CONFLICT:this video has an internal conflict between cristian's character whether to cheat or not.the value in this video was to do the right thing. SHOTS:1.there were really good shots that made us think that cristian was going to take the answer sheet and cheet like when they show the papers and cristians handson that shot. 2.they were alot of great shots in the video that contributed to the value. RISING ACTION: you could show cristian geting the blank paper behind the answer sheet instead ...and it will make us think that he didnt cheet and the value will be clear.you could also make him get sum color pencils or something or so some kind of transition that makes us think that more time happened so the video would seem more believable. CAMERA SHOTS:we specially like the shot where cristian is leaving out of the class to see if the teacher was coming,this shot make us think more that he was gonna cheet rather than the other way around.we think u guys should have made more shots that did not makes think he was going to cheet becauase the value wasnt so clear. EDITS:the editing was good.we rate the editting a 8 because u needed some more transitions. MUSIC:we the the musicwhent really good whit the bigginig...it was really intensed,we liked it. we think if was a great choise of music.This kind of music gave like a suspence feeling thathe has going to cheet and we think u guys were trying to show more that he was gonna cheet...and not the happyb-day card. TITLES:the titles were efective and the credicts were ready good and it just worked.
CONFLICT:this video has an internal conflict between cristian's character whether to cheat or not.the value in this video was to do the right thing. SHOTS:1.there were really good shots that made us think that cristian was going to take the answer sheet and cheet like when they show the papers and cristians handson that shot. 2.they were alot of great shots in the video that contributed to the value. RISING ACTION: you could show cristian geting the blank paper behind the answer sheet instead ...and it will make us think that he didnt cheet and the value will be clear.you could also make him get sum color pencils or something or so some kind of transition that makes us think that more time happened so the video would seem more believable. CAMERA SHOTS:we specially like the shot where cristian is leaving out of the class to see if the teacher was coming,this shot make us think more that he was gonna cheet rather than the other way around.we think u guys should have made more shots that did not makes think he was going to cheet becauase the value wasnt so clear. EDITS:the editing was good.we rate the editting a 8 because u needed some more transitions. MUSIC:we the the musicwhent really good whit the bigginig...it was really intensed,we liked it. we think if was a great choise of music.This kind of music gave like a suspence feeling thathe has going to cheet and we think u guys were trying to show more that he was gonna cheet...and not the happyb-day card. TITLES:the titles were efective and the credicts were ready good and it just worked.
The conflict was between to cheat or not to cheat. Here are the shots that contributed to the rising action: 1. When Christian walked over to the teacher's desk and saw the answer sheet. 2. When he looked around to see if Dr. A was comming. 3. When he grabs the paper and goes back to his desk. The climax occurred when Dr. A asked why there were three papers! Resolution is when Dr. A recieved the "happy birthday :)" paper. It made the viewers think that Christian accidentally gave Dr. A the answers sheet and that he would be caught. A suggestion for this film is that when Christian goes outside and looks around for Dr. A, the door should be closed before he goes outside because Dr. A closed it when he left and it makes it seem like the door magically opened. The beggining shot should be introduced with a transition so it does not seem like Christian wasn't standing there for a long time and then decided to finally walk. Also, we could hear people in the background say "that was good" refering to recording the video in one of the shots when Dr. A walks out. You should try your best to edit that out. We give your editing a rating of 7. Try have cleaner cuts and transitions. A suggestiong for the music is to start playing it when he goes to Dr. A's desk and sees the answer sheet and not before! Titles and credits were good. Good Job! -Luis and Lizzy
The conflict was between cheating on a test and being honest. The shot of Cristian going to the desk and seeing the answer sheet contributes to the rising action. the climax occured when Dr. A says 'why are there three papers?" During the resolution we can't really tell wheter cristian cheated on the test or not. We really likee the shot when Cristian goes to turn in the test and we see the paper that says Happy Birthday because it gave us a turn around and made us think that maybe Cristian didn't cheat on the test. On a scale of 1-10 I would give the editing of this video an 8.5. The video flowed really well but the story line couldve been a lot clearer. We are left trying to figure out whether or not Cristian cheated or not. The first use of music comes when Cristian is at the pencil sharpener. The music works well with the video but it should come in when Cristian is walking towards the teachers desk. The titles could've been a little more bold. Sources were cited. The opening titles need to be centered. Overall we thought the video was creative and funny. What we liked best was how you portrayed your message.
cristabel-jessica\ the conflict was between the character and himself. the value was to do the right thing. 1. the shot that made us think the boy was going to do something bad. 2.the shot where the boy looks out of the classroom to see if anybody was around. 3. the shot where the boy takes a piece of paper from the desk of the teacher. 4. the shot where the teacher looks through the boys papers and says" why is there 3 papers" here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action.1. you could add shots where the boys looking at the answer sheet. you could also add more shots with the boy worried about passing the test. the climax occured when the boy handed his test to the teacher. during the resolution the teacher sees a birthday card under the boys test. we especialy like the shot where hes looking out the door because ithelped emphasize the idea that hes going to do something fishy. on scale of 1-10 we rated your edtiting a 7. we liked the bigginig...it was really intense ,we liked it. we think if was a great choice of music.This kind of music gave like a suspence feeling thathe has going to cheet and we think you guys were trying to show more that he was gonna cheet...and not the happyb-day card. the titles were very effective.
The conflict was between cheating and not cheating. The close up of the answer sheet helped contribute to the rising action, also when Cristian ran out the door to see if Dr. Achterman was coming. The climax occurred when Dr. Achterman said, “Why are there 3 papers?” During the resolution, Dr. Achterman reveals the third paper is a birthday card. You could to the resolution by showing that there is another stack of papers on the desk that Cristian could grab. This would help give us the idea that there are setting up a turn around. We especially liked the shot of Cristian looking over the desk to see if the answers are nearby because it helped identify the conflict. We gave the editing a 8. One edit we would change would be when Dr. Achterman gives him the test, the in-point is too early. Another shot would be when Dr. Achterman thanks him for the card, the in-point is too early again. The first time the music came into play was when Cristian was sharpening his pencil. It helped build suspense in the scene. We would suggest stating the music when he starts looking around. You should fade it our instead of letting it end abruptly. The title did reflect the content in a way. Yes it grabbed our attention, a good use of color. The music was cited correctly during the credits. Overall, we thought your film was well executed. What we like best was the storyline. Our strongest suggestion is that you clean up your editing. Zachary Andrade and Sam Tapia
The conflict was between taking the answer sheet to the test and not taking the answer sheet. Here are the shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1. Shot: Where he is sharpening his pencil and looks at the desk 2. Shot: medium close up of the answer sheet 3. Shot: When he runs outside to see if anyone is coming 4. Shot: When he walks away from the desk with a paper he took Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1. You could have a close up of the actor that makes it look like they are nervous to take the paper. 2. You could also have the teacher come back realize that some of his papers are moved around. The climax occurred when he gave the happy birthday paper to the teacher, showing that he didn’t take the answer sheet. Describe what happens during the resolution: During the resolution the student gives the teacher his test and the birthday card showing that he didn’t take the answer sheet and the teacher thanked him. You could add to the resolution by having the teacher pull out the answer sheet to grade to show that the answer sheet was there the whole time. This would help give us the idea that/ create the impression that he didn’t take answer sheet so he didn’t cheat on the test. Camera shots: We especially like the over the shoulder shot of Dr. A, because it helped emphasize the idea that he is more superior because he is the teacher. We think that you might add a shot right after he takes the paper from the desk to show that he didn’t take the answer sheet. The new shot would be a medium of the actor with a blank piece of paper coloring. This would help create the idea that he only took a blank piece of paper and not the answer sheet. Edits: On a scale of 1-10 we rate this video a 7. One edit we would change would be after he went to grab the paper on the desk to set the in point after because it was a little too early. We noticed that between the shots of him taking the test and then handing it in It was a straight cut. We would have used a dissolved instead, because it would have showed time passing. Use of music and sound effects: They only had one piece of music during the acting of the film and we think it worked very well because it emphasized the sneakiness of the actor taking the answer sheet. We think, that piece of music worked perfect. The most important point in the video where music was used was when he was going to take the answer sheet. It emphasized the mood and the idea of him taking the answer sheet and makes the audience feel that he did. Titles and Credits: The title related to the film because it flat out said the test when it was about a test. Yes, it grabbed our attention and the dissolved looked cool. They used the same font for the titles and credits and yes they were effective. We suggest that you make the font of your credits a little smaller. Credits: The credits were perfect. They really know how to make them and everything was cited. Overall: Overall, we thought your film had good edits and acting and music. What we liked best was the editing and the choice of music. We think this because they both contributed to the feel of the film. Our strongest suggestion is that you make it more clear if he cheated or not because it was really hard to tell. -Bree and Liz
Shots, dialouge, action: 1 The shot of the pencil breaking while Jason is taking his test. 2 The shot of Jason going around the desk after sharpening his pencil. 3 Jason running out the room to see if the teacher was around anywhere. 4 Jason taking a paper and going back to his desk.
We have no suggestions to add to the risign action. The climax occurred when Jason reaches for the paper. The resolution is when Jason hands in his test. You could add to the tension of the resolution by having Jason looking nervous when he hands in his test.
The shot of the answers is the shot we liked best. It adds to the conflicts and tension.
There isn't anything we would add.
8.5 for the editing. One edit we would change is the shot at the pencil sharpener. The cut is very obvious.
The music is fantastic. We wouldn't add or change anything.
Once the music starts it adds to the tension of the situation.
Yes the main title does, it is colorful just like the birthday card. This was cohesive. The citing was correct and the credits were correct.
Overall, we both like the film it was creative and entertaining.
The conflict was between taking the answer sheet to the test and not taking the answer sheet. Here are the shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1. Shot: Where he is sharpening his pencil and looks at the desk 2. Shot: medium close up of the answer sheet 3. Shot: When he runs outside to see if anyone is coming 4. Shot: When he walks away from the desk with a paper he took Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1. You could have a close up of the actor that makes it look like they are nervous to take the paper. 2. You could also have the teacher come back realize that some of his papers are moved around. The climax occurred when he gave the happy birthday paper to the teacher, showing that he didn’t take the answer sheet. Describe what happens during the resolution: During the resolution the student gives the teacher his test and the birthday card showing that he didn’t take the answer sheet and the teacher thanked him. You could add to the resolution by having the teacher pull out the answer sheet to grade to show that the answer sheet was there the whole time. This would help give us the idea that/ create the impression that he didn’t take answer sheet so he didn’t cheat on the test. Camera shots: We especially like the over the shoulder shot of Dr. A, because it helped emphasize the idea that he is more superior because he is the teacher. We think that you might add a shot right after he takes the paper from the desk to show that he didn’t take the answer sheet. The new shot would be a medium of the actor with a blank piece of paper coloring. This would help create the idea that he only took a blank piece of paper and not the answer sheet. Edits: On a scale of 1-10 we rate this video a 7. One edit we would change would be after he went to grab the paper on the desk to set the in point after because it was a little too early. We noticed that between the shots of him taking the test and then handing it in It was a straight cut. We would have used a dissolved instead, because it would have showed time passing. Use of music and sound effects: They only had one piece of music during the acting of the film and we think it worked very well because it emphasized the sneakiness of the actor taking the answer sheet. We think, that piece of music worked perfect. The most important point in the video where music was used was when he was going to take the answer sheet. It emphasized the mood and the idea of him taking the answer sheet and makes the audience feel that he did. Titles and Credits: The title related to the film because it flat out said the test when it was about a test. Yes, it grabbed our attention and the dissolved looked cool. They used the same font for the titles and credits and yes they were effective. We suggest that you make the font of your credits a little smaller. Credits: The credits were perfect. They really know how to make them and everything was cited. Overall: Overall, we thought your film had good edits and acting and music. What we liked best was the editing and the choice of music. We think this because they both contributed to the feel of the film. Our strongest suggestion is that you make it more clear if he cheated or not because it was really hard to tell. -Bree and Liz
The conflict is between the student who is about to take a test and he decides to cheat as sson as the teacher leaves.
1. One of the shots are the scece were the student is seated and its somewhat over the shoulder although the teacher is sitting on the desk. 2 the shot of the the answer key document was an intense part. 3 AS the student walks out to the front of the room to the dorr to see if the teacher was in sight then it goes to a planning of the view poutside 4 The view on the student about to take a test as he sees the coast is clear.
Here are some suggestions: I believe this group did a good job on the storyline every thing is great. The climax occured when as the student decides to look at the answer key document. I don't believe the resolution is so clear like the he vcheat or did he not? You can make the resoulution more clear than what it appears to be. This would give us the impression that the video we actually understood what really happened,
Camera shots: I really like the pan shot on where the student goes to the front of the door to see if the teacher is in sight it helped emphasize the idea that there was an intensity to the storyline.
Shots, dialouge, action: 1 The shot of the pencil breaking while Jason is taking his test. 2 The shot of Jason going around the desk after sharpening his pencil because it had broke durng the pencil. 3 Jason running out the room to see if the teacher was around anywhere . 4 Jason taking a paper and going back to his desk.
We have no suggestions to add to the risign action. The climax occurred when Jason reaches for the paper of the answer document for the test.
The resolution is when Jason hands in his test. You could add to the tension of the resolution by having Jason looking really nervous when he hands in his test in with 3 papers.
The shot of the answers is the shot I liked best. It really added to the conflicts with intensity.
There isn't anything i would add to that.
9 for the editing. One edit we would change is the shot would making the part clear on if he cheated or not. The music is fantastic. We wouldn't add or change anything.
The music really was amzing fior the storyline! Yes the main title does, it is very bright and all i also liked the fact that you guys made a colorfull bday card.
RYAN AND JULISSA The conflict is between the student and whether or not to cheat.
1. Over the shoulder looking up at the teacher. 2. Close up on breaking pencil. 3. Close up on the answer sheet. 4. Teacher leaving the classroom.
Suggestions: 1. Make sure unwanted shadows are not present. 2. Start music a little later while student sharpens his pencil.
The climax occurred when the student picks up the paper and goes back to his seat. In the resolution, the teachr comes back into the classroom ad the student turns in his test with a happy birthday card as well.
You could add to the resoution by addin a dissolve fade in order to show that more time has passed.
Camera shots: We especially like the shot of the broken pencil because it helped emphasize th idea that the student would have to got to the front desk to sharpen it and fall upon the answers. We think that you might add a shot of the student looking around as he takes the test looking nervous. This would emphasize the feeling that he is up to no good.
On a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 7. One edit we would change is before the teacher returns. We thought the outpoint was early. We noticed between the student starting on the test again and him returning the test, you used a straight cut, instead use a dissolve to sow time has passed.
Music/Sound: The first time music is used is when the student sees something on the teacher's desk. It was used to help emphasize the mood of mischief. It worked because it had an ominous feel to it. This was also the most important use of music because of the mood it sets. You could aslo try having an upbeat song at the end.
Titles and Credits: The title grabbed my attention right away and reflects on the rest of the video. The title could have been more effective by adding one at the end. the credits were good as far as we could tell.
overall we thought your film was good. Our favorite part was the rsolution and finding out that the student didnt cheat after all. our strongest suggestion.
11 comments:
FEEDBACK BY MARIA AND DEMI
CONFLICT:this video has an internal conflict between cristian's character whether to cheat or not.the value in this video was to do the right thing.
SHOTS:1.there were really good shots that made us think that cristian was going to take the answer sheet and cheet like when they show the papers and cristians
handson that shot.
2.they were alot of great shots in the video that contributed to the value.
RISING ACTION:
you could show cristian geting the blank paper behind the answer sheet instead ...and it will make us think that he didnt cheet and the value will be clear.you could also make him get sum color pencils or something or so some kind of transition that makes us think that more time happened so the video would seem more believable.
CAMERA SHOTS:we specially like the shot where cristian is leaving out of the class to see if the teacher was coming,this shot make us think more that he was gonna cheet rather than the other way around.we think u guys should have made more shots that did not makes think he was going to cheet becauase the value wasnt so clear.
EDITS:the editing was good.we rate the editting a 8 because u needed some more transitions.
MUSIC:we the the musicwhent really good whit the bigginig...it was really intensed,we liked it. we think if was a great choise of music.This kind of music gave like a suspence feeling thathe has going to cheet and we think u guys were trying to show more that he was gonna cheet...and not the happyb-day card.
TITLES:the titles were efective and the credicts were ready good and it just worked.
FEEDBACK BY MARIA AND DEMI
CONFLICT:this video has an internal conflict between cristian's character whether to cheat or not.the value in this video was to do the right thing.
SHOTS:1.there were really good shots that made us think that cristian was going to take the answer sheet and cheet like when they show the papers and cristians
handson that shot.
2.they were alot of great shots in the video that contributed to the value.
RISING ACTION:
you could show cristian geting the blank paper behind the answer sheet instead ...and it will make us think that he didnt cheet and the value will be clear.you could also make him get sum color pencils or something or so some kind of transition that makes us think that more time happened so the video would seem more believable.
CAMERA SHOTS:we specially like the shot where cristian is leaving out of the class to see if the teacher was coming,this shot make us think more that he was gonna cheet rather than the other way around.we think u guys should have made more shots that did not makes think he was going to cheet becauase the value wasnt so clear.
EDITS:the editing was good.we rate the editting a 8 because u needed some more transitions.
MUSIC:we the the musicwhent really good whit the bigginig...it was really intensed,we liked it. we think if was a great choise of music.This kind of music gave like a suspence feeling thathe has going to cheet and we think u guys were trying to show more that he was gonna cheet...and not the happyb-day card.
TITLES:the titles were efective and the credicts were ready good and it just worked.
The conflict was between to cheat or not to cheat. Here are the shots that contributed to the rising action:
1. When Christian walked over to the teacher's desk and saw the answer sheet.
2. When he looked around to see if Dr. A was comming.
3. When he grabs the paper and goes back to his desk.
The climax occurred when Dr. A asked why there were three papers! Resolution is when Dr. A recieved the "happy birthday :)" paper. It made the viewers think that Christian accidentally gave Dr. A the answers sheet and that he would be caught.
A suggestion for this film is that when Christian goes outside and looks around for Dr. A, the door should be closed before he goes outside because Dr. A closed it when he left and it makes it seem like the door magically opened. The beggining shot should be introduced with a transition so it does not seem like Christian wasn't standing there for a long time and then decided to finally walk. Also, we could hear people in the background say "that was good" refering to recording the video in one of the shots when Dr. A walks out. You should try your best to edit that out. We give your editing a rating of 7. Try have cleaner cuts and transitions.
A suggestiong for the music is to start playing it when he goes to Dr. A's desk and sees the answer sheet and not before! Titles and credits were good. Good Job!
-Luis and Lizzy
The conflict was between cheating on a test and being honest. The shot of Cristian going to the desk and seeing the answer sheet contributes to the rising action. the climax occured when Dr. A says 'why are there three papers?" During the resolution we can't really tell wheter cristian cheated on the test or not. We really likee the shot when Cristian goes to turn in the test and we see the paper that says Happy Birthday because it gave us a turn around and made us think that maybe Cristian didn't cheat on the test. On a scale of 1-10 I would give the editing of this video an 8.5. The video flowed really well but the story line couldve been a lot clearer. We are left trying to figure out whether or not Cristian cheated or not. The first use of music comes when Cristian is at the pencil sharpener. The music works well with the video but it should come in when Cristian is walking towards the teachers desk. The titles could've been a little more bold. Sources were cited. The opening titles need to be centered. Overall we thought the video was creative and funny. What we liked best was how you portrayed your message.
cristabel-jessica\
the conflict was between the character and himself. the value was to do the right thing.
1. the shot that made us think the boy was going to do something bad.
2.the shot where the boy looks out of the classroom to see if anybody was around.
3. the shot where the boy takes a piece of paper from the desk of the teacher.
4. the shot where the teacher looks through the boys papers and says" why is there 3 papers"
here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action.1. you could add shots where the boys looking at the answer sheet.
you could also add more shots with the boy worried about passing the test.
the climax occured when the boy handed his test to the teacher.
during the resolution the teacher sees a birthday card under the boys test.
we especialy like the shot where hes looking out the door because ithelped emphasize the idea that hes going to do something fishy.
on scale of 1-10 we rated your edtiting a 7.
we liked the bigginig...it was really intense ,we liked it. we think if was a great choice of music.This kind of music gave like a suspence feeling thathe has going to cheet and we think you guys were trying to show more that he was gonna cheet...and not the happyb-day card.
the titles were very effective.
The conflict was between cheating and not cheating. The close up of the answer sheet helped contribute to the rising action, also when Cristian ran out the door to see if Dr. Achterman was coming. The climax occurred when Dr. Achterman said, “Why are there 3 papers?” During the resolution, Dr. Achterman reveals the third paper is a birthday card. You could to the resolution by showing that there is another stack of papers on the desk that Cristian could grab. This would help give us the idea that there are setting up a turn around. We especially liked the shot of Cristian looking over the desk to see if the answers are nearby because it helped identify the conflict. We gave the editing a 8. One edit we would change would be when Dr. Achterman gives him the test, the in-point is too early. Another shot would be when Dr. Achterman thanks him for the card, the in-point is too early again. The first time the music came into play was when Cristian was sharpening his pencil. It helped build suspense in the scene. We would suggest stating the music when he starts looking around. You should fade it our instead of letting it end abruptly. The title did reflect the content in a way. Yes it grabbed our attention, a good use of color. The music was cited correctly during the credits. Overall, we thought your film was well executed. What we like best was the storyline. Our strongest suggestion is that you clean up your editing.
Zachary Andrade and Sam Tapia
The conflict was between taking the answer sheet to the test and not taking the answer sheet.
Here are the shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action:
1. Shot: Where he is sharpening his pencil and looks at the desk
2. Shot: medium close up of the answer sheet
3. Shot: When he runs outside to see if anyone is coming
4. Shot: When he walks away from the desk with a paper he took
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1. You could have a close up of the actor that makes it look like they are nervous to take the paper.
2. You could also have the teacher come back realize that some of his papers are moved around.
The climax occurred when he gave the happy birthday paper to the teacher, showing that he didn’t take the answer sheet.
Describe what happens during the resolution: During the resolution the student gives the teacher his test and the birthday card showing that he didn’t take the answer sheet and the teacher thanked him.
You could add to the resolution by having the teacher pull out the answer sheet to grade to show that the answer sheet was there the whole time. This would help give us the idea that/ create the impression that he didn’t take answer sheet so he didn’t cheat on the test.
Camera shots:
We especially like the over the shoulder shot of Dr. A, because it helped emphasize the idea that he is more superior because he is the teacher.
We think that you might add a shot right after he takes the paper from the desk to show that he didn’t take the answer sheet. The new shot would be a medium of the actor with a blank piece of paper coloring. This would help create the idea that he only took a blank piece of paper and not the answer sheet.
Edits:
On a scale of 1-10 we rate this video a 7. One edit we would change would be after he went to grab the paper on the desk to set the in point after because it was a little too early.
We noticed that between the shots of him taking the test and then handing it in It was a straight cut. We would have used a dissolved instead, because it would have showed time passing.
Use of music and sound effects:
They only had one piece of music during the acting of the film and we think it worked very well because it emphasized the sneakiness of the actor taking the answer sheet. We think, that piece of music worked perfect.
The most important point in the video where music was used was when he was going to take the answer sheet. It emphasized the mood and the idea of him taking the answer sheet and makes the audience feel that he did.
Titles and Credits:
The title related to the film because it flat out said the test when it was about a test. Yes, it grabbed our attention and the dissolved looked cool.
They used the same font for the titles and credits and yes they were effective.
We suggest that you make the font of your credits a little smaller.
Credits: The credits were perfect. They really know how to make them and everything was cited.
Overall:
Overall, we thought your film had good edits and acting and music. What we liked best was the editing and the choice of music. We think this because they both contributed to the feel of the film. Our strongest suggestion is that you make it more clear if he cheated or not because it was really hard to tell.
-Bree and Liz
The conflict is between Jason and himself.
Shots, dialouge, action:
1 The shot of the pencil breaking while Jason is taking his test.
2 The shot of Jason going around the desk after sharpening his pencil.
3 Jason running out the room to see if the teacher was around anywhere.
4 Jason taking a paper and going back to his desk.
We have no suggestions to add to the risign action.
The climax occurred when Jason reaches for the paper.
The resolution is when Jason hands in his test.
You could add to the tension of the resolution by having Jason looking nervous when he hands in his test.
The shot of the answers is the shot we liked best. It adds to the conflicts and tension.
There isn't anything we would add.
8.5 for the editing. One edit we would change is the shot at the pencil sharpener. The cut is very obvious.
The music is fantastic. We wouldn't add or change anything.
Once the music starts it adds to the tension of the situation.
Yes the main title does, it is colorful just like the birthday card. This was cohesive.
The citing was correct and the credits were correct.
Overall, we both like the film it was creative and entertaining.
Jaay and Cassie
The conflict was between taking the answer sheet to the test and not taking the answer sheet.
Here are the shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action:
1. Shot: Where he is sharpening his pencil and looks at the desk
2. Shot: medium close up of the answer sheet
3. Shot: When he runs outside to see if anyone is coming
4. Shot: When he walks away from the desk with a paper he took
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1. You could have a close up of the actor that makes it look like they are nervous to take the paper.
2. You could also have the teacher come back realize that some of his papers are moved around.
The climax occurred when he gave the happy birthday paper to the teacher, showing that he didn’t take the answer sheet.
Describe what happens during the resolution: During the resolution the student gives the teacher his test and the birthday card showing that he didn’t take the answer sheet and the teacher thanked him.
You could add to the resolution by having the teacher pull out the answer sheet to grade to show that the answer sheet was there the whole time. This would help give us the idea that/ create the impression that he didn’t take answer sheet so he didn’t cheat on the test.
Camera shots:
We especially like the over the shoulder shot of Dr. A, because it helped emphasize the idea that he is more superior because he is the teacher.
We think that you might add a shot right after he takes the paper from the desk to show that he didn’t take the answer sheet. The new shot would be a medium of the actor with a blank piece of paper coloring. This would help create the idea that he only took a blank piece of paper and not the answer sheet.
Edits:
On a scale of 1-10 we rate this video a 7. One edit we would change would be after he went to grab the paper on the desk to set the in point after because it was a little too early.
We noticed that between the shots of him taking the test and then handing it in It was a straight cut. We would have used a dissolved instead, because it would have showed time passing.
Use of music and sound effects:
They only had one piece of music during the acting of the film and we think it worked very well because it emphasized the sneakiness of the actor taking the answer sheet. We think, that piece of music worked perfect.
The most important point in the video where music was used was when he was going to take the answer sheet. It emphasized the mood and the idea of him taking the answer sheet and makes the audience feel that he did.
Titles and Credits:
The title related to the film because it flat out said the test when it was about a test. Yes, it grabbed our attention and the dissolved looked cool.
They used the same font for the titles and credits and yes they were effective.
We suggest that you make the font of your credits a little smaller.
Credits: The credits were perfect. They really know how to make them and everything was cited.
Overall:
Overall, we thought your film had good edits and acting and music. What we liked best was the editing and the choice of music. We think this because they both contributed to the feel of the film. Our strongest suggestion is that you make it more clear if he cheated or not because it was really hard to tell.
-Bree and Liz
Feedback given by Alexis miranda
The conflict is between the student who is about to take a test and he decides to cheat as sson as the teacher leaves.
1. One of the shots are the scece were the student is seated and its somewhat over the shoulder although the teacher is sitting on the desk.
2 the shot of the the answer key document was an intense part.
3 AS the student walks out to the front of the room to the dorr to see if the teacher was in sight then it goes to a planning of the view poutside
4 The view on the student about to take a test as he sees the coast is clear.
Here are some suggestions:
I believe this group did a good job on the storyline every thing is great.
The climax occured when as the student decides to look at the answer key document.
I don't believe the resolution is so clear like the he vcheat or did he not?
You can make the resoulution more clear than what it appears to be.
This would give us the impression that the video we actually understood what really happened,
Camera shots:
I really like the pan shot on where the student goes to the front of the door to see if the teacher is in sight it helped emphasize the idea that there was an intensity to the storyline.
Shots, dialouge, action:
1 The shot of the pencil breaking while Jason is taking his test.
2 The shot of Jason going around the desk after sharpening his pencil because it had broke durng the pencil.
3 Jason running out the room to see if the teacher was around anywhere .
4 Jason taking a paper and going back to his desk.
We have no suggestions to add to the risign action.
The climax occurred when Jason reaches for the paper of the answer document for the test.
The resolution is when Jason hands in his test.
You could add to the tension of the resolution by having Jason looking really nervous when he hands in his test in with 3 papers.
The shot of the answers is the shot I liked best. It really added to the conflicts with intensity.
There isn't anything i would add to that.
9 for the editing. One edit we would change is the shot would making the part clear on if he cheated or not.
The music is fantastic. We wouldn't add or change anything.
The music really was amzing fior the storyline!
Yes the main title does, it is very bright and all i also liked the fact that you guys made a colorfull bday card.
RYAN AND JULISSA
The conflict is between the student and whether or not to cheat.
1. Over the shoulder looking up at the teacher.
2. Close up on breaking pencil.
3. Close up on the answer sheet.
4. Teacher leaving the classroom.
Suggestions:
1. Make sure unwanted shadows are not present.
2. Start music a little later while student sharpens his pencil.
The climax occurred when the student picks up the paper and goes back to his seat.
In the resolution, the teachr comes back into the classroom ad the student turns in his test with a happy birthday card as well.
You could add to the resoution by addin a dissolve fade in order to show that more time has passed.
Camera shots:
We especially like the shot of the broken pencil because it helped emphasize th idea that the student would have to got to the front desk to sharpen it and fall upon the answers.
We think that you might add a shot of the student looking around as he takes the test looking nervous. This would emphasize the feeling that he is up to no good.
On a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 7. One edit we would change is before the teacher returns. We thought the outpoint was early.
We noticed between the student starting on the test again and him returning the test, you used a straight cut, instead use a dissolve to sow time has passed.
Music/Sound:
The first time music is used is when the student sees something on the teacher's desk. It was used to help emphasize the mood of mischief. It worked because it had an ominous feel to it.
This was also the most important use of music because of the mood it sets. You could aslo try having an upbeat song at the end.
Titles and Credits:
The title grabbed my attention right away and reflects on the rest of the video.
The title could have been more effective by adding one at the end.
the credits were good as far as we could tell.
overall we thought your film was good. Our favorite part was the rsolution and finding out that the student didnt cheat after all. our strongest suggestion.
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