of music was when isiah was trying to hype up cesar. It was used to help emphasize the mood of adrenalin or the idea that he wanted him to stand up for himself. It worked because i started feeling the emotions that cesar was feeling.
There were no titles in the beginning but there were titles at the end to conclude there story. I thought the titles were effective for the people who were a little lost and din't understand.
Overall, we thought your film was were organized and got the point to what they were trying to get out to people. What we liked best was the edning part where they added in the music from the arcade and also the game characters. Our storngest suggestion is that you add in some titles for the beginning to get a taste of what will happen next and lowering the music when they start to fight.
Dear Cesar, Isaiah, and Ashley,
STORY
The conflict was between the main character and the bully.
Here are the shots, dialog and actons that contributed to the rising action:
1. The main character is approached by the bully.
2. The bully begins to harass him.
3. The bully wants to fight.
4. The main characters friend tells him to fight.
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1. You could of had a reason for the fight.
2. You could also add another characters opion on the fight.
The climax occured when they showed up to fight.
In the resolution, the main character wins the fight. You can add to the resolution by showing what happens after the fight.
This would help give us the idea that the values in the video were stronger.
CAMERA SHOTS
We especially like the close up shot of the main character because it helped emphasize the idea that he was nervous.
We think that you might add a shot after the fight to see what happened. The next shot would be a medium shot of the main character and his friend and this would help emphasize the value that we can all get along.
EDITS:
on a scale of 1-10 (10 being the highest), we rate the editing an 8.One edit we would change was when the bestfriend comes in. We thougt the in point was set to early. We noticed when the main character and the bully begin to fight you used staright cuts. We would have used a special transition effect because its cooler.The first use of music is when the bully came in the scene. It was used to emphasize the idea that the bully is scurry. It worked because it changed the mood. The music was most important before the fight because it emphasized the mood of anger and violence. It worked because it made me feel angry.
TITLES AND CREDITS
There was no title and only credits. Titles would have helped because i would have gotten an idea of what it would be about.the credits were fine but the music wasn't cited.
OVERALL
overall we thought your film was good. What we liked best was the close-ups. Our strongest suggestion is that you add a scene after the fight.
Hugs and kisses,
Jacob D and Morgan D
The conflict was between good and evil. Here are the shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action:
1. eye level close up
2. two-shot
3. medium shot
4. Long shot
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
you could raise the volume when isiah and cesar are at the lunch table talking.You could also make the shot when they are talking at the table shorter. The climax occured when isiah told cesar that he needs to fight joe around 2:23 in the video. During the resolution cesar beats joe. We espicially like the point of view shot of when cesar and joe are talking in the beginning, because it helped emphasize the idea that something bad was going to happen. We think you might replace a shot where isiah and cesar are talking at the end of the video. The new shot would be medium shot.This would help emphasize the feeling that cesar is happy about beating joe. We rate the editing a 7. One edit we would change was when isiah and cesar at the lunch table it was to long. The first use of music was when joe appeared in the beginning of the video. It was used to emphasize the idea that joe was the bad guy. It worked because it helped show the mood that joe was the bad guy. Music was most important when they were at the lunch tables and joe appears wanting to fight cesar and when joe and cesar fight. It was used to emphasize the idea that something bad was going to happen. One suggestion for a title would be "The Bully". The credits were done properly and not all the music was cited. Overall, we thought the film was good and had a good message. What we liked best was the opening scene when cesar walks out and joe comes out of nowhere and the music starts playing. The strongest suggestion is that you shorten the lunch table scene.
-Emily Keezer
-Eduardo B
The conflict is between a bully and a nerd. The nerd didnt help him with his test, so he failed it and the bully wanted to take his anger out on the nerd. The shots were good in the beginning when they both were talking to each other. They both had good in and out points. We though i was a good clip when instead of the pase to go normal. It was really in fast motion so he can go fast to see what has happen between the nerd and the bully.The music was good when it showed the bully to show how bad he is and how hardcore he is. The climax is when the bully comes back and attacks him and puts his head on the trash can. This was like a real life clip when bully, attack anywhere and anytime. We especially liked the part when the made a shoot of the close up between the bully and the nerd like when they are gonna fight it shows that they are confident and ready to do this. We think that they should of picked a different location of the fight because we heard more of the wind instead of the them talking. We think that we can replace one the clips when the are sitting in the cafeteria benches and are attacked by the bully. With an over the shoulder to see them more closer to show more of their facial expressions about the situation. We think that the rating from one to ten on editing was a Seven they had good clips but some clips didnt have good set in and out points. We noticed when they used fade transitions to show like The next Day or Later That Day.... . We think the most important clip for the music is in the beggining whe the bully comes out of the bush. Only the titles in between the clips of that moment going to another time were good titles. And the credits didnt help at the end they didnt cite the music of where it came from. Overall we though it was a good video it shows real life events of what a bully could of done at school. But our strongets suggestion is next time dont make it look childish because this video looked like a little cartoon not a good value video.
The conflict is between a bully and a nerd. The nerd didnt help him with his test, so he failed it and the bully wanted to take his anger out on the nerd. The shots were good in the beginning when they both were talking to each other. They both had good in and out points. We though i was a good clip when instead of the pase to go normal. It was really in fast motion so he can go fast to see what has happen between the nerd and the bully.The music was good when it showed the bully to show how bad he is and how hardcore he is. The climax is when the bully comes back and attacks him and puts his head on the trash can. This was like a real life clip when bully, attack anywhere and anytime. We especially liked the part when the made a shoot of the close up between the bully and the nerd like when they are gonna fight it shows that they are confident and ready to do this. We think that they should of picked a different location of the fight because we heard more of the wind instead of the them talking. We think that we can replace one the clips when the are sitting in the cafeteria benches and are attacked by the bully. With an over the shoulder to see them more closer to show more of their facial expressions about the situation. We think that the rating from one to ten on editing was a Seven they had good clips but some clips didnt have good set in and out points. We noticed when they used fade transitions to show like The next Day or Later That Day.... . We think the most important clip for the music is in the beggining whe the bully comes out of the bush. Only the titles in between the clips of that moment going to another time were good titles. And the credits didnt help at the end they didnt cite the music of where it came from. Overall we though it was a good video it shows real life events of what a bully could of done at school. But our strongets suggestion is next time dont make it look childish because this video looked like a little cartoon not a good value video.
Feedback Given by: Eduardo E. Ashley Perez and Sabrina.
Feedback By: Kenzie Campbell and Ivy Phelps
The conflict was between Cesar and the bully Joe.
The shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action:
1. Opening shot of confrontation
2. Isaiah conversing with Cesar post confrontation
3. Up close shot of Joe’s face
4. Cesar shrugging his shoulders in response to Joe’s up close shot
Suggestions about adding to the rising action:
You could alter the scene to be shorter at the picnic table as Cesar is explaining to Isaiah why he cannot fight or adjust the volume so it can be comprehended more clearly by the viewers.
You could also just include the initial fighting scene in the picnic table scene to establish Cesar’s strength level comparatively to Joe’s.
The climax occurred when Cesar agreed that he would fight Joe while having a conversation with Isaiah.
Describe what happens during the resolution: Isaiah runs over to Cesar to congratulate him of his win in the fight against Cesar.
You could add to the resolution by establishing a lesson Cesar and the supporting characters took away from the present situation or the fight/altercation.
This would help give us the idea that/create the impression that Cesar will become a stronger person mentally and emotionally while dealing with bullies and hazardous influences such as Isaiah’s character in the future.
Camera shots
We especially like the extreme close ups of Joe and Cesar during the final fight scene because it helped emphasize the idea that Cesar took Isaiah’s advice to heart and he is ready to fight.
We think that you might add a shot right after this extreme close up of another extreme close up of the first swing/slap/punch thrown.
This would help create the feeling that the fight has been initiated, and tension as to who will win.
Edits:
On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 6.
One edit we would change was the picnic shot while Cesar and Isaiah discussed why Cesar should fight Joe .
We thought the in point was set too early and the out point was set too late.
We noticed that between the opening shot when Cesar and Joe initially meet, you used a straight cut to transition to the next scene but you may want to consider a cross dissolve to enhance the effect of Isaiah’s entrance.
Use of music and sound effects:
a. The first time the music came in was when Cesar was walking toward the bully.
It was used to help emphasize the mood of the brutality executed by the bully opposite Cesar.
Or the idea that Cesar is weak/incompetent and may not be able to stand up for himself comparatively to such a significant opponent/enemy.
It worked because it accomplished an ominous foreshadowing of the events to come later in the film or the fight, however, the volume was too loud throughout the dialog.
b. The most important point use of music was during the final fight at the end of the film.
It was used to help emphasize the mood of anticipation and tension as to whether or not Cesar would be demolished in the fight by his competitor.
It worked because it established a mood parallel to the scene which was highly intense compared to earlier scenes and/or fights.
Titles and credits:
The opening shot lacked a title, therefore this left us unsure as to what the theme or overall message would be.
We suggest a title such as, “Stand Up For Yourself.”
The credits were immensely bold and they stood out, however, they acted as the most important aspect of the film which is somewhat of an issue. The music is not cited, neither were the sound effects or images.
Overall:
Overall, we thought your film interesting and unique because it was conveyed as a video game due to the titles inserted in the middle of the film and the music used throughout the film.
What we liked best were the extreme close up shots of Joe and Cesar before the final fight (3:45-3:46) because they established personal reactions to the fight to come.
Our strongest suggestion is that you mend the scene at the picnic tables and establish a more straightforward message of the film.
Group 21
Feedback from Taylor and Jose
The conflict is about this guy and this guy i didnt really understand the conflict or the value of this video.
here are some chots that i saw during the rising action
1.over shoulder shot
2.close-up
3.established shot
4.eye level angled shot as well
here are some suggestions i recommend you guys and
1.you could of shortened the rising action alot more, it took yuou guys a while to get to the rising, other then that it was pretty good.
another thing you can do is actually try to show the message to your viewers i really didnt get what the value of this video was.
the climax ocurred when the character beat the bully up after the bully kept picking on that poor kid.
there really wasnt a resolution to this video and you guys can make a change on that as well.
You could add the resolution and that would help your video cause it would show your viewers what the video is about.
camera shots:
we especially like the close-up shot of both characters because it showed that both were about to battle eachother like an actual fight.
we think that you might add a shot when you and ceaser were talking at the tables, i feel like that could be alot closeer cause it was difficult to hear you guys conversating.ON the scale of 1-10 your editing was a big 6-7 i thought it was pretty good, the only shot that you guys should change was the one i said above. other then that one it was really good.
Music:
The first time you guys used this sdong was to show that the bully was really mean, the mood of the song went perfect with the bullying scene, one thing can be fixed with the video is lower the sound of it cause it was too hard to listen to you guys talk.
titles and credits were really good you dont need to change that.
Overall:
ovrall we thought your film was good, but a tad long what we liked best was the shots you guys didthat was real good our strongest sug3stion that we give to you is that you should shorten the video up and make the resolution clear.
The conflict was between standing up for yourself and being a coward. Here are the shots: there were mostly point of view shots during they're video that's what was mostly consisted of. I liked this one shot of Isaiah that got speeded up when he was running across the tables it caught my attention during the video. To of made your rising action better you could of lowered the volume of the music to hear cesar being afarid of the bully. And to tell what was happening more clearly. The climax occured when the bully show up and told cesar to fight him after school. During the resolution cesar decides to overcome his fears and stand up for himself by fighting back, Isaiah convinced him to do this. I don't think anything needed to be added to the resolution you could of told us that Cesar was going to fight him but then that would just give it away for the end. i thought it was exciting to wait and see what he was really going to do. we especially like the point of view shot when cesar and the bully were talking because it gave the feeling like you were there with them. We think that you might add a shot right after cesar wins the fight, like a close up to show that he has courage. On a scare from 1 to 10 we rate the editing a 5. We thought if you used some kind of fade or cross disolve some kindof special effect when you went into different scenes it would make the video more clean. The type of music they used did work because it was some kindof rock that made the video look like it was "tough" because they had to get into a fight after school. I'd suggest to just lower the volume because it was way to loud. The first time the music came in is when the bully approached cesar, it helped emphasize the mood that something was going to happend. you could of also added a different song to change up the mood and to catch different attention. The music was most important when the bully came and talked to cesar because that was the most important part of the video. There was no title in the beginning i suggest adding one. The credits were done properly there shouldn't be anything to change them. Overall we thought your film was ammusing. What we liked best was Cesar's reaction when the bully came. Our strongest suggestion is that you lower the volume on the music.
-Krystian & Zoie.
The conflict was between an innocent kid and a bully.
The shots that contributed to the rising action were when Isaiah and Cesar were talking to eachother about the fight in the beginning and the close ups of Isaiah N.'s face and Cesar's face when they are about to fight.
This added some tension and pretty much showed what was going to happen in the next clip.
The climax occured when Cesar and Isaiah N. fought at the football fields.
During the resolution, Cesar beats up Isaiah N.
You can add to the resolution by showing what happens after the fight.
We liked the close up of Cesar because his face showed that he was nervous and there was tension.
We think that it would be better to add a scene after the fight so we can see what would happen next.
on a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing an 8. Some of the clips' in points were too early and sometimes it was hard to hear the dialogue.
The first use of music is when the bully came in the scene. It was used to emphasize the idea that the bully was tough.
The music was most important before the fight because it emphasized the mood, which was a little violent.
The title was really irrelevant and had nothing to do with the mood of the video.
The titles were okay but the music was not incluted in the citing.
Overall we liked the video. We suggest that you fix the in points of some clips. Another thing, we don't really agree with the moral so perhaps you should add an ending where the climax was solved nicely instead of in a violent manner.
Eduardo E., Sabrena S., Ashley P
The conflict was between fighting with the kid or just leaving it. The shot that contributed to the conflict was when the kid came and pushed Cesar. You could ahve making the video shorter and made it straight foward. The climax occurred when the kid didin't get up any more and Isaias came running to Cesar. We especially liked the close up of both Cesar and the kids' eyes when they were going to fight. The shot helped emphazise that they were mad at each other. We think that you should add a close up of Cesar right after he wins the fight to show that he's happy of beating the other kid. We rate the editing a 7. One edit we would change was when Cesar and Isaias were talking at the lunch tables. We noticed that the camera was moving up and down on that scene. We think you should cut that part out. The first use of music was when the kid came in and told Cesar he failed his test. It worked because it helped show that he as mad at Cesar. You didin't cite the music and you should add a title at the beginning of the video. Overall, we thought your film was good. What we liked best was when Cesar and the kid were fighting because it added humor to the video.
John&Joselyn
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