The conflict was between giving the money back to its owner and keeping it and not doing the right thing. Some of the shots that helped contribute to the rising action were when Julissa was looking from side to side and when there was an extreme close up on her. The climax occurred when Liz asked Julissa if she was going to give the money back. The resolution was when Julissa gave the money back. You could add to the resolution by showing how Ryan reacts when he gets his money back and what happens after that. We specially like the shot in the beggining when theres a medium close up on the students' feet when they were waiting in line for lunch (or break) because it makes it look more realistic and professional. On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 9. We think that if you have cleaner cuts your video will be more perfect than it already is. The first time music came in was when students were walking to the lunch line and it helped the scene not seem so plain and borring as if it didn't have the music. Also, the music was perfectly used when Ryan dropped his money. It really emphasized the idea that Julissa was planning on keeping the money for herself. The titles were also good and complete. Overall, we thought your film was splendid. Great job! -Luis and Lizzy
Michael and Cody Story: The conflict was between the money taker and the money dropper. Here are shots, dialog, and actions that contributed to the rising action: 1. Scanning the bottom of people’s feet 2. Medium shot on Julissa 3. A close up on the money being dropped 4. Another close up on Julissa’s eyes Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action: 1. You could add more dialog to the video. 2. You could also have more props to really understand that he is in the cafeteria.
The Climax occurred when julissa picked yp the money. During the resolution julissa gives the money back once she gets caught by Liz. You could add the resolution by making one more line of dialogue. This would help give us the impression that Ryan was either happy or sad. We like the shots off all the feet at the cafeteria, because it helped us understand that all characters were different. We think you might add a shot right after Julissa gives the money to Ryan to show his expression. The new shot would add emotion and drama.
The conflict was between keeping the money and returning the money. The close up on Julissa’s eyes helped contribute to the rising action. The climax occurred when Liz asks Julissa if she is going to return the money. During the resolution, Julissa runs after Ryan yelling, “You forgot the money!!!” We especially liked the close up shot of Julissa’s eyes because it helped emphasize the idea that Julissa was deciding weither or not to take the money. On a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 10. One edit we would change was the shot when Ryan and Julissa bump into each other. We think that the out-point is too late. The music helped set the tone that these were all high school kids. It worked because it fit the age group well. The most important point in which the music was important was when Ryan dropped his money. It was used to help emphasize the mood of deep thought. It worked well. The title of the film definitely reflected the content. I t grabbed our attention because it was bold. We would suggest that you add some color to your opening title. The credits were done properly and all sounds and music were cited properly. Over all, we thought your film was a job well done. What we liked best was the use of music throughout your film. Zachary Andrade and Sam Tapia
The conflict was between keeping the money someone dropped, or returning it. Some shots and dialogue that contributed to the rising action are: the feet shot, the shot of the money on the ground, Julissa looking around, the close up of her eyes, the shot when she puts her foot on the money and drags it back, when Ryan bumps into her,and when Liz asks if shes going to give that back. To add to your rising action, you could show a shot of Liz sort of in the bckground, emphasizing that Julissa did not see her watching the whole thing. The climax occured when Julissa says "Hey you forgot your money." The resolution is when Julissa runs to Ryan and gives the money back. We think you could add to the resolution by showing a conversation between Julissa and Ryan when the money is given back, to show that Ryan is happy Julissa was honest enough to return the money he dropped. We especially like the close up shot of Julissa's eyes because it shows she is looking and contemplating to take the moeny or not, it was also very original. We think you should add a shot of Liz before she says her line to show she was there the whole time watching Julissa. On a scale of 1 to 10, we think rate your editing as a 10. One edit we wouild change was maybe cutting the feet shot a little, it is kind of long but we still think it works if you decide to keep it the way it is. We noticed that you used just straight cuts, and maybe putting a transition between the feet and the shot of Julissa, Ryan, and Bree. That way it's not just a jump to them. The title you used did grab our attention and added to the overall mood and theme of your story. One thing we noticed is you change the title style, we think you should try to keep it consistent throughout. The credits were done properly and all of the things used were sighted. Overall your film was probably the best. We liked the whole theme of the story and the music you used because it really added to the overall story. Our strongest suggestion is to add a shot of Liz to show she was watching Julissa. Another thing we noticed is there is no students in the background while Liz and Julissa have their conversation. -Alicia Fernandez & Jorge Chavez
the conflict was between stealing money or giving it back to the person.The shot of Julissa's eyes reall contributed to the rising action. the shot of Liz when she catches Julissa picking up the money and says "your gonna give that back right?" also adds to the rising action. I wouldn"t chamge anything at all to contribute to the rising action. During the resolution Julissa is hesitant on what to do. you could add to the resolution by maybe having another shot of ryan walking away. We like the close up of Liz when she asks Julissa if she is going to give the money back because it helped bring out the conflict. On a scale of 1-10, I would give the editing of this video a 10 because everything seemed to flow well and the message was presented well. The first time the music comes in is when Ryan drops the money.This worked well because it helped emphasize that something is going to happen with the money. The credits and titles were perfect. We wouldn't change anything. Overall we thought the video was really good. We really liked the message and how everything worked together. Elissa and Damon
cristabel-jessica the conflict is between the girl and herself because she's thinking on weather or not to give the boy back his money.in the end she gave the money back the value was to do the right thing. here are the shots/ dialog/ actions that helped contribute to the rising action, 1. when he drops his money. 2. the close up on the girls eyes`.3.when she looks around. 4 when she slowly pulls the money with her foot.
here are some sugestions about adding to the rising action. 1. you could show more shots of her surondings. 2.you could also show more clips of the boy who droped his money. the climax occured when the girl ran to the boy. during the resolution the girl gave back the boys money. you could add to the resolution by showing her after she returns the money how happy she is to do the right thing. this would give us the idea that giving the right thing is good. we especially like the shot of the 2nd girl when she asks girl 1 if shes going to return the money. it helped emphasize the idea that you cant get away with doing wrong. we think that you might add another shot right after the resolution. on a scale of 1-10 we give your editing a 9. we dont see anything you could change on your editing. the first music was quick and it felt like the highschool atmosphere. it worked well.i wouldnt suggest anything else. b. the scene where the girl looks around the music was most important because it gave off a very sneeky vibe.it worked perfectly dont change it. the title deffinetly reflected its content , it grabed our atention a lot. what we noticed about the title was that it helped conrtibute to the modd of the video, it was very bold and clear. overall, we thought your video was great what we liked best was the conflict of the video.
Story: The conflict was between giving him back his money and keeping it. The four shots that contribute to the rising action are... 1. The extreme close up of her eyes. 2. The shot of her pulling the money to her with her foot. 3. The shot where he bumps into her. 4. When she picks up the money. Some suggestions we have to build up the rising action are... 1. You could try spilling the juice on her so she'll have to move but then she doesn't. 2. Instead of having her look around so much she could just look to each side once. It almost looks fake. The climax occurred when the other student confronted her. During the resolution she gives the money back to the boy that was in front of her in line. You could add to the resolution by giving him a hug or telling him the truth about what she was going to maybe do. This would help give us the idea that she was really sorry about what she was about to do. Camera shots: We expecially like the extreme close up shot of her eyes, because it helped emphasize the idea that she was going to maybe steal the money. We think that you might add a shot right after she gives him the money. The new shot would be side of them talking or hugging. This would help strengthen the feeling that she is sorry. Edits: On a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing an 8. One edit we would change was durring the shot when she constantly looks around. we thought the out point was set too late. We noticed that between the guy bumping into the girl and the guy talking, you used a straight cut when he steps back. We would have used a special effect transition instead, because it's really awkward that he hits her and then we're just right in his face a step back. Use of music and sound effects: a.) The first time music came in was when the students are walking to the lunch line. It was used to help emphasize the mood of casualness or the idea that it's a normal day at school. It worked because in faded in so it wasn't overwhelming when the video started. b.) The point in the video when use of music was most important was when he dropped his money. It was used to show that there was an opportunity opened up for her. It definitely worked. We don't suggest something else. This works. Titles and credits: The title of the film reflected its contents too much. It grabbed our attention because it had the word "money" in it. A suggestion we have for the title is, "Finders Keepers?" The titles kept to the same format so it was consistent. The font and format of the title was effective. The Credits were done correctly. All the music/sound effects/images were cited. Overall: Overall, we thought your film was done very well. What we liked best was the other student stepping in and the extreme close up of the main acter's eyes. Our strongest suggestion is that you change the title.
MARIA AND DEMI this video had an internal conflict between julissa and wether to keep or return the money.the value of this video was doing the right thing like honesty. SHOTS:there were alot of great shots and u can clearly see they were all planed well. we really like the shot of julissa's eyes whitch created an intense emotion.we also like how at the bigining they only showed the feet whitch gave us an impresion that there was alot of diferent people.we also like the many shots that were used to ferlect julissa's emotion on whether to return or keep the money. SUGGESTIONS:we really liked your video and we thought you guys did a great job and i really dont have suggestions.only the music sounds kind of wierd in some point of the video. CAMERA SHOTS:the camera shots were great because there were alot of diferent ones.we think the the camera shots helped portray the message. EDITS:edits were really good,smooth,well planed. MUSIC:we liked tghe music at the biginig and the second music as well.they really whent with the mood of the video.we also liked the adding of the bell ringing at the very start of the video. CREDICTS:good credicts,good introdusing yourselfs at the end. OVERALL:the video was really well planed and the acting was good...we really liked how you guys portrayed your value of doing the right thing.
The conflict in this situation was two students waiting in the lunch line student drops his money and student behind steel s the money. 1. The lunch line on everyone s feet especially the character that steels the money 2. Exterme close up on money takers eyes 3. The moment where she picks up the money and her vest is flowy adds some dramatic to it. 4. When he bumps into her the resolution was when random student says "Aye are you gonna give that back?"then she goes running to give it back. You can, but I wouldn't really worry about it add possible the character confessing that she actually took the money. The scence where she picks the money from the floor and the whole pazazz to it was fabulous. I don't think you guys neeed to improve on anything it was swell. I would rate this a 9.5 it was good. One part I would kinda fix would be the part where she looks around all crazy was bit outt set point. What I think really helped out your video was the camera scences and all yoou guys did a good job on making it very organic almost as if I really was in school which I thought was bery important. overall y'all did fabulous I loved it catched myself watching it more than I should haved but it was awesome keep it up!
Shots, dialouge, actions: 1 The extreme close up of the eyes, it shows the true emotion of the sneakiness. 2 The opening sho of the "cafeteria" being set up 3 the shot of the feet--added realness to it all 4 the show of the money falling, set up everything the story and the problem.
I honestly can say I wouldn't anything. the climax is perfectly set up.
The resolution is when the girl grabs the money into her hands. The resolution is crystal clear. Again I would add nothing.
I wouldn't add any other shots either. Personally i think the film is pretty good on its own as is.
10.The editing is crisps and clean.
When there is a clean cut from the scene to the eyes it was very well used and i personally would have done the same.
All the music added was really well thought out and placed correctly. It added the to tension and the suspence. I would not hange any of it. From the beginning to end it all fits and conveys the story well.
The opening and ending credits/titles are done well. The title is fine and fits the story.
Overall i really enjoyed the film. It was well thought out and executed superbly.
The conflict was between giving the money back to its owner and keeping it and not doing the right thing. Some of the shots that helped contribute to the rising action were when Julissa was looking from side to side and when there was an extreme close up on her. The climax occurred when Liz asked Julissa if she was going to give the money back. The resolution was when Julissa gave the money back. You could add to the resolution by showing how Ryan reacts when he gets his money back and what happens after that. We specially like the shot in the beggining when theres a medium close up on the students' feet when they were waiting in line for lunch (or break) because it makes it look more realistic and professional. On a scale of 1-10, we rate the editing a 9. We think that if you have cleaner cuts your video will be more perfect than it already is. The first time music came in was when students were walking to the lunch line and it helped the scene not seem so plain and borring as if it didn't have the music. Also, the music was perfectly used when Ryan dropped his money. It really emphasized the idea that Julissa was planning on keeping the money for herself. The titles were also good and complete. Overall, we thought your film was splendid. Great job!
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Michael and Cody
ReplyDeleteStory:
The conflict was between the money taker and the money dropper.
Here are shots, dialog, and actions that contributed to the rising action:
1. Scanning the bottom of people’s feet
2. Medium shot on Julissa
3. A close up on the money being dropped
4. Another close up on Julissa’s eyes
Here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:
1. You could add more dialog to the video.
2. You could also have more props to really understand that he is in the cafeteria.
The
Climax occurred when julissa picked yp the money.
During the resolution julissa gives the money back once she gets caught by Liz.
You could add the resolution by making one more line of dialogue.
This would help give us the impression that Ryan was either happy or sad.
We like the shots off all the feet at the cafeteria, because it helped us understand that all characters were different.
We think you might add a shot right after Julissa gives the money to Ryan to show his expression. The new shot would add emotion and drama.
The conflict was between keeping the money and returning the money. The close up on Julissa’s eyes helped contribute to the rising action. The climax occurred when Liz asks Julissa if she is going to return the money. During the resolution, Julissa runs after Ryan yelling, “You forgot the money!!!” We especially liked the close up shot of Julissa’s eyes because it helped emphasize the idea that Julissa was deciding weither or not to take the money. On a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing a 10. One edit we would change was the shot when Ryan and Julissa bump into each other. We think that the out-point is too late. The music helped set the tone that these were all high school kids. It worked because it fit the age group well. The most important point in which the music was important was when Ryan dropped his money. It was used to help emphasize the mood of deep thought. It worked well. The title of the film definitely reflected the content. I t grabbed our attention because it was bold. We would suggest that you add some color to your opening title. The credits were done properly and all sounds and music were cited properly. Over all, we thought your film was a job well done. What we liked best was the use of music throughout your film.
ReplyDeleteZachary Andrade and Sam Tapia
The conflict was between keeping the money someone dropped, or returning it. Some shots and dialogue that contributed to the rising action are: the feet shot, the shot of the money on the ground, Julissa looking around, the close up of her eyes, the shot when she puts her foot on the money and drags it back, when Ryan bumps into her,and when Liz asks if shes going to give that back. To add to your rising action, you could show a shot of Liz sort of in the bckground, emphasizing that Julissa did not see her watching the whole thing. The climax occured when Julissa says "Hey you forgot your money." The resolution is when Julissa runs to Ryan and gives the money back. We think you could add to the resolution by showing a conversation between Julissa and Ryan when the money is given back, to show that Ryan is happy Julissa was honest enough to return the money he dropped.
ReplyDeleteWe especially like the close up shot of Julissa's eyes because it shows she is looking and contemplating to take the moeny or not, it was also very original. We think you should add a shot of Liz before she says her line to show she was there the whole time watching Julissa.
On a scale of 1 to 10, we think rate your editing as a 10. One edit we wouild change was maybe cutting the feet shot a little, it is kind of long but we still think it works if you decide to keep it the way it is. We noticed that you used just straight cuts, and maybe putting a transition between the feet and the shot of Julissa, Ryan, and Bree. That way it's not just a jump to them.
The title you used did grab our attention and added to the overall mood and theme of your story. One thing we noticed is you change the title style, we think you should try to keep it consistent throughout. The credits were done properly and all of the things used were sighted. Overall your film was probably the best. We liked the whole theme of the story and the music you used because it really added to the overall story. Our strongest suggestion is to add a shot of Liz to show she was watching Julissa. Another thing we noticed is there is no students in the background while Liz and Julissa have their conversation.
-Alicia Fernandez & Jorge Chavez
the conflict was between stealing money or giving it back to the person.The shot of Julissa's eyes reall contributed to the rising action. the shot of Liz when she catches Julissa picking up the money and says "your gonna give that back right?" also adds to the rising action. I wouldn"t chamge anything at all to contribute to the rising action. During the resolution Julissa is hesitant on what to do. you could add to the resolution by maybe having another shot of ryan walking away. We like the close up of Liz when she asks Julissa if she is going to give the money back because it helped bring out the conflict. On a scale of 1-10, I would give the editing of this video a 10 because everything seemed to flow well and the message was presented well. The first time the music comes in is when Ryan drops the money.This worked well because it helped emphasize that something is going to happen with the money. The credits and titles were perfect. We wouldn't change anything. Overall we thought the video was really good. We really liked the message and how everything worked together.
ReplyDeleteElissa and Damon
cristabel-jessica
ReplyDeletethe conflict is between the girl and herself because she's thinking on weather or not to give the boy back his money.in the end she gave the money back the value was to do the right thing.
here are the shots/ dialog/ actions that helped contribute to the rising action, 1. when he drops his money. 2. the close up on the girls eyes`.3.when she looks around. 4 when she slowly pulls the money with her foot.
here are some sugestions about adding to the rising action. 1. you could show more shots of her surondings. 2.you could also show more clips of the boy who droped his money.
the climax occured when the girl ran to the boy.
during the resolution the girl gave back the boys money. you could add to the resolution by showing her after she returns the money how happy she is to do the right thing. this would give us the idea that giving the right thing is good.
we especially like the shot of the 2nd girl when she asks girl 1 if shes going to return the money.
it helped emphasize the idea that you cant get away with doing wrong.
we think that you might add another shot right after the resolution.
on a scale of 1-10 we give your editing a 9.
we dont see anything you could change on your editing.
the first music was quick and it felt like the highschool atmosphere. it worked well.i wouldnt suggest anything else.
b. the scene where the girl looks around the music was most important because it gave off a very sneeky vibe.it worked perfectly dont change it.
the title deffinetly reflected its content , it grabed our atention a lot.
what we noticed about the title was that it helped conrtibute to the modd of the video, it was very bold and clear.
overall, we thought your video was great what we liked best was the conflict of the video.
Feedback given by Hayley Barker and Kayla Dawe.
ReplyDeleteStory:
The conflict was between giving him back his money and keeping it.
The four shots that contribute to the rising action are...
1. The extreme close up of her eyes.
2. The shot of her pulling the money to her with her foot.
3. The shot where he bumps into her.
4. When she picks up the money.
Some suggestions we have to build up the rising action are...
1. You could try spilling the juice on her so she'll have to move but then she doesn't.
2. Instead of having her look around so much she could just look to each side once. It almost looks fake.
The climax occurred when the other student confronted her.
During the resolution she gives the money back to the boy that was in front of her in line.
You could add to the resolution by giving him a hug or telling him the truth about what she was going to maybe do. This would help give us the idea that she was really sorry about what she was about to do.
Camera shots:
We expecially like the extreme close up shot of her eyes, because it helped emphasize the idea that she was going to maybe steal the money.
We think that you might add a shot right after she gives him the money. The new shot would be side of them talking or hugging. This would help strengthen the feeling that she is sorry.
Edits:
On a scale of 1-10 we rate the editing an 8. One edit we would change was durring the shot when she constantly looks around. we thought the out point was set too late.
We noticed that between the guy bumping into the girl and the guy talking, you used a straight cut when he steps back. We would have used a special effect transition instead, because it's really awkward that he hits her and then we're just right in his face a step back.
Use of music and sound effects:
a.) The first time music came in was when the students are walking to the lunch line. It was used to help emphasize the mood of casualness or the idea that it's a normal day at school. It worked because in faded in so it wasn't overwhelming when the video started.
b.) The point in the video when use of music was most important was when he dropped his money. It was used to show that there was an opportunity opened up for her. It definitely worked. We don't suggest something else. This works.
Titles and credits:
The title of the film reflected its contents too much. It grabbed our attention because it had the word "money" in it. A suggestion we have for the title is, "Finders Keepers?"
The titles kept to the same format so it was consistent. The font and format of the title was effective.
The Credits were done correctly. All the music/sound effects/images were cited.
Overall:
Overall, we thought your film was done very well. What we liked best was the other student stepping in and the extreme close up of the main acter's eyes. Our strongest suggestion is that you change the title.
MARIA AND DEMI
ReplyDeletethis video had an internal conflict between julissa and wether to keep or return the money.the value of this video was doing the right thing like honesty.
SHOTS:there were alot of great shots and u can clearly see they were all planed well. we really like the shot of julissa's eyes whitch created an intense emotion.we also like how at the bigining they only showed the feet whitch gave us an impresion that there was alot of diferent people.we also like the many shots that were used to ferlect julissa's emotion on whether to return or keep the money.
SUGGESTIONS:we really liked your video and we thought you guys did a great job and i really dont have suggestions.only the music sounds kind of wierd in some point of the video.
CAMERA SHOTS:the camera shots were great because there were alot of diferent ones.we think the the camera shots helped portray the message.
EDITS:edits were really good,smooth,well planed.
MUSIC:we liked tghe music at the biginig and the second music as well.they really whent with the mood of the video.we also liked the adding of the bell ringing at the very start of the video.
CREDICTS:good credicts,good introdusing yourselfs at the end.
OVERALL:the video was really well planed and the acting was good...we really liked how you guys portrayed your value of doing the right thing.
The conflict in this situation was two students waiting in the lunch line student drops his money and student behind steel s the money.
ReplyDelete1. The lunch line on everyone s feet especially the character that steels the money
2. Exterme close up on money takers eyes
3. The moment where she picks up the money and her vest is flowy adds some dramatic to it.
4. When he bumps into her
the resolution was when random student says "Aye are you gonna give that back?"then she goes running to give it back. You can, but I wouldn't really worry about it add possible the character confessing that she actually took the money.
The scence where she picks the money from the floor and the whole pazazz to it was fabulous. I don't think you guys neeed to improve on anything it was swell.
I would rate this a 9.5 it was good. One part I would kinda fix would be the part where she looks around all crazy was bit outt set point.
What I think really helped out your video was the camera scences and all yoou guys did a good job on making it very organic almost as if I really was in school which I thought was bery important.
overall y'all did fabulous I loved it catched myself watching it more than I should haved but it was awesome keep it up!
The conflict is between the Girl and herself.
ReplyDeleteShots, dialouge, actions:
1 The extreme close up of the eyes, it shows the true emotion of the sneakiness.
2 The opening sho of the "cafeteria" being set up
3 the shot of the feet--added realness to it all
4 the show of the money falling, set up everything the story and the problem.
I honestly can say I wouldn't anything. the climax is perfectly set up.
The resolution is when the girl grabs the money into her hands. The resolution is crystal clear. Again I would add nothing.
I wouldn't add any other shots either. Personally i think the film is pretty good on its own as is.
10.The editing is crisps and clean.
When there is a clean cut from the scene to the eyes it was very well used and i personally would have done the same.
All the music added was really well thought out and placed correctly. It added the to tension and the suspence. I would not hange any of it. From the beginning to end it all fits and conveys the story well.
The opening and ending credits/titles are done well. The title is fine and fits the story.
Overall i really enjoyed the film. It was well thought out and executed superbly.